Not everypony is perfect. Especially not Stuttershy. This pony is shy, a bit slow, and has a stutter.
During an event with some stallions, this poor pony meets Fluttershy. Maybe somepony who will accept him for who he is?
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This is my first 'cutsie' fic. Any feedback is welcomed, as long as it doesn't troll!
Anyways, I hope this goes somewhere, I really tried a bit while making this. Wanted to throw in a bit of difficulty, but one-shottedness into it. So, we'll see what happens.
looks good!
i hope it goes somewhere too
good for a first cutsie wootise fic 
As someone with an actual stutter, I hope this story goes well.
Very good story idea, I like it!
638186 very well written, dude! Great job!
This is a really, really cute idea. To give you some suggestions though, regarding Stuttershy's little speech impediment here...
Stuttering can be very difficult to portray through written dialogue. If it isn't vital to the story's plot-line; it's always best to leave it out all together. However, that isn't the case for your story. Whenever you're writing out a stutter, be careful that you don't demand extra legwork from the reader to decipher it. There were a few pieces of dialogue here that came very close to ruining the general flow of your prose. Sometimes it's best not to accentuate on every, word, but to instead describe what his speech sounds like in the actual narrative. The best thing to remember is that only the most extreme of stuttering cases will fumble on every word, like Stuttershy here.
I did a little research and found some sources regarding the matter that I think you could benefit from here and here. Good luck!
Cute
Pp-ppp-pretty g-g-gg-ggood st-st-stst-st-st-st-story!
...I feel bad now
Seriously though, good story
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Thank you for all the feedback, Bronies! I'm glad a few people like this. I might as well get to a few things:
GingerNutGin -- Yeah, I found it really hard to write Stuttershy, and his speech impediment was an actual plot to this story. I'll look at what you gave me, and make some revisions later, so that the reader doesn't get so bored at trying to decipher what the hay he's saying.
To some of the rest -- I only wrote this as a one shot. But, if people demand more, I'll be willing to add onto it. We'll see where it goes.
And, finally -- Thank you for the support and feedback, once again. Maybe this cutsie fic will go somewhere? Who knows.
641130 Hope he's okay.
641192 Well, I'm glad I remind you of him.
640522 Thanks for those tips. I'll probably go into editing this sometime tonight.
I really respect you for making this. It truly is a good story, and this is something we need to see more of.
641793 Thank you.
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Thought about it.
Yes, this'll be a few more chapters long.
New chapter tomorrow!
Thanks for the advice, GingerNut!
642781 Lul.
I hope I did better with the speech impediment. It's hard trying to work it, even with Ginger's tips. I'll continue trying, until it's not lengthy for you guys to decipher!
644008 It'll get exceptionally less, I promise. It'll just take me time to shorten it properly.
this was a great chapter. cant wait for more.
Awesome, want some more.
645225>>645052 Give me a bit, and I'll get working on it.
I can clop to this.
I need to put this on Hiatus until after next week. I have a history project I've been procrastinating on that I need to get to.
I'm really sorry.
dude this fic is awesome i can almost never find a good fluttershy fic
665126 Glad you like it. I gotta keep it on pause, though.
I know the last chapter is short, but, I think it was for a good reason. I like how I made it, and I hope you all enjoyed the story. Sorry for its hiatus.
Nice :P
Nice.
dude this is some emotional stuff
I FACKING LOVE IT SO MUCH!!
SO CUTE!!
While the story did seem a bit rushed, it still had that cute romantic feel to it.
Well done
'You're my special talent, Fluttershy'
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999965 :3
this story is just to good i love because i have a studder and i have a friend that always looks out for me
To supress the d'AWWWs is futile
1294631 The d'aww is beyond. :3
Although it's sappy as hell, I like this story
I want to see a Sluttershy.
awwww:
*chokes from the cuteness of this* Shit,