After the events of Transformers: Age of Extinction, Optimus Prime takes to the stars to confront the great creators of his very race. Among these planets he had passed, he noticed that many of them were seeded like Earth was. One of these planets was Equestria, and the Ponies there find out that there are more to their own lives, and themselves, than they could ever have known.
Collab by both Myself and LoneShadow.
The Sex and gore tags are there mainly for the dialogue done, and IF said events even happen.
Chapters (3)
It had my interest at first. Then as I realized that it was an anthropomorphic story, was in 2nd person, and was extremly AU, you lost my interest. There were a few grammatical errors and a repeated paragraph. I was fine with your OC, until you made him a Capitan of the guard, RDs lover, and Scootaloos father. You had him greet the Princesses in a very informal manner, which for military officers (even retired ones) is highly irregular. The part about him having an achient Cybertrionion sword was to much. The last straw was having Prime treat them like they were his superiors, Prime would be respectful and kind, but he would by no means have a submissive attitude. The fact that by having the ponys be his hight was stupid (that means they would all be a around 20 feet). It's a good idea, but needs some major work.
6221174 Whilst I agree, that it's EXTREMELY AU. (quite frankly the 2nd chapter will DEFINITELY show how AU we're going...) I will rebuke your point about optimus treating them as superiors...As he is normally quite polite and respectable, He does try to make a point (From my observation at least.) to try and obey the rules of those who are in charge of the worlds he ends up on...for instance, even though he could quite easily, kill any of the humans on earth (infact he could Genocide us all if he wanted to) He doesn't and instead, helps us, and as he said it himself in the 4th movie (Which this story is meant to take place after) 'Humans have asked us to play by their rules' I am sorry I have pushed away your interest, though For the record he's actually both Rainbow Dash AND Zecora's lover...and the part about being Scoot's father is more that she was adopted by him and Dash, just FYI...plus, as I recal, in the Prime cartoon, he does answer to Agent Fowler...even if the other autobots on Team Prime, don't exactly like him...
See, I try to be helpful and you pull shit like this. I can handle the Lockdown clone. But both this "Red" and "Lone", appear to be Marry Sues, facing down mulitipple Chimaras and Manticores, and a "50 headed hydra" and wining is bullshit. The gunarm ponys are retarded. Magatron/Galvatron would have slaughtered AJ. That's it. You had a good idea and you ruined it by making the ponys transformers.
6221226 well I'm not that surprised by this reaction. though I try to reiterate. they aren't complete transformers....
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I wish to let you know, that while I may have lost interest in this story and we seem to have very diffrent opinions, this could end up being a good story. I personally don't like some of the more radical elements of your story (pony gunarms) others may like it. I wish you good luck with this.
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Yes, I understand. That was just my first reaction. I bid you a good day/night.
6221242 I understand, and I respect your opinion. I am at least glad that you do wish me luck...(Quite frankly I will need it.) I was (and am) Still very nervous about the whole gunarm thing...but at the very least, to...justify it...that's why the whole alternate universe thing even exists...for crazy stuff like this that just breaks how the universe would be...and the whole idea of them being as tall as someone like Prime himself or Galvatron or Lockdown, is more to make things a bit more interesting...(I'm also happy you actually can stand the whole Lockdown Clone...as admittedly, that seems like a plot that COULD work in a transformers series..and has happened to due Megatron's personal punching bag, Starscream...since he's had numerous clones.)
6221246 It's night for me at current. and again, thank you for understanding, and thank you for wishing me, and my cowriter (The one who owns Lone, and actually originally came up with the idea) LoneShadow.
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To be honest, while I don't agree with some things, I'll probably will still read the rest of the story. There isn't enough (good) Prime in Equestria story's. Despite a few grammatical errors, you appear to be a good writer. I will await the next chapter.
6221265 I salute you good sir. You are what I'd call, a true reader. As you would press on, despite disagreeing on certain aspects. And I will say this, prime, Galvatron, axor, and Lockdown aren't the only cybertronian characters who will appear.
i don't see fluttershy as a fighter but more as a medic but its still good to give her an offensive weapon
so the WFC energon repair ray
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and the FOC electro bolter (its also my favourite FOC weapon
6221739 hmm! Very well. That's Two for Fluttershy! Thank you, any other possible ideas?
6221739 personally I prefer the riot cannon and path blaster for FOC. And for WFC, I'm always playing as Optimus because I love his Ion Blaster.
only on the second chapter and fucking loving it already. keep it up
6222750 so, you're liking this eh? thanks! admittedly I was nervous as HECK about the whole gimmick that this story's gonna use. (aka, the whole Gun arms for the Ponies and everything) Since you and another have already shown some interest, care to take up my request in Chapter 2's author note at the end?
6222767 i may hmmm.... i will try(even though i have not played the games or have great wisdom of transformers)
cadence i think would be a long range healer and maybe a shield user, same for shining armor. melee i would say a large defender shield, shining long sword.
Luna: lon blaster, path blaster, maybe the shotgun. melee scythe with lunar blade.
Celestia: ion blaster, path blaster, some kind of explosive weapon. melee celestial long sword or hammer
Pinkie Pie: Cannons(bitch's love cannons) melee hammer
Queen Chrysalis: long range weapons, sniper rifles.(transformation) melee scythe with a rough worn blade.
that's all i can come up with right now
6223126 I may agree with Luna having the Ion Blaster...but Red's the only one who's meant to have it...as for the shield thing. i'm gonna establish that they all hvae built in deployable shields, thus meaning they can't be made as an actual weapon...sorry, but your suggestions will be taken into account
6223178 ok
6223355 but I don't guarantee use of a majority of them...
6223360 thats fine
you repeated the paragraph.
If you do ever wish to continue this story then allow the royal sisters to wield a Nucleon Shock cannon and an Ion displacer.
7081101 Your suggestion is noted. I recall those. those are the two turrets you can use, and hijack in War for Cybertron...that might actually work...
7081121 hi, here is an Email I sent to you on your private Messages today regarding 2 Epic Crossover Story Suggestions,
To: Reddened Chaos
From your Biggest fan of all time Ever: Shane W.L. Nokes aka James S.K. Plasma
Link to Email: http://www.fimfiction.net/manage_user/messages/8517862
When are you going to make the next chapters?
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I...don't know if i ever will...
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Ok I can still wait
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You can still keep the story all you got to do is just edit the previous chapters
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true...though it'd be basically completely rewritten, meaning I'd be deleting the previous chapters and starting over.
que tal a pinkie pie un arma de corto alcance como la blaster de dispersión y la onda de choque
update?