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ThatOneWriter


I dunno if I can be your favorite, but if you like my writing, that's pretty good in my book.

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Celebrating her anniversary with Applejack at Ponyville's annual summer festival seemed like a good idea to Twilight. But when Applejack fails to show up on time, Twilight's worries get the better of her. After all, Applejack's been gone so often lately...


Entry for the Decent Writer's Club contest.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 17 )

Super mega ultra fluffiness and I should know!:heart:

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Heh. Kind of turned into fluff. It wasn't intended to be that way, but hey, I ain't complaining!

Huh twilight having a panic attack. I can see that. Nice fluffy piece!

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Thank you! And yeah, I think she'd be prone to those, at least with her first relationship. She's not as anxious or panic-prone as she used to be, but it still shows up sometimes. The first time there was a potential relationship-ender, I could see her freaking out. (Obviously, since I wrote that.)

Very fluff. It was confusing because until her wings were mentioned, I thought this was pre-alicorn Twilight.

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Well, I did use a unicorn cover art, but that was just because it was hard to find anything fitting. Not much fit the mood.

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I guess that didn't help, but I felt Twilight was characterized as was more prominent in season one or two.

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Characterization is a little bit more flexible when introducing new elements like dating. Twilight isn't as anxious as she was at the start of the show, but even Party Pooped showed that she still worries and she still panics. I don't think it's unreasonable to say that the possibility of her first relationship ending, especially one with a friend, would cause her to worry to this extent.

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Understandable. However, I figured she might reference the only actual case-study she has had personal experience with: Cadence and Shining Armor(Even if that might be taboo). Because it didn't happen and I had no physical descriptors(other than assumptions made by graphic) until Twi unfurled her wings, I kept my mind open as to a point of reference on setting.

This is my opinion on your story.

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Right. Valid points. I'm just trying to explain why I did what I did.

In any case, thank you for reading and commenting!

Psst!” Pinkie hissed in what I could only assume was an attempt at whispering. “You two should kiss now.”

Oh, Pinkie, dont ever change

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Shipper Pinkie is best Pinkie!

I think she's snuck into all my shipfic writing lately. It's just so much fun having her try to ship her friends. Especially when she's not nearly as subtle as she's trying to be.

I think the original pairing was TwiShy, but I wanted to do something new.

*Gasp* Idea :raritystarry: I'll try my hand at it, if i ever get out of my writer's block :twilightblush:
But honestly this was a cute story and i'll give it a 8/10 on the one shot rating board.
~Tobben

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Good! TwiShy needs more stories.

And thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :pinkiehappy:

The inner turmoil twilight went through had me tearing up along with her, the story was ok for me but the way twilight mind was portrayed made the story for me.

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