After failing the rodeo, Applejack goes to work with Cherry Jubilee for a while. However, something just doesn't work with her... Family, friends, the town itself, she can't get them out of her head. And she can't focus as long as their there. So after an offhanded remark from her, Cherry offers an interesting solution...Dodge Junction's local therapist, Doctor Tera Ipnosi.
Just a little plot bunny that wouldn't go away, weird way to practice OC writing I know, but I'm glad I got this one out.
Special thanks to jidbrony for pre reading and Izanagi for editing! You guys are awesome
And a link to the coverart, if the person on DA doesn't want me using it, I'll happily take it down.
http://littleponyforever.deviantart.com/art/Applejack-Kicking-A-Tree-299240667
to strange for me
6355597 Eh...I've seen stranger.
Rerorerorerorerorerorerorerorerorerorerore...
That aside, I'll be sure to read this...
Eventually!
Wow! I can't believe how much your style has improved in so short a time! Excellent work! I liked the story and the plot premise. Interesting peek into the workings of Apple Jack's mind and that doctor's theraputic use of magic.
Interesting, when you told me "Cherryjack" & I saw this in the feed, I honestly thought it was gonna be darker. But this works as well.
Oh my! That is strange, yet refreshing to know she isn't purely insane. So if there was amnesia version of Jack and had to choose between CheeryJack or AppleJack. I can imagine drama, yet that won't happen since AppleJack will still go with this. I wonder how the others will react.
6358407 maybe will get a sequel.
I can say that I haven't really seen a concept like this before. It is an interesting, and at the same time, somewhat scary one. The idea of forgetting your true life in the place for another is pretty frightening. Not to say that it's bad, but actually a very interesting one. The character Tera was interesting and developed, and your grammar looked to be in order. I can say that I liked this story. I hope this was able to help.
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It was a great help, thanks so much.
I won't lie, this was pretty good. I feel kind of dumb asking, but is the ending implying Cherry is going to keep Applejack like that?
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No need to apologize, thanks for enjoying it, I put my all into this one
To answer, id like to leave that up to reader interpretation...for now, at least.
It's a unique take on the hypnosis genre, although I kind of want a follow-up to see what happens afterwards, especially with a scenario like in the original episode wherein they come well before she would have had enough money to be able to match and the hypnosis would still be in effect.
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I'm actually working on the sequel right now!
And as for that thing with the Mane 6, that's a maybe...I'm still working that one out.
Owin', not owin.
Nothin', not nothin.
Whenever you are using slang dialogue, and you cut out the ending "g" of the word, you need to replace it with an apostrophe.
Do you mean "audible"?
Other than that, I could find no grammatical faults.
Well, although this was short, it was a nice and interesting read. I always enjoy fics that attempt to delve into psychology, as that is going to be one of my majors. And the addition of magic working in tandem with those mental exercises was a nice and original take. I had an idea of something like it a while back, but that is for another time.
Out of all the characters, Tera was the most enjoyable and developed. The pacing had a nice flow, and the characters read naturally. All in all, for what you were trying to do with this fic, I'd say you succeeded. And I would thoroughly enjoy a second chapter.
P.S. If you never want some advice or pointers on the aspects of psychology and/or hypnosis, I'm happy to help.
The technical term is called contraction, just in case you weren't aware of it.
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Yeah, but I think it's best to concisely explain, rather than use certain terminology that might be too vague or unknown to others.
I used to gobbledygook up everything I wrote, and people either complained about having to look every other word up, or they just didn't read all of it. So now, I try to explain as clearly as I can. I am disinclined to optate to provide others with an unduly arduous experience.
P.S. Sorry, I don't mean to be an ass. I just saw a fun opportunity to troll.
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It's been so long since I'd seen the word "optate" used in anything I actually had to look it up!
That's a good thing, though, and I appreciate it. That brings us to my next point: as writers the ideal should be that we are always striving to improve our craft, adding to our knowledge as we go. This, hopefully, would have a postive effect for the writer being addressed.
Well, gobbledygook (a very interesting word) aside, my intention is always to help, whether that be to help another gain useful knowedge or improve their craft, as I'd said. I mean, isn't that the real intent of criticism, providing it's constructive? I would hope so.
Bless you, sir, for having the decency to admit it!
That being said I will accept it in the fun and light hearted manner in which it was presented. 
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Yay!
Friends?
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Well, that was interesting...
Who knew that one simple hypnosis could also re-write Applejack's Cutie Mark; and therefore her whole destiny?
You've made an interesting read here, Kirito...
But one thing I did notice:
It should be 'Your' instead of 'You're'. 'You're' is a shorter form for 'you are'; so the sentence starts as "You are name is Cereza Jubilee." But I know it was just a misspell, and that it can be rectified easily.
Further, what drove you to choose the name Cereza? If I didn't know any better, that's like turning Applejack into Bayonetta...
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Thanks! It'll take me a while to read what you have on your story so far, but thanks for the compliment! And no, he didn't completely change her cutie mark. It was like what Starlight did in Season five, they painted over her mark, then drew over it. Should have made that more clear though, my bad.
And as for that thing, I'm taking Italian in college, so I jokingly put Cereza as it was the Italian word for Cherry. Just like with Tera=Therapist. And Ipnosi=Hypnosis.
An amazing writing from an amazing author!
I wonder what would happen if Applejacks friends visited like in Last Round Up
This is awesome.
How's the sequel to this coming along?