• Member Since 14th Sep, 2014
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MrAlterad


A brony living in the states that really likes Fallout.

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The Changeling General, war hero, driven to win at any cost. The Moon Princess, Equestria's guiding light, seeking to protect her ponies from an unseen threat.
Between these two, a secret war was waged. Between these two, stood a young changeling princess: Chrysalis
Born of a different color from her mother's hive, Chrysalis finds herself being drawn towards the center of the conflict. With those she holds dear backing her, she'll march into the heart of this war, changing the fate of her race. For better, or worse...


Set in the Trio-verse, an AU where Celestia was banished, instead of Luna. No prior reading required.
Want to give my most sincere thanks to Seiya, Llyrisviel, and docontra for their help editing this tale.

Chapters (29)
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Comments ( 369 )

I look fowards to see where this goes.

Fascinating. I will be interested in seeing how Chrysalis grows to be the changling she comes to be.

> "Chyrsalis is a princess; a promising hatchling that will one day be queen. However, she has a major flaw that could spell trouble for her entire race; she's sympathetic towards her food."

It should be:

> "Chrysalis is a princess; a promising hatchling that will one day be queen. However, she has a major flaw that could spell trouble for her entire race; she's sympathetic towards her food."

You misspelled "Chrysalis".

6277264 I had to read that three times to notice the 'r' and 'y' were switched. :twilightblush:
Thank you so much for pointing that out! :twilightsmile:

It has only been a single chapter with Momo, Darrin and Bulwark (technically one and a half for Bulwark) and I feel like I have already grown accustomed to them. I swear if any of them die by the end of this arc of the story or any arc of this entire story I am going to be so, so sad. :fluttercry:

This is just a testament to how well you can write up characters, especially OC's who I generally find annoying. Amazing as always keep up the great work. :twilightsmile:

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As the author, you see what should be there. Indeed, readers often see what should be their and read "Dog is man's best fiend." without noticing that it says "Fiend" instead of "Friend".

You have editors (having somepony who did not write the text, thus who does not see how it should look but sees how it is, is a trick going back thousands of years) but we have technology too which helps both the author and editors

* Look for red underlines.
* Run the story through text-to-speech.

It was text-to-speech that revealed the error:

I like to go to sleep listening to stories. The last story, I must relisten in the morning because I only get part of it because I fell asleep. I heard the misspelling. I heard "Tshirsalis" instead of "Krisalis". When I wrote my comment "Chyrsalis" did not spellcheck but "Chrysalis" did.

“Why teal!? Why couldn't it have been red? Even purple would have been acceptable!"

Does Chrysalis have any teal on her?
i.imgur.com/fRynZzl.jpg

6279383 Her mane, tail, and chest(belly?) are teal. Pretty sure her wings are teal too, just translucent. Her eyes are green, and her back is a gradient from green to teal. Not sure if any of that helps. :twilightsheepish:

Ah, already we see Mantis' motivation: Greed.

I would love to see inside a changeling hive if one was real, but they would very quickly turn me into food right away. Your changelings really have character to them, as much as any pony. I wonder what their schools are like?

"#1 Dad" in-greed!

Why, I motion that we petition the queen to change the General's name to "War." At least then, we'll all know exactly what he's good for.

So he has the same parenting style as Vegeta in the android and cell sagas when he interacts with future trunks.

Mantis was in control of this exchange, weather she liked it or not, a realization that brought Darrin's words to mind.

"whether"
When Chrysalis is older, she should have Mantis beat himself to death.

You're still to weak to challenge me; you'll always be too weak, it's in your color.

"too"
Gonna really have to dominate him later and mentally torture him. Nopony puts down Chrysalis.

6307790 Actually, you underlined the wrong "to"

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Thanks, good catch. I wrote my comment before pointing out the error so just picked a "to".

Haha, I like the little Author's note at the end.

Thanks for the update! :twilightsmile:

Then picolo came and killed mantis

“You're gonna get rid of him, but haven't planned his replacement.” Chrys said, letting out a sigh, “Maybe you really on his schemes a little too much, mother.”

You should change the really in Chrys' second sentence to rely.

Next to it were seven shell fragments of varying shades of red, orange, and yellow, as well as an almost complete amber eggshell.

I thought the first chapter said that all the shells were amber, since the queen is amber. Chrysalis was different because she herself is a young queen.

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I thought the first chapter said that all the shells were amber, since the queen is amber. Chrysalis was different because she herself is a young queen.

**The author proceeds to slam his head into the table; repeatedly.** :twilightoops::applejackconfused::derpyderp1:
Red? Yellow? I meant to say that all the eggs are amber! All but that pesky tealish one.
Thank you very much for pointing that out. :twilightblush: I done goofed.

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I saw that.
*proceeds to point in multiple directions every few moments*
But I thought that was the issue with... Mantis?

Other than that, the chapter was an enjoyable read. Nice to see that even the queen doesn't like Mantis, just would have to be careful how he is tossed out of the hive.

This chapter, and the story in general, is filled with interesting examples of values dissonance, with Amber being a loving mother while discussing kidnapping Luna, and Chrysalis' friends taking the time to cheer her up after her favorite "food" dies, despite not really getting why she's so upset. And while we know where it leads, these little things make the journey much more interesting. I can't wait for more!

wait wait Wait! Luna raises the sun?
Have i missed something here? I will be honest that this has caught me off guard.

Whats going on!
lol good story though :)

6343959 Luna raises the sun??

What happened to Celestia?

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This is an AU where Celestia fell from grace and was banished to the sun, instead of Luna to the moon. Celestia has her influence in this story, it'll just be subtle compared to Luna's involvement. :twilightblush:
Hope that clears things up.

Chrys looked to Bulwakr for a moment longer

Oops, typo!

Princess Luna raises the sun and moon every single day.

I am kinda liking this universe, just not sure where to start next in reading.

Come on Bulwark, let's return to the cocoons, I'm done letting this feather-brain waste my time.

"wasting"

Hmmmmmmmmmmm, I am trying to think why I haven't read more about this. I adore Luna... maybe there is a Trixie in this universe. Sunset, Luna, Twilight are all great; I just have a peculiar dislike for Trixie.

6344036 Hmm...

I hope that Celestia is eventually reformed - or I'll be rather disappointed.

6344047 Something tells me you haven't read the rest of the series. X3

With this chapter, I feel like this may become your best story yet.

Thank you for the story update! :twilightsmile:

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I adore Luna... maybe there is a Trixie in this universe. Sunset, Luna, Twilight are all great;

The main stories in this AU feature all four of them as major characters.

I just have a peculiar dislike for Trixie.

Trixie's life experiences are different, so she only shares certain core character traits with the cannon version. As a result, she may be different enough for you to enjoy.

6344235 Your comment on the chapter made me very happy. :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile: Thank you!

Dang. This started out looking similar to a story that I'd had in my head but didn't trust myself to do it justice, but now that I noticed that detail about the Luna/Celestia swap, I can't help but feel a little disappointed. From what I've seen so far, it doesn't seem relevant, an extra unnecessary detail. If reading the other stories isn't necessary, then what's the point of connecting this to them at all?

Don't get me wrong: I haven't been dissuaded from this story. I just want to know the reasoning behind this.

6344595 Not having read the other stories presents a unique perspective on The Teal Changeling that I don't want to ruin for you. Suffice to say, Chrysalis is a big part of this AU, and this story explains how that importance came about.

From what I've seen so far, it doesn't seem relevant, an extra unnecessary detail.

Luna is a major character in this story, so it is relevant. She's going to be late to the party, but she's just as important to the story as Chrys is.

If reading the other stories isn't necessary, then what's the point of connecting this to them at all?

The AU inspired the story, and the story was written because it's an important part of the AU. :twilightblush: Reading the other stories isn't necessary because this takes place long before all of them. The most relevant difference between the AU and cannon is the princess swap. A part of this story's core is how this swap changes the fate of Chrysalis and the changelings.

I say no prior reading required, because it's true. :ajsmug: It's presented as an Alternate Universe, and the biggest difference has been eluded to several times. Does it take away from the story? If you're a Celestia fan, than it probably does, and for that, I'm sorry. :fluttercry:

I hope that cleared things up. :twilightsmile:

Wow, what happened to Chrysalis in between now and Fillies of Canterlot Castle must of been something. :derpyderp2:
Can't wait.

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Pretty sure that thing is called "Mantis."

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This is a side story to a handful of other stories in this world, you should read
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/249355/lunas-protg
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/260328/the-fillies-of-canterlot-castle
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/253480/midnights-radiance
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/268002/shadows-flare
for the rest of the story. Be warned- the other fics will include details that might give you little spoilers to this one.

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I went ahead and read 'Midnight's Radiance'; I enjoyed it.

I may read the others later.

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Luna's Protege explains why Luna has those three as her students/how she chose them, Shadow's Flare is a direct continuation of Midnight's Radiance, and Fillies is exactly what it says on the tin- filly Twilight, Trixie, and Sunset.

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ahh that clears it up now :pinkiehappy: thanks

This was definitely a setup chapter. I look forward to the pay off in the next one.

Is mantis planning to kill Chrys?

6361722 That's absurd! If Chrys died, Mantis would be offed by the queen ... right?

No! Queen Amber you will fall! No!!!

she's had to remove the shells of her other clutchlings from her egg, leaving just Momo and Darrin.

Does this signify who are her friends?

“Because ponies can talk and have feelings too.” Amber replied heatedly

Admitting that makes it harder to defend the queen's position. Actively enslaving creatures who's only real difference is not being born a changeling.

She then hopped on his back, not feeling up to walking herself.

I didn't see any action where Chryssi jumped off Bulwark's back. The last mention of her position was when she stomped on his back in frustration.

"Culling the herd."

Wonder how Amber would feel about that. Sledge seems more loyal to Mantis than to the royal family.

If Amber isn't super charged with love or Luna has better fighting prowess than her sister, I can see things going pair shaped for the changelings very quickly. I haven't read any of the other stories in this universe but I can see Luna being very cold and ruthless in the middle of battle. Wiping the floor with the queen then heaving her body into masses of changelings to demoralize the enemy wouldn't be far-fetched at all in my head.

The changelings could also face a combined force of ponies that have learned how to work together. Which could very well decimate their ranks it things came to open warfare.

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Only if the queen's proclamation is backed up with action.

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Does this signify who are her friends?

Yes.

I didn't see any action where Chryssi jumped off Bulwark's back. The last mention of her position was when she stomped on his back in frustration.

In between A and B she hopped on the table. :twilightsmile:

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She asked, making Chrys shake her head as she hopped off Bulwark's back, walking over the table towards the Queen.

Ok, found it! I don't know how I missed that, I even read the section a couple times.

I am trying to work myself up to read Luna's Protégé, but I just have a hard time reading anything with Trixie as a protagonist.

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