Other than cookies, I like ponies. And other supposedly feminine things. Fallout Equestria stories are particlar favourites of mine, and I am currently in the works of my own.
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I am pretty sure that is supposed to be 'jewels', otherwise this is getting into some kind of weird anti-Semitic sci-fi power trip. It is a quick fix, but it is a funny one.
This character is SOOOOOO MELODRAMATIC, but it is entertaining to say the least. As dramatic as the narrative is at points, it is colorful with its descriptions and perspectives in a way that shows you certainly have some talent for writing. The character seems inconsistent with themselves, but I get the idea that this is somewhat intentional. Sometimes it is hard to figure out whether the character likes being imprisoned or not.
The narrative is interesting because it does its own thing. It is very imaginative and uses a lot of interesting imagery. Sometimes though, it is hard to make sense of what is happening.
Otherwise, this was a fun read. Keep going. I look forward to seeming more.
It's weirdly enjoyable, and I don't know if I like it or I don't.
Keeeeep it going.
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Yep, you were right. That part was added in at a rather rushed stage after the initial write up, knew there was something I would had to have missed. Mistakes can be missed - thank you for notifying me about it, that's a particularly embarressing mistake if I do say so myself
I appreciate the input! It is rather implied Ancora has decended into madness after 12 years in the cell, so expect it to be a little construde at points. I tried to use a bit more implications than most writers because I thought it would be interesting to describe what is happening without actually describing anything at all.
T'was all a good test run. People seem to like it so far.
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Exactly my intention good sir thank you for your comment