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DoctorDerpy


Mostly a reader, maybe a writer

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Nearly every human on Earth has mysteriously vanished, those left behind have been transformed and magic has permeated the land and infected the wildlife. You'd think this would be trouble enough for one guy who just wants to enjoy the holidays, but he lives in Australia, where everything wants to kill you. And now they're magical too. Oh boy.

This story is part of the “Ponies After People" universe.

Thanks to Beth S. for editing!

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 13 )

Nice cliff hanger ending. Particularly for those who find this story first. Protagonist is in for an interesting time. I'll admit, I was hoping for an earth pony, but can't win them all. Though, if all that alcohol carried over from his human body to his pony, he's lucky to be alive... But not as important.

I'll admit, I was kinda hoping for an earth pony but meh.

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Thank you Greycait! You're my first ever commenter :pinkiegasp:

Sorry to disappoint but my protagonists journey requires his external magic ability, and also the main story features a earth pony so I wanted to stray away from that.

As for the alcohol, his extreme levels of alcohol is what causes his initial distress. Luckily though his human body was able to metabolise the liquor before The Event to stop him dying as a pony.

Well, second commenter here!

You have a nice beginning going. Are you Aussie? The story sounds like it, which is good. Hope to see more of the flavour.

Right, constructive criticism time:
Especially in the first part you skip from past to present tense and back a few times, that makes reading a bit less enjoyable. Nothing major, just be aware of it?

Something to maybe edit contentwise:

I would need to get used to using them if I want to survive.

He hasn't realized yet that he's utterly alone at this point and his actual survival is at stake (at least you didn't describe it, just hinted at it with how his friends wouldn't open the door, one sentence would be enough), but I guess he's about to do so now with the quiet highway.

Apart from these minor issues: looks like you're off to a good start. I liked the hangover waking and the bird bombing ;)
Tracking this.

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Thank you second commenter! :rainbowlaugh:
I knew there were some verb tense issues, I just hadn't spotted any in my last read through. Thanks for that, I'll have a thorough look through and change it all to past tense.

As for the second issue, the protagonist meant 'survive' as in a casual term. But I can see how it could be read differently; like he knows fully about the situation he's in. I might change that too.

And yes, I'm Aussie :yay:

Yay! PaP has gone to the Southern Hemisphere!

Ah, a pug. Tiny Terror, it is.

Yay, more from down under! Really glad to see you're continuing this.
Quality: very, very, very much improved!
So he figured out a kind of hoof-bound telekinesis? That's... interesting. Definitively not seen before in any of the other stories.
Now how to survive going outside the gate... not easy with pugs around. Small monsters.

And I'm pretty sure there's more people than us two tracking this. You'd hardly have thirteen likes if that wasn't the case ;)

Not bad for your first chapter.

Is it OK to feed beer to my horse?

http://practicalhorsemanmag.com/article/feed-beer-horse-16487

Sarah Ralston, VMD, PhD, Dipl. ACVN
A: Many horses love the taste of beer, possibly because it consists of ingredients such as barley and hops, which resemble the grains in horse feeds. The alcoholic content is not a concern, as horses do not get drunk easily, if at all. Their livers process alcohol extremely rapidly because they naturally produce large amounts of alcohol dehydrogenase. This is an enzyme that breaks down the products of fermentation, which occurs in the horse’s large intestine during normal digestion. It quickly converts all forms of alcohol to carbohydrates to be used for energy.

Your protagonist needs a cycle rickshaw or pedicabs, with electric assist.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cycle_rickshaw

Australia
Two companies operate pedicabs in Sydney. Pedapod operate 'pod' styled cabs from Queen Victoria Buildings to Circular Quay. Tikki Tikki Australia operates more advanced 'classic' styled cabs from the Central Railway Station to Circular Quay and up to Kings Cross and down to Star City Casino. Tikki Tikki also has pedicabs and rickshaws in London and Vancouver

Pedicabs are also found in Brisbane, Melbourne, Darwin, Perth, Gold Coast, Cairns, Townsville, Newcastle, and Byron Bay.

How to Get Emergency Drinking Water from a Water Heater

http://www.wikihow.com/Get-Emergency-Drinking-Water-from-a-Water-Heater

A typical home water heater can provide between 30 and 60 gallons of clean drinking water during a disaster. Hurricanes, floods, earthquakes, and other power outages may prevent you from having many things, but clean drinking water should not be one of them.

A few cans of Dog Repellent Sprays should be on the checklist of things to obtain.

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So he figured out a kind of hoof-bound telekinesis? That's... interesting. Definitively not seen before in any of the other stories.

Unless you count the original episodes, as Earth ponies, like Applejack can hold objects in the hooves as well.

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