A follow-up story to the my Little pony episode :Amending Fences. My version because I'm guessing at least some pony out there has written five or six different versions of this! If not kudos I'm the first! Now while I am NOT a fan of secret agent Sweet drops, I will be heavily referencing this idea! Because it's just so much more comical, that we have two crazy ponies and neither one of them is the stick in the mud! As I do so much more funnier to have Twilight play the Straight Mare. Even though personally I believe Twilight's bisexual.
One shot!
Chapters (1)
Big hint - don't listen to music while you write. No one's mind can concentrate on both.
Your story was hard to follow. As though it was as a mental dump - throwing ideas out from your head before you forgot them. But readers can't follow that. You need to order it, build it up....
As a finished story it has too many layout and grammar inconsistencies.
But as an idea dump, it makes a good step one.
6185801 I can listen to music and write at the same time. Neck, I even threw in talking, as well as drumming on my leg. Yup, writing, hand-drumming, listening to europop, and holding a conversation. And I wrote an entire fanfiction, too.
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Rather than say the story had the cohesion of diahorrea, I was trying to be kind, by suggesting the listening of something else besides the sound of ideas bouncing around....
Bah, never mind. Music or not - and without being harsh - I'll just refer to my first post.