This story is a sequel to In Another Pony’s Hooves
Scootaloo has always had secrets in her family. Secrets that she has diligently kept for quite some time. But all that changes when an unexpected chain of events drags her best friends into the side of her life she's always kept secret from them.
This is a sequel to In Another Pony's Hooves, and placed several months after it, though reading it isn't required to understand what's going on here it does help set the stage.
A special thanks to Gadgetphile for editing.
Chapters (5)
What happened to your editor? This is filled with mistakes.
6232611 Don't have an editor. Never really have.
The only help I've ever really had was comments directing my attention to mistakes here and there. Though if you say there are mistakes I'll get on another pass of error correction.
6233449 Mind if I have a go at it?
6233664 you're more than welcome to point out mistakes and offer corrections. Either here or the private message system will get my attention, as of this post i went over the first chapter and yeah i found something like 6 errors to corect.
So yeah any help offered would be appreciated.
Okay thanks to Gadgetphile another wave of editing has been completed. So here's hoping that the story is now error free. At the least there are a lot fewer mistakes. so enjoy, and if anyone finds anything else for me to fix feel free to bring it to my attention.
XD that was unsuspecting
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Thank you.
It's always nice to know when I entertained someone.
I liked the prequel to this and I also like where this one is going. Upvoting it.
I know its a rather old story (by internet time standarts) but I still want to point out something in this chapter that felt wierd to me.
I know that technically those two sentences don't contradict each other but the first one pretty accurately states the timeframe we are looking at while the second seems to suggest a longer time than that. I know it's a fillys point of view but if that "for a young one a year is a long time" was the intention, the second part feels exaggerated.
I like the story as well as the prequel.
Binge read through both of them and have to say I did enjoy the read.
I am a bit sad that SB and AB got that treatment in the end though.
There is going to be no sequel, is there? Either way, well done.
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The first one is written for the 'camera' so the reader can make a proper mental image of the scene.
The second line is written from Scootaloo's point of view, to point out that she didn't remember how long ago that memory was from.
Also there's about a half a year margin of error you can work with given the first line.
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Thank you, good to know I entertained someone.
Ironically enough this was the unplanned story, I did plan a sequel set when the crusaders had all grown up. But I’m not sure if or when I’ll get around to that one.
Also I rewrote the ending to keep it compatible with the show, before 'Hard to Say Anything' I only had them signing nondisclosure forms and being let out on the knowledge that Scoots would be in huge trouble if they ever spilled the beans.
With the rewrite I’m not sure how I’d even go about that later story now.
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You mean to tell me there is a chance for a sequel?
Well, you could just have them rediscover Scoots occupation either on accident or by design of an enemy of Scootaloo again. Either way, I'd love to see a sequel.
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Yes, there is a chance. Not a very good chance, but a chance.
And yes, rewriting the beginning wouldn’t be too big a deal. The main reason I’m not too gung-ho on writing that is I’m not really sure the story as a whole is a good story anymore… I’m not sure if it’s even worth trying to salvage that story, or if it’d be more like making up a completely new one.
Regardless the story I’m currently working on isn’t it, and has gotten way bigger than I expected it to be. So it will be a long while before I even try to make the next story in the spy Scoots line, IF I try.
Man, I remember this story from way back when... Still love it, but how much actually changed? I seem to remember the girls getting their cutie marks...
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Only the ending changed.
No, no pony got their cutie marks in the old version.
In the original version Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle were allowed to remember what happened with Scoots accepting that she'd be the one getting in major trouble if they ever spilled the beans. Then there was another scene set a little later where they asked Scoots how she keeps secrets so well.
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There must've been another story like this where the girls got their marks, then...
Eh, maybe you can figure out a way to write a sequel, canon or not. I'd read it for sure, even if it was as riddled with typos and missing punctuation as this one was. After all, the CMC are fun to read in adventure mode even if they aren't getting cutie marks out of it.
...Exactly how does this Scootaloo not have a cutie mark, anyway?
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This Scoots doesn't have a cutie mark because the story is written to be compatible with cannon and occurred before Crusaders of the Lost Mark.
That and in my head spying was a learned talent, not her natural talent.
I could refer you to the comments before yours, although your adding to it does make it the most requested sequel. Perhaps I will try to salvage that idea away.