In this alternate timeline, Tirek has been successful in his attempts to take over Equestria. The princesses, Discord, and the former element bearers along with Spike and Shining Armor are locked in Tartarus. Equestria is now controlled by a tyrant and resistance has proven futile.
But Tirek has made one crucial mistake, he has left Discord alive. While Tirek’s rule begins to turn Equestria into a nightmarish dystopia, Discord is making plans. The seals of Tartarus are slowly breaking around Discord and when he’s free he plans on fighting Tirek with every dirty trick he can muster, whether it involves psychologically tormenting Tirek or giving Equestria’s now magicless pony’s weapons from worlds unknown. Tirek has crossed a line and Discord no longer has to worry about his conscience when it comes to fighting another monster.
Battle lines are being drawn and opportunists from around the land flock to Tirek’s banner. Discord and the remnants of the Equestrian military are the only hope of a broken world. There are no elements, no easy paths to victory this time. A ruthless battle of immortals is coming, and the ponies of Equestria are going to have to fight for the happiness they once took for granted….
quite a long story for a first outing. Hope it's good. Certainly a cool concept. Welcome to Fimfiction!
Haven't started reading yet but this concept is awesome. Hopefully the writing matches up to the idea's potential. :-)
Okay, pretty good. The pacing is a little fast, and there are places where there should be more emotion. I also think the introduction of so many deadly magicless weapons is going to continue to be a problem for Equestria. But I liked Discord being ruthless and doing what he had to do to win. I think maybe he should have sent an apology to Fluttershy as well as to Celestia, and I'd have liked to see more reaction from the princesses or the Mane 6 on what happened to him, but it was a good plan and he pulled it off well.
6243385 Thank you I appreciate such an honest and thorough review. I'm a new writer and I wanted to leave the mane six out of my first story as I was worried I wouldn't be able to write them well. The fact that you even bothered to look at my story makes me so happy. I'm not a huge fan of the show however the reason I got into writing fimfiction was because of you. I thought fanfiction writing was crappy but then I stumbled across your story "Traitor" and grew addicted to your stories! I really appreciate your review and I made sure to make Discord so strong due to you always complaining about other writers making him a weak idiot!
6243192 I hope you like it, thanks for looking at it!
After reading this, I can easily see similar stories appearing in the near future. Good concept, and a good story. I thoroughly enjoyed this fic
Huh, a Discord who wins through guile, and tactics instead of just snapping his fingers. Pretty good.
Looks great so far!!
Great story!
This looks SO cool!
I'm hyped
6252234 I would agree.
6252234 neat profile pic
6243385 exactly my review.