A seventeen-year-old Scootaloo goes to visit an old friend.
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I'm pretty sure you know that I really enjoyed this story
I look forward to seeing more stories!
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I'm glad you did
Thanks again for your help on proofreading it!
She's a f!@%ing princess. She can just not the newspaper if she says so.
6190373 Equestria may be a constitutional monarchy with Freedom of the Press, we simply don't know one way or the other.
Their is another option though, a rather simple one really show what those wings are in fact capable of so long as the wings can't perform beyond the normal range of a Pegasi in terms of Wing Power produced without training they should be fine.
To be really nasty about though they could go further and slip a story to this particular papers competitors or even simply send editorials mocking the paper for its failures in research and if its royal mocking then the paper will undoubtedly lose ground to its competitors perhaps even outright collapsing. (Freedom of speech may mean we have to hear people say stupid stuff but it in turn gives us the right to mock stupid stuff.)
That latter part though is just sheer vindictiveness and would be overkill for the goals they're currently trying to accomplish and while making your opponents rage can be quite amusing and makes it more difficult for them to actually think through their actions it also makes them morel ikely to retaliate in an unpredictable way.
So yeah simply show the principles behind the artificial wings and show the effort it takes to actually control them and the smarter papers will back off leaving the ever existent zealots who would oppose that which they do not like.
Yup! Nice story! Very fitting cover.
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Thanks! It was about the only one I found that actually fit the story :P
Yeah, could have done with some form of closure preferably in Scootaloo's favour.
The descriptions and the characters all worked well. It felt like something that one could see as far in the future as it is. Not a bad story, but it feels unfinished. Of course it ended at the hard part; what exactly are the consequences, and how do you deal with them. How drawn out could that process be, etc.
I do hope that it continues and addresses such matters, as I think you could very well pull off the answers.
That's an interesting story. It's so good that I want to know what happens to Scootaloo after this and what she will do against it.
There is one thing I really loved in the story, it's how you hold the suspens. I was so impatient to know who Scootaloo will meet and why and when it came out to be Luna, I was so surprised and after that I was like "It's so logical, why I not expecting it before?" And the reason why Scootaloo want to talk to Luna was the unexpected turn of event. I see it as an example of how unfair the world can be. Really good story!
I like it. Keep going like this!
,Peace from Midnight.
Fantastic story, but that ending? I must ask, is this really supposed to be 'complete'? I feel like there is much more potential to be writen here. Please considder more chapters, I would love to read how the situation playes out.
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Thanks! That's exactly what I was going for :D Glad you liked it!
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Due to popular demand, I may do just that
And I quote, "Ten real elements of magic out of ten!"
Already crashing just like her role-model!
This got feelsy in a hurry.
Atta girl!
I always found brilliant little details like this a mark of an engaging story
This would be my only criticism thus far. The exposition here, of telling the audience that Sweetie is (presumably, assuming it wasn't a performance of sword swallowing, which would be metal as hell) a singer and just had a performance at Sugarcube Corner feels kinda heavy handed there. It's more likely a close friend would call it 'the show', or whatever wording would fit the event in question. Haven't read that far yet.
And now I have. Goddammit, Belle, the feels only just stopped.
Suddenly worried.
Glad to see she's actually doing something after all these years.
Anyways, very well done. Glad to know this'll be continued, because what an evil cliffhanger that would've been.
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Thanks for the detailed comment & criticism!
Glad you enjoyed it! Yeah I'll have the second part written soon... hopefully... 
*twitches* N..Noooooooo!! x.x it's not complete!?! I must know what happens!
*opens my closet and presses a button, revealing a hidden arsenal of sniper rifles and katanas* I must right this wrong! And I will do it by any. Means. Necessary!
*swiftly loads myself up for battle* If you wouldn't mind finishing this, that would be nice.
7034798 I've actually had a 4000-word uncompleted manuscript on my computer for the second part for about 8 months now that i just haven't worked on cause writer's block. XD Don't worry, I do intend on finishing it one of these days.
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Shh. 
But I can help! ^-^
Oh, Celestia, it's a rescue mission. x.x I've never been good at those.
I do hope you have the inspiration to finish it soon
Would it be okay for me to take a look at it? Maybe I could help provide some insight.
Hood: You liar, you just want to read it before everyone else.
Whaaaa? No!
Hood: Uh-huh. You sure about that?
Well, maybe a little
7036641 Sure, I don't see why not :P I'll PM it to you
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MASSIVE PM INCOMING! SAVE YOURSELV- *explosion*
Hmm. Nice setup and hook for a continuing story. I presume the solution will be something like Scootaloo giving her story to a rival publication about how the wings are a disadvantage, not an advantage... maybe doing some community/PR work with foals who had similar circumstances, that kind of thing.