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Briarpelt


Sing a song, / A song of life / Lived without regret...

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It's finally happened: Twilight and her friends have achieved their dreams! The CMC have their cutie marks, and Spike is in a position of true power! Princess Luna has found herself a place where she truly feels at home, and Zecora is left in companionable solitude! So why have their worlds fallen apart?

This is the story of many different ponies and one dragon who have drifted away from one another. They've tried to keep their friendship alive, but all things must come to an end. Each of them will speak their sorrow, and the All-Powerful God-Alligator Gummy will give his words on the subject.

Written entirely in verse, except for Gummy's words. "Other" tag is for the Princesses. Tell me if I should add any more tags!

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Comments ( 7 )

I would change

Everyone will know some strife

to

Everypony will know strife.

Remember your Equestrian.:twilightsmile:

6215124 I might have put that, except that "one" does not mean "human". Therefore, "everyone" refers to every one being. Also, there are more races in the country than just equines, and I was referring to all sentient life, ever. I believe I used the word "people" as well, on the same premise. Humans are not the only people to exist, and I will defend this to the grave.

This was a real mixed bag for me. You get plenty of points for writing verse that scans, and it's a fantastic title. On the other hand, Gummy's bit really didn't work for me (but then I don't like his "Slice of Life" turn all that much). There are echoes here of "Friendship", the classic song by Aviators, but I think in the end I felt this might have been better if it hadn't been restricted to dead on 1,000 words.

7549221 Yeah. The only reason I put in Gummy's part was because of the word limit. If I'd written it now, I would have put it in my Scribbles Scrapbook (the story I keep specifically for these too-short-to-be-published-individually stories). But thanks for the compliments!

I love nihilistic philosopher Gummy, and all the monologues that his existence entails.

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