"The real is the rational and the rational is the real"
It's been three days since Anon and Pinkie had that 'little conversation' in the casttle. Now with her friends unable to cheer her up, Twilight gets Anon to redeem his friendship with her.
Hopefully, he will sort things out with her by the next morning .
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The downvotes made me immediately think this was poorly written... but it was fairly written. It isn't perfect, but it's okay. Certainly not as bad as the red bar suggests.
I think... the reason this has such a bad rating so far is... well two things. The simple one is the use of Anon. Would be better regarded if this was some background stallion from around Ponyville. Basically anyone without an established character would work, since the character is vague.
And that is sorta the second one. It's very vague. There are references to things in the past and there is no explanation. And the plot is that he shows up and says an apology and it just sort of... ends there.
This isn't... necessarily a problem, because the story of someone going to apologize to Pinkie (and then it ending there) without having to explain what actually happened is tricky, but potentially compelling. But it is still tricky. It's hard to pull off.
6208704 Yeah, i kinda wanted to explain that later with a sequel, guess it didn't work out very well, but still i'm glad that my story didn't suck at all.
I appreciate the comment tho. Next time i will try to fix that up for the next fics i write in the future.