This is my first FlutterSpike fanfic, so I hope I can do it well.
Spike attempts to buy a perfect gift to Rarity, so he can tell his feelings for him one more time. Fluttershy may have a crush on Spike since the day they bump each other once. So she couldn't help it but to confess her feelings to Spike so she may have a chance of having a cute dragon like Spike. But the big problem is that, she's extremely nervous that she might predict that something is going to happen. Will she confess her feelings to Spike, before it's too late?
Well, we'll find out in the story.
Cover art by: http://spikeshipping.deviantart.com/art/Such-A-Sweet-Dragon-415172602
Chapters (1)
very good, there should be more
This absolutely amazing so far!
Keep it up! ^^
Okay, what the comments below mine failed to address is that while the idea behind this may be cute, there are a lot of issues with this story. I'm going to use the first paragraph as a way of giving you some advice on how to fix your grammar and syntax.
First of all, saying Twilight's name twice in a row already reads as very odd. It should be, "Inside the Friendship Castle, Twilight was very busy reading her books."
Then you have an enormous run-on sentence. There are NO commas in it, it describes far more information than it needs to, and it quite frankly just comes off bland. A better way of writing it would be, "With her was Spike, her loyal assistant. He was responsible for the cleaning and reorganizing of whatever books Twilight happened to read."
Then you start the next sentence off with "He very well indeed". That grammar is simply horrible, and none of those words are right to start off the sentence with. Try something more like, "He took great pride in doing his work perfectly, but he was having trouble at the moment. His thoughts had drifted to the one mare who was so often able to distract him, Rarity." You also have a part that says "honor Spike from his doings" in there. That is not a phrase that can exist, it's an atrocity of grammar. I honestly have no clue what it's supposed to say, either. I guess, "Rarity always praised Spike when he helped her"?
Not to mention you randomly change tenses throughout the story, which is very confusing.
All in all, it was tough to get through this story with all of these mistakes. I'm not sure if English is your first language, but either way you've got a lot of work to do, and I wish you well.