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The Wishing Pool - Titanium Dragon



Rarity goes to a wishing pool to wish for a boyfriend. It goes as well as could be expected.

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The Wishing Pool

The stone walls shimmered with silvery light as Rarity slowly stepped into the cave.

It was an old place; a magical place. Flowers and moss sprouted underhoof, heedless of the fact that sunlight had not touched this place in ten thousand years. Origami birds chirped in the trees, their sharply-folded wings unblemished by the moisture that clung to the plants underhoof. A beautiful clockwork construct shaped like a pony stood against one wall, golden gears shimmering on its surface as it held its eternal vigil.

But it was the pool that caught Rarity’s attention. Blue as the sky, it rippled silently beneath the high ceiling, shedding light as if a lantern was lit beneath its surface. A half dozen statues ringed it, ponies, griffons, even a donkey, all gazing into the water, the stone untouched by the centuries.

Rarity swallowed as she padded softly over the mossy floor, eyes locked on the pool. She approached slowly, the scent of the impossible flowers filling her nares. Taking a deep breath, she moved to the bank and gazed into the rippling abyss. It seemed endless from here. Rarity’s face danced across the glowing water, refracted into a thousand tiny white unicorns that gazed back at her.

Her horn glowed, extracting a small piece of parchment from her saddlebags. Her hooves trembled as she lifted it, speaking slowly and glancing between the incantation and the Pool of Dreams.

Pool of wishes,
Pool of dreams,
Pool of greatness,
Pool of schemes.

Far I went beneath the Sun,
A journey’s prize I sought, now won.
Came I did, as few would dare,
Pool of Dreams, please hear my prayer.

The paper birds fell silent; the quiet tick of the clockwork pony stilled. Even the scent of the flowers seemed muted as a great weight pressed down over the whole of the cave. The pool boiled, great bubbles rising and popping as the too-blue waters churned, Rarity’s reflection disappearing as the water became nothing more than a sheet of shimmering silver light.

Meter and rhyme,
Sorrow and song.
Wishes aren't made
By those who belong.

A wish is desire:
A heart laid bare
Of one who believes
More should be there.

A genie grants you wishes three
But such a thing is not for me.
You have one chance to use my might
Be certain that you use it right.

Rarity swallowed loudly. “Anything?”

Your wish I'll grant
But beware this:
My heart is naught but amethyst.
I have no blood within my chest.
I feel no love within my breast.

I do not care for mortal things.
Before me, peasants are as kings.
The world is mine to bend and break
Be careful of the wish you make.

The voice died away, the cave swallowing the final echos as the pit of pure magic frothed before the unicorn’s hooves, awaiting her response.

Rarity took a deep breath.

“Well, if you must ask… Nopony loves me!” Rarity wailed, putting a hoof to her head and swooning, heedless of the beautiful flowers. “Yes, it is true. A pony so elegant, so regal as myself does not have a companion. It just isn’t fair. Is it really so much to ask that somepony born and raised in Canterlot would want me? Somepony bold, daring, adventurous? Certainly not some trophy stallion like Prince Blueblood, but a pony who is every bit my equal.”

She paused for a moment, sitting up. “But not in fashion. It would be terrible to compete with one another in a show.”

Rarity fell back again, leaning into the soft shrubbery. “Oh, some nights we would go to the finest restaurants in all of Equestria, whatever suited our fancy. Other nights, we would stay in alone, tucked into bed together, giggling and whispering sweet nothings.”

She shot back to her hooves. “But I don’t want somepony who spends all day doting on me! Not some slave or servant, bound to kiss my hooves for all eternity. And nopony who tries to lord their status over me, either; I want to be loved, not owned.” She shook her hoof sternly at the roiling mass of magic in the pit before her.

“Somepony sweet and kind. But I don’t want somepony who is too perfect.” Her hoof cut through the air. “Flaws are important. Even I have some. I suppose I could ask you to fix mine, but then I wouldn’t be me. Plus, I can imagine how that might end poorly.” She eyed the too-lifelike statues ringing the pool for a moment, before coughing into her hoof.

“No. I just want somepony who loves me. Imperfect, but perfect for me.” She put a hoof to her chin. “And, you know, much as I am a lady, I would like it if I could take the lead at times. But not too often! Balance.”

The pooled magic frothed, droplets of iridescent fluid rising into the air, only to boil away to nothingness before her eyes. It churned with all the colors of the rainbow, periwinkle blue and sea-green mingling with the burning red of the setting sun and the vibrant purple of the aurora.

Is that all?

Rarity casually fluffed her mane. “I would like to be a princess, too. If that wouldn’t be too much trouble, of course.”

All the colors in the world and several no pony had named flooded into every nook and cranny of the cavern. The sound of a thousand waterfalls rushed into Rarity’s ears as the mossy floor vanished beneath her hooves, leaving her hanging in an infinite expanse of white. She could smell the magic, feel it coursing through her body, magic as great as that of the Elements of Harmony themselves.

And then it was over, and Rarity found herself at the water’s edge once more. The origami birds flew from branch to branch, chirping and fluffing their paper wings as if nothing had happened. The clockwork pony stared impassively, gears quietly clicking away as it resumed its vigil.

Fate has bent and broke to your will.
Soon you shall see your wish fulfilled.
Away at home your love awaits.
Return to her for your first date.

“Oh! Thank you! Thank you!” Rarity bowed as she began slowly backing up towards the entrance. She turned, stepping off the moss before pausing with one hoof frozen in midair.

“Wait… ‘her’?”


Twilight nuzzled up against Rarity’s jaw. “Oh, I’m so glad you’re back! We’ve got so much to catch up on! I uhm, took the liberty of making reservations at Chez Gusteau. You know, in case you wanted to eat dinner while we were talking. You know, about things.” Twilight blushed. “By candlelight.”

Rarity sighed.

Author's Note:

I'd like to thank Not_a_Hat and Foehn for their help editing this piece and making sure the poetry flowed properly. They both were a big help in cleaning this up and removing overly flowery verbiage. The nares are my fault.

I'd also like to thank everyone in the Writeoff Assocation who gave me feedback on the original version of this story, which made the finals in last summer's "Best Laid Plans" minific writeoff.

Comments ( 180 )
Greki #1 · Feb 5th, 2016 · · 1 ·

Okay, this was hilarious.

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Hah, thanks. Glad I made you chuckle. :twilightsmile:

Wow, I loved the poetry in the story, that was really good. Gotta love Rarity's reaction about Twilight though, it made me laugh so thank you for that. Now if you will excuse me, I have to go put this on my favourites list now. Great story by the way!!!:pinkiehappy:

I didn't expect that ending at all! I expected something very, very different (I didn't see the comedy tag.) I enjoyed this quite a lot, though! 'Tis a wonderful story you've produced. :yay:

Ah yes, I remember this. How very Rarity, to focus on every little detail but miss an essential part of the big picture. I'm glad to see this on Fimfiction.

Oh I get it.

She got Twilight because of that last bit of the wish, asking to be a princess!

Clever High Moon - I mean, Titanium Dragon! You sneaky little bugger!

Y O U S N E A K Y L I T T L E B U G G E R I N D E E D!

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It has been a while since I last stretched my poetic muscles, and that was a very different sort of poetry. I'm glad the poems here worked for you as well; it was quite fun writing them (though rather time intensive; writing metered rhyming poetry is slow going compared to prose).

Thank you for reading; I'm glad you liked it so. :heart:

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Yeah, only took me six months to get it ready for here. Almost exactly six months, in fact. :trixieshiftright:

I added a fair bit of extra poetry to it, and I like it a lot better for it; it adds more of a sense of gravitas to the Pool of Dreams.

How very Rarity, to focus on every little detail but miss an essential part of the big picture.

Well, you know what they say, the devil's in the details. :raritydespair:

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You sneaky little bugger

Now, now, you're confusing me with Horizon.

I'm definitely not a changeling. :trixieshiftright:

6905251
I'm glad you liked it, even if it wasn't quite what you were expecting. :heart:

Cute, but far too short. I appreciate that this isn't another bait-and-switch. I don't think I'd forgive you if it were.

6905309 Yeah, no links please. Horizon doesn't want me over there.

It's a long story and he'd get mad if you brought my name up.

I don't want to upset him...not after...the accident...with his...

He's been hurt enough as it is.

6905319
Hoping that we'd get to see Rarity and Twilight go on that date? :heart:

I'm glad you thought it was cute.

And yes, not another bait-and-switch. I adore twists in general too much.

I think my next story won't include any major twists at all.

Of course, that's exactly what I'd say if I was planning to include one... :trixieshiftright:

6905337 Good story by the way if I didn't make it clear.

Tell Horizon I'm sorry for his loss.

6905361
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

And don't worry. I'm sure whatever you broke will grow back.

Probably. :trixieshiftright:

6905366 That's rather insensitive, assuming you didn't know otherwise...

:moustache: Twilight how could you!
:twilightsmile: Wut?
:raritycry: Noooooooooooooooooooooooo! I should of wished for an improvement in sweeties cooking
:rainbowhuh: Spike's so mad
:fluttercry: some pony's in big trouble mister!
:pinkiesmile: fun fun fun fun
:applejackconfused: that was a pony of a different color
:derpytongue2: I just don't know what happened

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Don't worry, I have absolutely no idea whatsoever what we're talking about. :pinkiesmile:

6905385
Poor Spike. :heart:

6905396 Death. We're talking about death here, you fool.

She was so close to out witting the pool. This a a great short story and funny.

6905405
That isn't very nice; he's probably off collecting a wizard's soul somewhere. It isn't nice to talk about him behind his back.

Though I don't think he tends to hold a grudge.

6905337
Basically. It's no secret that I'm hardcore Twi shipper, and Rarity's one of my favorite pairings for her.

haha, yessss. this is fantastic. I love it. Especially the poetry; I liked how much was conveyed through it.

6905418 Okay I'll just make this clearer to you.

Someone who knew him died.

6905426
Oh. I thought we were doing a bit. :applejackconfused:

See, in my family, we just blurt that sort of thing out. Cuts down on the confusion and accidental dead parrot sketches.

6905431 If you want to know who it was that died...

It was this joke that died. I can piss about with people too, TD. Sleep tight, hard cheeks! Bwa ha ha ha!

6905413
Breaking reality is hard work, man. Irony makes it easier; lets you wedge it in between the cracks. :ajsmug:

Glad you liked it!

6905422
Thank you! Poetry is a really interesting thing; I really am fascinated by the flow of it, but it is quite difficult to craft properly. Took a fair bit of work (and some help from my editors making sure all the lines scanned correctly, with the proper meter and flow).

I'm happy that it worked for you. It was fun making it. :twilightsmile:

6905450 Speaking of poetry, I also really liked the rhymes to.

:rainbowlaugh: Even with the comedy tag, wasn't sure how badly Rarity's wish would turn out. She got off lightly. With the "born in Canterlot" bit, was almost hoping for Spike, was half expecting her to return home and find nothing different. That Canterlot bit probably also excludes the rest of the Princesses.

At least Rarity avoided some of the more obvious pitfalls with wish making, while still staying in character.

I read this story once and didn't get it. Then I read it again and realized I'm just a bad reader. Whoops. :derpytongue2:

Soon you shall see your wish is fulfilled.

But this bit tweaked my Grammar Nazi radar really hard for some reason. This is such a tiny, tiny issue, and no one is going to care about this but me, but . . . I don't know if that "is" should be a "be." Y'know, because the present subjunctive mood seems to fit better here. Seems like eventualities should go with subjunctive, even though I can't find any examples for this. I can't tell which version is correct. I don't think I've seen subjunctive used in this case before, but it just sounds better in this particular case. Gosh, this is annoying me.

Alternatively, you could omit the "is" entirely and not only circumvent this entire issue, but bring down this line to eight syllables (in line with the rest of the stanza).

. . . Told you no one cares. :fluttershyouch: I spent more time researching this than reading the story.

Honestly expected some kind of dark twist in which Rarity died or something.

Oh well, this was still a great read regardless. Twilight is perfect for Rarity! :twilightsmile:

6905421
Fair enough! Admittedly RariLight is an idea which interests me, but sadly I don't really have any "proper" RariLight stories planned at the moment. I do plan to eventually cover all 15 mane 6 ships though with "proper" shipfics.

You know, between the overwhelming pile of RariJack I apparently want to produce. :trixieshiftright:

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Glad it amused you. :twilightsmile:

I don't know if you're familiar with the Xanth novels, but in one of them, there is a "wishing ring" that "grants wishes", but it never seems to really do anything. And yet, everything seems to work out right anyway, for completely unrelated reasons (for which the wing always claims victory). :trixieshiftright:

6905513
Hehe, well you never know with wishes. Glad you approved of the outcome, even if Rarity didn't. :raritywink:

6905502
Good idea. Fixed according to the last suggestion. Thank you! :twilightsmile:

>use "boyfriend" in description
>not "coltfriend"
> 0/10

nah, it was lit fam. Now you have to read Spoilers so you can revel in how much better your comedy is than mine.

6905578
Hear me out with this idea, alright?

Rarity grudgingly agrees to go on that date. Twilight pours her heart out, gushing about how Rarity's such a sweetheart, she's always had such a beautiful heart, she's always been so generous and so caring and from the first moment they met, Rarity's treated her like nopony else has: with the care and grace she would expect from a princess.

Rarity's voice hitches. She can't just refuse Twilight's affections outright, not when that clearly came from the heart. In an effort to let her down easy, Rarity explains the wishing pool, how she asked for somepony who'd fulfill all these criteria. Twilight gets all teary eyed because she thinks Rarity believes that she (Twilight) is all of those things, and is just over the moon that Rarity feels the same way and loudly professes her undying love, promising that even if she lives forever, she would never, ever consider taking another lover because Rarity is just perfection incarnate.

THEN

Rarity wakes up in a cold sweat...

Cuddled up with Twilight, pictures of their marriage all around the room. She sighs again, but happily. She got her wish long ago and she's been living the dream ever since, no silly pool needed.

6905593
That's some mighty fine cover art you've got there.

I'll have to take a look. :heart:

Well, you managed to fail to meet my expectations. For shame.

I was so sure you'd somehow make it Applejack.

6905435 ...I can't believe I fell for it. :facehoof:

Anyway, very nice story. :D

6905684
I... I write about things other than RariJack!

Sometimes!

6905719
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :heart:

6905629 not bad for 10 minutes with Microsoft Paint, eh? :ajsmug:

Well, that could've turned out worse.

6905883
That story will see the light of day. Whether by my pen or TD's remains to be seen.

Hahaha, perfect! Totally perfect, Titanium!

I needed that to cheer me up today. Though admittedly, from the description on the story, I was expecting something dark, not a rom com.

6906023
If you want to write it, go right ahead. There's nothing wrong with recursive fanfiction, or writing a story inspired by another story.

Heck, Horizon has a collection of nothing but such things.

6906028
Thanks, Moose! I'm glad it cheered you up. That's always a great thing to hear. :pinkiesmile:

As far as the summary goes... I was trying to avoid putting the whole plot into the summary, but that made it kind of a bit tricky to write. At least the tags are there to give some warning. I hope. :trixieshiftright:

Well, for as much planning as she provided, she forgot to mention the one crucial detail that would have prevented the ending as it was :rainbowlaugh:
A nice amusing read, good job!

6906246
You're welcome! I'm glad it made you smile. :twilightsmile:

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