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Rainbow visits Fluttershy, intending to drop off a letter, but she's scared away by a horrifying spider Fluttershy is caring for.

The rest of the main 6 are quickly told what happened, and simply cannot let such an event go unnoticed. How will Rainbow react when they show up at her doorstep?

Read it and find out!

Cover art very generously made by FIMFiction's very own RunePlate!

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Pic relevant, this is the spider I had in mind when I wrote the story:
Warning, big spider.

I still hate you and everything you stand for. ^_^

KILL IT!!! KILL IT WITH FIRE!!!

636175
MONSTER! MONSTER! EVERYPONY RUN! Oh... Oh, isn't that the cutest most adorable deadly thing that you've ever seen?
Basically sums up the fic. Excellent job, and I could see this as an episode.

spiders freak me out!!!!!!!:applecry:

That is awesome. my tarantula dies a few years ago.:pinkiesad2:

A spider with weed is better...
A spider with breasts and all the rest
A spider who's dressed in leather
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra2.png

636175 How precious
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No fire? I'm surprised. :pinkiegasp:
636617
I know them. Been wanting one as a pet for a really long time now but they're difficult to find, and apparently even more difficult to care for if you don't know what you're doing.

636628 Yeah they are so damn awesome, but caring for one is alot harder than most would think.
Good luck on you search for one :twilightsmile:

636613 DON'T GIVE ME IDEAS.

Nice fic, btw.

636628 I doubt fire would be able to halt the hell spawn
And arachnophobia is my WORST fear...

Decent story. I like the idea, but it felt real sloppy. It doesn't really make sense for all RD's friends to just randomly decide to make her pet the spider. Seems too cruel for them.

636638
I'm not gonna make excuses here, the writing probably can be improved, and the story isn't meant as a serious one, more something to take my mind off of my main project.

Explain to me how it's cruel to have Rainbow pet the completely harmless, adorable spider though. I don't quite get that.

636175 Fuck you you rotten asscracker. Now I'm not going to sleep for the next week. :flutterrage:

636480 nice profile pic
i used to like spiders...now they creep me out -_-

636653

The whole idea here is that RD's friends are forcing her to do something she clearly doesn't want to do, and for apparently no good reason. I don't like spiders either, and if my friends sneaked up on me and tried make me touch something like that lovely image:fluttershbad:, I would be thinking "you guys are douchebags!" The way you fly into that whole scene with no real explanation behind it just makes it seem really unbelievable. Because of that, I got the idea that the ponies were pretty much thinking, "Hey, RD's afraid of spiders. Lets fuck with her!" Which, in my opinion, is pretty OOC.

This was fun, sure. Of course, I'm a guy who always wants more; so I point out things like this.

You can't cure a fear of spiders by having a spider crawl on you. It's a lot harder than that.

Aww, Rainbow shouldn't be scared of cute spiders...

Sees picture of spider in comment

GAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!

im going to give you a nice pat on the back. there were no spelling mistakes and only a few grammar mistakes

I have to agree with Yacob: even as a puff piece this doesn't work because there's simply no reason in the story for Rainbow to overcome her fear of spiders. She panics upon seeing one at Fluttershy's so this necessitates her friends going all the way up to Cloudsdale to address this problem...why? (It makes even less sense seeing that Applejack is afraid of spiders as well.) It's not even a remotely similar situation as in "Dragonshy" or even the beginning of "Dragon's Quest" where Dash at least feels Shy owes her for participating in the butterfly expedition. As such the story not only seems rather pointless, but yes, the actions of Dash's friends seem rather cruel.

Also given how common fears of spiders are, it still would have been prudent to put the images behind a url with a warning. And I'm saying this as someone who has grown to regard the things as rather cute. But then I've not only seen a pet tarantula in real life, but how you can take something like (warning spider photo behind the link) this and with very little imagination draw it like (warning, illustrated cartoon spider under the cut) this.

Not sure I'd call the spider in the pic 'cute'. No offense to the spider, but I'd have a problem with anything that hairy.

And I've got an answer to all of the 'out-of-character' complaints - just follow the logic below.
1) The Mane 6 are acting in an OOC manner.
2) The giant spider has a calming effect on those who it touches.
3) The giant spider likes to sit on top of ponies' heads.
Ergo,
A) The giant spider is actually a psychic mastermind who is out to take over Equestria one pony at a time. And of the six ponies with the best chance to stop it, at least four (Fluttershy, Twilight, Dash, AJ) have fallen under its control.

Well, that's it - Equestria is doomed and the giant spider has won.

636653 The cruelty in this case, comes from her friends complete disregard of Rainbows feelings. Need I remind you of “Lesson Zero”? Things would have gone equally as bad if her friends had tried to force her to “Snap out it”. It's called an irrational fear, for the simple fact that it's not rational. You can't fix it with logic, and you can't force understanding. If that were the case, then my mom would no longer be afraid of nonvenomous snakes. All you can do is support your friends, even if what they're doing doesn't make sense to you.

Also, maybe provide a scenario where Rainbow has to overcome her fears to help one her friends. If how she looked to others was enough motivation, then she would have been just fine in the young flyers competition. Instead she failed miserably, and only pulled off the “Sonic Rain-boom” because her friends life was on the line.

637262 :twilightsmile:

all hail rodrick! hes cool
and here he is back in his days on the road as the drummer in his highscool band flvrd.com/static/pics/hCKEV.gif

I really hope the apocalypse doesn't contain spiders of any kind or I'm screwed.

this was a pretty decent story. still creeped out by spiders though :applecry:

637146

First off, it's nice to see a comment outlining what's wrong with the story, yet still being properly phrased and not just 'Zomg this suckz nevah rite again."
(haven't actually gotten one of those yet, but they'll come as I continue writing, I'm sure).

Found myself agreeing with you on the OOC bit, so I've made a few (small) edits that put some extra emphasis on how Rainbow touching the spider was, ultimately, her own choice, and I've written a few extra lines about how they're not there to force Rainbow to do anything; they just want her to give Rodrick a chance.

Also, I've hidden the picture of the spider behind a link, as you suggested (didn't occur to me at first, I've always been fascinated by large spiders and wasn't expecting more than a "WTF IS THAT" or two).

That said, the story is still incredibly pointless, and I believe I've already said somewhere that this was not meant as a serious story, but more something to take my mind off of my main project.

637745

I probably could spend some time trying to think of a scenario in which Rainbow actually needs to handle the spider, but I really don't want to turn this into a project. It was just meant as something to do while I think of stuff to happen in my other story.

My policy on spiders is as follows.
If I see you inside my house, you are f*cking dead. There will be no mercy, and your death shall be swift and painful.
SO MOTE IT BE!

Yes. That rocks.

Am I the only person who realised that the Rainbow Dash in the cover art is from Cupcakes animated?

Also, can I do a follow-up regarding my OC with a different outcome? It'll be pretty funny to read her reactions to a tiny spider.

6876279

Hah, you go right ahead. This story is years old by now. If you'll indulge me, though. How did you find it?

6876367 I found this story nice but a bit unsettling due to how out-of-character they seemed. A lovely read, just keep that spider away from me:twilightsmile: Yes, I see that spider in your hand....:rainbowderp:

6876382

:derpyderp1: Trust people on a site dedicating to writing to misinterpret my intent. I wasn't asking for your opinion, I meant how did you come upon this story? It's so old I though it had seen its share of traffic.

6876547 I got on it the same as everything else...
My curiosity and clicker finger XD

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