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DON'T DO STUPID

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For many years spanning to his prime youth, Spike had been on a search. To piece together the loose ends of his life, one of which had always been an empty space on the puzzle missing a single, stubborn piece.

But many years of searching had since tarnished his dedication to the lifelong task, until he finally takes the final few turns to the rest of his life.


Inspired by this picture and this tweet by MA Larson.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 8 )

Constructive criticism highly welcomed and appreciated.

:twilightoops: Spike!

:raritydespair: Spikey?

:pinkiegasp: oh dragon spit!

:rainbowlaugh:

:fluttercry: poor Rarity

:ajsmug: He'll be back in an hour, Chinese Dim Sum ain't that fillin Apples ! :applecry: yep!

:unsuresweetie: That little she dragon hasn't see a real DRAGON LADY

:duck: Spikey wikeys MINE

:facehoof: Rarity's going cray cray

Heyy I like this, Dim Sum belongs to the people!

6180970 In response to your blog asking for it.


It's highly descriptive and well narrated, but has no build up. We're just thrown in with no context as to what's going on and it's confusing. Things also happen quickly. I feel like this story would do better as a longer fic with multiple chapters and more buildup.:twilightsmile:

6191171 Ah, I see. Thanks!

I beg of you!!! Make a sequel sooner than ever!!!!!!!!

This story is very well written in my opinion. Very descriptive and paints a vivid picture in my mind. The only real problem I see is that it is confusing because the reader is just thrown into it without knowing what is actually going on. I think a sequel or just an additional chapter could fix this though. It's a like for me.

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