Pinkamena Diane Pie is far from what you would call an average high school student, yet you would be hard pressed to call her extraordinary either, she's just there.
Bitter snarky, misanthropic, and avoided by the student body, she's a loner and that's the way she likes it. She lives her life in a routine, minute by minute, and she would be quite satisfied not talking for more than five minutes to anyone beyond her sister for the rest of school, if not the rest of her life.
This all changed when a Pink Pony Proclaiming to be called Pinkie Pie appeared on the end of her bed, determined "help her find her Rainboom".
Pinkamena just thinks she's lost it, could she be right? Either way, her routine is about to get shaken up by several increments, can she make friends,or will Pinkamena be victorious.
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Inspired by the CoverArt, drawn by Pandan009, a wizz with coloured pencils
Interesting concept.
I do like it so far, but it could use quite a bit of editing. You're missing a lot of punctuation marks, some capitals, and I noticed a few misspellings as well.
6518097 Thanks, I try
6518170 Thanks for the feedback, do you mind pointing some of them out to me? I am terrible at proofreading my own work
6518529 Nope, I do draw, But I aint nearly that good
The credit goes to Pandan009 of Devaintart, a kinda friend of mine, Link in the description.
O.M.F.G THIS IS THE BEST FIMFICTION STORY I HAVE EVER READ.
6520408 Wah- Really?
Well, thanks, It's quite frankly amazing to think that my work has this much of an impact on you
Thank you for the favourite as well
This just earned a favourite.
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And for that favourite, I thank you
I mean't to say this sooner, but I've been busy and it slipped my mind.
I can understand maud. Of course, I've lived with individuals with emotional problems for decades so... Adaptation
So far, quite impressive
Keep it up!
6578572 Nice of you to say so, and Thanks for the favourite
6578949 No problem, and it's really good.
Interesting, I'll track this to see how it develops.
I'm pretty sure Pinkie's doing this during that whole last conversation: roundstable.com/forums/images/smilies/pinkie_p.png
6615228 Maybe
Care to hazard a guess to what was said?
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Since I highlighted the text, I already know. That'd be cheating.
6615352 Ah clever,
What tipped you off, or what is just obvious?
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Wide spaces between the lines, that's all.
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I use the Dark (color) format here in FimFiction so it was very obvious for me. In fact it confused me a bit because for a moment I was thinking Lyra could hear both Pinkamena and Pinkie
6615450 Yeah, I had kind of anticipated some people might have had their formatting different, but I still wanted to do it anyway, I thought it was kind of clever in a stupid way.
I had actually intended to put an invisible warning at the beginning of the chapter, but I forgot.
6615362 PM me what she said(unless you want to just post it in the comments)? I'm on mobile so I can't highlight the text to see it.
6616987 Ehh, why not, the secret is already out, I'll PM you with it in a minute
Please make another chapter soon.
6777689 Well, since you said please... Sure, I'd love to, I've just been a little busy of late is all.
6793172 it's alright man
I really like this chapter. I especially like how Pinkie interacts with Lyra. I was hoping to see more of this story and the wait was worth it. It will be interesting to learn more about this Pinkimena and how the characters are different
EDIT: Reading this chapter made me think I need to read the earlier chapters to remind myself of some things. For instance has there been any indication of whether Pinkimena is into men, women, or nobody yet (whether that she has no interest what so ever or just has not thought about it yet)? Lyra just made me think of it.
6905244 Kind of you to say so, I'll try not to disappoint you
Glad to see this back.
Huh ... I wonder what brought all that on ...
6958439 Wow, my first quote comment...
Cool!
Keep it up!!!! your doing a great job.
Glad to see a update this soon was not expecting it. Oh and it's totally alright to reply to every comment.
Reply whenever you want to. Nice to see an update.
I'm actually surprised that guilt worked on Pinkamena ...
And I'm disappointed that "Laughter" would stoop to using guilt to try and emotionally bully someone in order to get her way ...
At least things have improved (somewhat) for Lyra.
6983605 Isn't that the duty of a conscience? To make you feel bad when you do wrong?
I hadn't actually considered that to be emotional bulling until you pointed it out, its an interesting perspective, I might have to have Pinkamena call her out on it later.
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If you guys say so, cool I'll keep replying.
6983701 Not disagreeing per say, just pointing out two things:
A) A "conscious" is part of your own mentality (whether you have one or not), Pinkie Pie seems (so far) to be a separate entity that is haunting (for lack of a better word) Pinkamena, thus her behavior falls under emotional bullying and blackmail.
B) While I do feel bad for Lyra, I understand why Pinkamena pushed her aside initially: She had already assisted Lyra once without any form of compensation, and that only served to inspire Lyra to ask her for another favor, again without any reward or benefit to Pinkamena, so where was Pinkamena really doing "wrong"? While definitely not the nice way to view the exchange, it does address the basic pragmatism that the only person benefiting so far is Lyra (and as Pinkamena pointed out, even that benefit is questionable ...)
6984876 That is true, alot of what Pinkie does could be considered emotional bullying, although that probably isn't how Pinkie would see it.
Although an important thing to consider is that for the last instance here, Pinkie didn't try to make Pinkamena care, she just asked her to turn around, it was technically Pinkamena's own choice to go back. Why? for know I'd like to leave that up to interpretation.
Although judging by your comment, I'm not making Pinkies existence/non-existence not nearly ambiguous enough.
Thanks for the convo by the way, I'm getting some ideas from this.
6985086 Well, the whole "turn around and if you don't care I'll leave you alone forever" bribe was a pretty big one ...
Actually, I did consider that Pinkie may just be in Pinkamena's head, but since her conscious mind seems to be quite content with how things are, that would imply a very large disconnect between her conscious and subconscious minds if her subconscious had conjured Pinkie up as a sort of "Jiminy Cricket".
And now I'm picturing Pinkie doing the songs out of Pinocchio
They friend up so fast.
6988186 Any song in particular?
6996122 Nope, just the image struck me as amusing
MOAR!!!!
I have to admit, this is one of my absolute favorite fics.
I'm honestly intrigued to see where this goes. Great job so far and I can't wait to see more!
7414822 then you will be happy to know it updated then, sorry for the wait
Thanks for your kind words.
Great to see a new chapter I really enjoy it. I wonder if Ditzy can eventually become a new friend and will Mena learn to like others more and maybe even find new depths in which to find companionship.
7534198 To all those questions, I shall answer: maybe
i need moar.
You really have a talent in Catchprases and being snarky. I mean, that pinkamena is flawless.
Now to wait for the next chapter ^^