Chapter 6
Oh my gosh! A shiny wild Noble appeared!
That sounded way funnier in my head. Gotta ask Pinkie Pie for some good jokes. Gah, I hate it when my magic writes down what I think.
Ever seen a noble pegasus? I did. The first thing a pegasister or brony thinks about, when she/he hears the word "noble" is Blueblood or any other snobbish unicorn from Canterlot. Certainly not a pegasus or an earth pony. Well, turns out nobles are NOT racists in the slightest. Probably has something to do with them being smarter than the fandom makes them out to be, I mean they KNOW about the wendigos.
Anyways, some green pegasus noble, wearing a simply wrong red dress happened to trot down the street along with a group of friends. All of them wore something that was basically an eyesore. I mean, the things looked straight out of the 1880-ies!
"Oh my gosh, you're right." One of the other ponies said aghast, putting her hoof in front of her mouth. The scary thing was, she sounded genuine.
"Dear Celestia, what is she doing, eating at this....dumpster place?"
"You belong in a dumpster." I muttered, causing Cadance to glare at me. Huh, apparently she heard me.
"The foalish mare must have realized by now that this is inappropriate for a princess to be." another one continued.
At that point Twilight had her ears folded back and looked to the ground. Knowing her personality traits, she most likely felt guilty, because she thought that she brought Cadance into this situation. I looked over to Cadance who tried to keep a neutral expression and was failing miserably.
"Cadance...?" Twilight spoke carefully. Since the princess of love had actual personal experience with Twilight, she of course too could see what was going through the unicorn's head and immediate took measures against it. She nuzzled Twilight and then: "If you want, we can get you another burger. It IS your special day after all." She offered Twilight another burger. Of course I didn't want to be left out and quickly munched down my burger and wiped the ketchup away from my muzzle. It was easier than I thought getting this stuff out of my fur, seeing as to how ketchup stains were a little hard to get away from clothes.
Cadance looked at me and I shrugged, grinning.
"Alright you two, let me just-"
"How can she eat such rubbish with those filthy fillies?"
THAT'S IT! The second those thoughts entered my mind, two plunder vines came out of a small green patch, where a tree had been planted. Everypony, including Twilight, initially screamed as the two black plants came down next to my face. I must have been looking pretty terrifying. Wish there was some way I could actually tell myself, when the smoke was coming out of my eyes. What's the deal with that anyway? Am I burning calories through them, to keep a slender, evil appearance?
"Twivine!" Cadance shout out brought my ranging mind back to reality. I turned my head towards the left vine and thought to myself: Holy shit! I'm about to kill that bitch!!
I panicked a little bit there. I tried to mentally tell the vines: "Don't kill her, don't kill her, don't kill her!" Over and over again. Seeing the plants doing nothing didn't help, as controversial as it sounds. I brainstormed, like really brainstormed, checking tidbits of memories going through ideas in a matter of seconds. Everyone can do it, you just tend to overlook a lot. Anyways, one of my brainstorming ideas came pretty quickly and sounds really ridiculous, when I look back at it now, but it turned out to be right.
"Clean the table." I told the plants. "Bring the garbage to the garbage can."
Guess what? It worked. I don't know why, but hey? Who am I to complain?
Somewhat awkward, the plants assembled the plastic bags, the burgers had been in and put them on a tray. Next they carried the tray to the nearest trash can and let the trash fall of the tray. And although I didn't give an order of the sorts, the plants put the tray away in one of those carts, you see at every restaurant. Job done, the vines disappeared back into the ground.
I don't get it. They won't listen to my thoughts, but my commands? But wait, what about yesterday, when I managed to use them as makeshift hands? Oh, right. I am being stared on. So...uh...hiding under the table or pretending to not get what's up?
"So, about those burgers? Can I have one too, please??? See, I even cleaned everything up!" I pointed out with my hoof.
Must. Resist. Laughing.
"Oh, you just wanted to clean up!" Twilight nodded and then giggled. "You scared me sis. It looked like you were going to hurt those ponies."
"Where did they come from?!" I exclaimed.
Must resist, must resist. I bit my bottom lip, hard, in order to not laugh out loud. "Why is everybody staring at me?" I was getting so embarrassed, that I didn't need to tell myself to not laugh. I have some weird priorities, when it comes to my emotions.
"Nothing, nothing." Cadance managed to catch herself. "C-come on, girls. Let's get some take-outs and go to the park."
"Yay!" Twilight exclaimed, already running into the building.
I slowly got up from my chair and jumped towards the ground, my legs wobbling a little for a lag of better words. Cadance and I were walking side by side, trying to ignore the stares we were getting. Inside we found a very impatient Twilight waiting in front of the doors.
"Come on, come on." she jumped up and down.
The ponies inside, well I can say for sure that those sitting at the windows had seen my little out of control outburst and were now watching us, warily. The rest was still chatting, the cashiers shouted to the guys in the kitchen, a few kids played in a ball bath in the child area, all in all, typical fast food atmosphere.
We waited for a good amount of time in the queue, until we got our additional orders. I looked carefully, but didn't see any pockets from which Cadance produced the money from. It was really bothering me and was about to ask, when I got a real headache, along with a few pictures.
"Practical Magic: Chapter 6: Pocket Dimensions." I said automatically, rubbing my forehead.
"What was that, Twivine?" my foalsitter asked me.
I shook my head. "Nothing much. Just...one of Twilight's memories decided to show up and explain something to me. My head hurts a little."
"Oh dear, should we go home?" she bend down to my level, worried.
"No, I'm fine. I don't want to ruin Twilight's day."
"If you say so." she got back up. "But I don't want you to get sick, okay?"
"Okay."
Twilight had been completely oblivious to the exchange, looking at some toys in a small showcase. One of those toy characters was reading a book and Twilight being Twilight showed great interest into getting her tiny hooves on that thing. Our foalsitter must have been feeling very generous that day, since she got both of us that silly little thing.
Canterlot park was simply beautiful. It was a nice contrast to the stone houses you see everywhere else. A river, which came out of the mountain itself was going through the middle of the park, colts were playing football, sorry, hoofball on a field, a family was having a picnic, some ponies walked their dogs through it. A sign earlier said they needed to be on the leash the entire time, though almost everypony broke that rule and let the human's best friend ran around freely.
Twilight and I ran a little ahead, doing all kinds of stuff that doesn't make any sense, but is better then walking. I mean stuff from kicking a tiny stone and trying to prevent the other from kicking it, to throwing a stick at each other and trying to catch it. We abandoned this one quickly, since I failed to catch the thing with my mouth. I actively avoided it, to be honest.
No one stared at me this time, maybe because I moved too fast for others to see my eyes. I also refrained from using magic, even though I had a couple of opportunities to have some fun and inventively give myself a really bad reputation.
We found a wooden table and benches to sit on and literally devoured our food there. Well, Twilight and I did, Cadance ate her share normal.
"Hey Cadance, can I ask a question?"
"Anything Twivine." she smiled.
"Just call me Vi [spoken like "why"]. It's easier." Do you know how tempting it is to ask about sex, when you're in the body of a child and an adult asks you that question?
"How is Princess Celestia?" was my simple question. It might seem unnecessary, but the show didn't really establish any kind of character she might have, except from being the not so perfect, kind ruler.
"Oh, auntie is a really nice pony." the pink pony smiled. "She's always so patient with everypony and listens to their problems, no matter how minor, I mean, small they're."
"I know what minor means. Twilight gave me her genius brain after all."
Twilight blushed at my praise and hit behind the big paper back, Cadance had carried our food earlier. Said alicorn laughed and grabbed the thing with her magic, causing Twilight to "eep". After giving my sister some reassuring nuzzling, she continued.
"Aunt Celestia also loves cakes. That's why she made sure, to always be a judge at the yearly dessert contest." the princess winked, causing me and Twilight to fall victim to a fit of giggles.
"I wish I could be a princess." Twilight said with a dreaming gaze. "Then I could build a castle, filled with every book in the world."
Cadance laughed even harder and wrapped a wing around the filly. "Of course you would, Twilight. And you Twivine? What would you do, if you were a princess?"
I was taken aback a little by the question, but gave it some serious thought. "Arrest that woman, who said those things about you and have her work on a rock farm." Yes, those things are real in Equestria. Over the years I would learn that Equestria defies a couple of the laws of physics. Such as the law in which energy is never lost. Magic has its own rules, guys.
Cadance blinked at me, shocked either from the harshness of my punishment or the fact that I would do this for her. Probably both.
"Th-that's...It's sweet of you that you care about me, but Twivine, violence is never the answer." she looked down at me sternly, yet understanding. "I know some ponies can be really mean, belief me, there are a lot of nobles who tell me that I'm not behaving like a proper princess, but you know what? I just ignore them. Let them talk, they'll stop eventually."
Another flash of memories went through my head. The back of my mind registered that certain words, triggered certain memories. I flinched, as my brain worked over time, to sort the new information over.
"Twivine!" both Twilight and Cadance exclaimed.
"It's alright!" I held out my front hooves. "Just new memories from Twilight." I clutched my head. This time it was more than a single picture, but a complete film that was moving in front of my eyes. No, not in front of my eyes, I was part of it.
I didn't notice the two at my side, until it stopped. "Maybe we really should go home."
"I'm fine!" And now I sounded a little bitchy. "I'm fine." I repeated, more calm and collected. "Look Cadance, you said if you ignore the bullies, they will eventually stop, right?"
Cadance for her part still looked concerned, but nodded. "Yes, it worked in Twilight's case and most of the nobles have stopped bothering me already."
"Oh?" I raised an eyebrow. "Then how come-" I stopped myself, looking around. In a much lower tone, I started anew: "Then how come Twilight is still forced to do the "diaper dance" by Silver Lining and his friends?!" I asked in a hiss-tone.
Twilight gasped and took a few steps away from me. "H-How do you know?"
And we have the confirmation.
Twilight herself seemed to have realized what she just said. She looked over to our soon to be sister-in-law and wanted to say something, but didn't get the words out. I for my part walked to Twilight until we were face to face.
"I have all of your memories, Twilight. I know you better than anypony else." I put my hoof on the back of her head and pulled her forehead against mine, making it impossible for her to look away. "And I won't let anything like this happen to you again. Even if the adults can't help, I'll be there for you. That's a promise."
What I saw...I won't even explain it to you. This is my story not Twilight's. But if you're unfamiliar with the diaper dance, the name says it all. You put someone into a diaper or a makeshift one and force him to dance. In the show it was always shown that Twilight was afraid of going back to magic kindergarten because of the colts and fillies or at least it was hinted at. Whether this was an alternate universe or the the actual one, I didn't know, but my Twilight's reason was much more traumatic than simple bullying.
"Twilight..." Cadance stood above us. I could see her shadow. She wrapped her wings around us and pulled us into a tight hug. None of us said something. All of us just wanted to be there in this moment. Sadly a certain pony had to ruin this and make the day AND my mood, really sour.
And a sour mood isn't good for magic control.
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Oh please don't tell me it's another cliffhanger.
6501376 Sorry and for once I really am. I'm still in a sour mood because of my other story and didn't feel like writing more. I just had so much fun writing the other thing and then it didn't work out as planned and only one person, who didn't even dislike the story, gave me some real criticism!! Sorry, but now I feel better.
cliffhanger ahoy!
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Then look at art, or listen to music. I find that it is what helps me write (or draw) the best.
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It is quite fine. Believe me, I understand.
So you say, but I'm sure not seeing it.
Hm, now that I think about it, Twivine's vines remind me of 'The Darkness' - Hope she doesn't rip out someone's heart in a fit of violent rage for ruining that magical moment at the end of the chapter.
Anyway - Great chapter as always.
6501441 Ah being smart and being sensible are two very different things!!!! Remember idiots come in all IQ ranges!!!! PROTECT YOURSELF AND YOUR FAMILY TODAY!!!
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They say that excessive punctuation is a sure sign of a disturbed mind, but you certainly have a very good point there.
Hmpf... You should rly put more effort into this story. You got some potential to realise.
Im a bit disappointed with Vi`s answer for "princess" question. She could say something more ambitious, it could be good for characters development.
I wanted to give you a like, but then I realised that I already did.
AAAARRRRGH CIIIIIIFHAAAANGEEE- Nice chapter as always
-EERRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!
Oh god.
*EDIT
Hellllo~! New chapter huh? Well I don't blame you for having writers block, we could wait. Seriously, we can. Our patience is almost that to a man stuck sitting in a clothing store waiting for his wife to get back from the shoe department. A key word is almost. We wait as long as we will, not complaining, and when we finally get going, we get relieved and smile.
But I digress. On a side note about the story, especially Cadence's question towards Twivine and Twilight. I honestly expected something a lot more than just throw them in jail because they insulted a princess(BUT DON'T GET ME WRONG I GET WHAT IT'S SAYING. Please don't hurt me...)
It was just a minor nitpick for me, nothing more. Other than that, everything just seems to be coming out great! Your audience shall wait awhile longer until your return! Good luck!
6501581 Duly noted. I try my best next time.
Pokémon reference ftw!
Passive aggressive is the Noble's modus operandi, direct confrontation with them rarely ends well as they usually play the victim. This next scene is gonna hurt...
I don't see any problems with Twilight's intelligence. My step sister is quite book smart but rather dumb in her other ways...
Now if only Twivine could control her hippocampus (or whatever passes as such in pony dimension)...
Keep going! :)
6501782 Well hurt...I hope I'm going to satisfy your expectations. Comments like these are making me nervous.
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Just relax - Everyone is enjoying the story. Banter on stories is common - We all have different thoughts on what we want to see happen after all. Just sit back, relax, and have a soda.
Besides, if people didn't care or like your story... would they bother writing a comment about it?
6501820 Logic isn't my strength. Why isn't there a Discord emote?
Now all we need for the mashup song is an insane gambler named Jinxed Token.
6501804 !!! Don't modify your plans on my account! Besides, there are many ways to hurt, most of them not physical...
Besides, who do you think is the giver or receiver of said harm? There are quite a few players on the field at the moment, and a few more that are probable to appear.
Don't mind me, just thinking about the potentials...
I honestly thought that Celestia would take care of Twivine instead of asking Twilight's Parents to. But hey, I'm not picky.
a nice chapter
stayclassy
Visual on bitch confirmed, be advised, target is coming around for another pass. Bunker down for Twivine shitstorm.
A great chapter! A little fear goes a long way...sadly.
I'm going to guess it's that noble from before, which they will probably ignore, or one of those bullies in which Twivine will whoop shit.
6503207 Exactly!!! A little fear goes a long way...
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Great chapter.
Poor Twilight at least she has a sister to help her with bullies.
I think one of the things i looking forward to most in this story is seeing what kind of path Twivine will take. Will she follow her sister and become a great hero or take a more sinister path and become a feared villain.
I'm sure after today Celestia and Cadence will be worried about what path Twivine will take. Heck the whole smoke eyes has probably given Celestia flashbacks to Sombra.
Oh god Twivine has the memory of both twilight's past and future
And if twivine became "evil" twilight would kinda be screwed
Well I have no bucking clue who the heck Twivine is supposed to be, nor her creator. I think I'm happier that way. The story itself is well written for the most part, though poorly edited. For example you repeat words a few times, and someone seems to have told spellcheck to 'correct all' rather than going through manually to make sure words like 'extraordinary' don't become 'extraordinaire' and 'ones' doesn't become 'once'.
Caught up. I like this. I'll give it a watch.
Damn it I was hoping for more BUT I still loved it. I can't wait for the next chapter
So when do you think the next chapter will come out?
6504350 It is always to short is it not?
Fulfill all you Haiku related needs! *theme song* "Haikus! We're sure SOMEone uses em!" 
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Oh the joy of reading, Time makes you slip away so fast, I still wish to continue... *sigh* (brought to you by Big Mac Haikuz!
6505698 WAT?
5 bits on the curtain pony being Blueballs. Any takers?
While it was a funny scene I kinda wanted you not to have used it. At least a quarter of Pinkie awesomeness comes from her bringing objects out of thin air and now that is normal...
And so the black knight was born...
Nice chapter, good work.
6509009 Yes, but the thing is, this is a unicorn textbook, and Pinkie Pie is an earth pony. Blinking (short range teleportation) is a normal unicorn thing (given enough study and focus) yet Pinkie often does it like it's nothing.
6509009 A black lady knight in a thorny armor ^^
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In that vein, Twivine should have picked the noble up, swung them around a little, dropped them, walked up, and said: "The next time you feel like correcting a Princess on the company she keeps, you should probably make sure said company isn't Princess Celestia's new prodigy protoge, and the literal ponification of her dark side."
6511662 I thought about it, but found it was too soon to do that. After one day in Equestria, I doubt anyone would have the courage to do that.
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You have a point, there. I'm undecided now if I would do that in his place, here...
On the one hand, I have a natural inclination toward violence, a very strong sense of justice and a very short fuse on my righteous fury. On the other, I've spent my whole life adapting and learning to suppress the socially unacceptable responses that come naturally. (E.G.: Someone steals from you? Break their hands.)
6512429 Don't worry about THAT stuff. It will come. Just be patient, as my job is taking a lot of my time as of lately.
6508221 I'll take that bet, and raise you DT&SP
are you telling me you forgot science class. energy is never lost it just changes. light to heat, friction and atoms. even chemical like in battery's (the reason they lose power is because it can no longer cause a reaction to continue a circuit because the chemicals have balanced them selves at the atomic level thus stopping the movement of neutrons)
And I realize yet again that I am still a NERD.
oh and let us ad a like to this story
I didn't see anything violent in what Vi wanted to do, unless the noble resists of course...
I really hope she resists...
This is a good story I am fascinated to see how you take it. One question though is twivine going to remain unique or are we going to see oc counterparts to the rest of the mane six pop up later in the story?
6558188 I would honestly like her being unique, and don´t let to much characters ruin that. I can´t explain it good enough right now, but it isn´t always that exciting anymore, if the main char isn´t special in his own way anymore, or if there are two many characters.
6501402 Well I don´t know which story you mean, but I guess not everything is a real hit, even if you like it, or only the wrong people have noticed your story yet.
I just took a quick glance at your storys, and haven´t read them yet, but this one looks already like your best story, at least I´m really interessted in this one.
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At first I thought she would have to live with Twilight and Celestia, because of the student thing.
6503385 somehow the song from below works rather well with this picture.
6503653 I already thought about the possibility, that something could happen that cause her to question herself, then if Nightmare Moon appears, she could join her, till Twilight is able to help her, or something like that.
Sorry for the probably poor description, I couldn´t sleep much last night, in the restaurante next to us, someone was singing rather loudly, and well I couldn´t sleep.
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I actually would like it, if she would be something for Twilight, like Luna for Celestia, maybe more serious, or mature than Twilight is, and well not to forgiving, at least not that fast. Maybe Twivine could have her own bond with Luna later, I mean in some storys, Luna is the more realistic, or harsh one, if i comes to punishment, or something like that. It even looks like her guards would be more awesome than Celestia´s.
I really feel like I make a bunch of mistakes right now, but that have to be because I didn´t got enough sleep.
I really like this story, a few chapters more, and I believe it is one of my favourites, please take your time with the story, and at least try to cover the show, or just make a sequel after you have written what you had planned.
Can't wait to see more of Twivine, and her adventures. Good work.
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6508221 Agreed he can be a real prick which in every RP I do I make sure he is turned into a mare, and learns what it's like to be one.
What is it with older kids thinking it's fun to pick on toddler's? We all know where punks like them head towards when they become adults.