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ShadowNightmare


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This is just great. I wanted to have just a normal time being at my first convention to meet new friends, but also enjoy the Star Wars and My Little Pony fandoms that were at the Crossover convention.

The only thing I didn't have was just a light saber. I ended up meeting the merchant from the Resident evil universe. He had a lightsaber for me to use. By the time I was given the lightsaber, I was no longer in my world. I was now on the moon waiting to return to Equestria to start my dark deeds against Celestia's rule.

What else is going to happen to me at this rate?

Artwork used is from Deviant Art by the artist Roselinth. Image can be found by pressing the picture and click source.

Star Wars belongs to Lucas Films and Walt Disney.

MLP belongs to Hasbro

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 65 )

I smell something fishy.... You didn't happen to read the Nightmare Princess?:trixieshiftright:

I can get behind this...a sith version of NMM, now all we need is the master to have an apprentice.

6165900

As a matter a fact, I did! Your story was awesome to read. I have read many other Nightmare Moon TF's here on FimFiction, and they're all awesome to read! But....I was also inspired by Star Wars Fics too. Trust me. I always make sure I stay original when it comes to making stories on here.

You were actually one of my inspirations on here, to be honest. :pinkiehappy:

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More you will, my reader! You will get more! :pinkiehappy:

6165902

Most indeed. Chapter 2 is in works! :rainbowdetermined2:

6166002

Of course! Your story is great to read! I've actually read it so many times over the past weeks. That's how awesome your story is. I've actually been eager to see what happens in the second chapter of your story. Good story to tell you the truth. And I'm not lying when I say that to you! :pinkiehappy:

:facehoof: Cliché villain mistake, Leaving your enemies alive! Still, not bad start! Let's see where and how you take this

6165938 I volunteer as tribute I mean volunteer as apprentice.

6166017

Star Wars belongs to Lucas Films and Walt Disney.

:facehoof: Don't remind me.

Walt Disney

Don't fuck up the movie Disney or I will burn down Disneyland.

6166266

There's a good reason why she kept them alive! You'll find out later in the story.

And thank you! :twilightsmile: This is really my first time doing a Nightmare Moon Fic on here.

6166981

IKR? It's sucks that Disney took over one of the best franchises that everyone likes! :raritydespair:

We wonder if they will get the elements and split Luna from this lovely Displaced?

6167244

Good luck with them! They'll need it! They got beat up pretty bad!!:pinkiecrazy:

6167263 Perhaps, but we only note 3 out of six were struck. Also would she got to hide the elements? Would she go to canterlot and secure her throne? Will she remove Shining armor and secure little Cadence as her apprentice after breaking her?

6167303

You made great points. I'm actually working now on the second chapter.

6167315 Depending on when she saw what episode she may have to worry about things to come, such as the Changelings, Sombra, Tirek, foreign diplomats. Insurgencies from those loyal to thy 'sister' whom may or may not be trapped on the sun, while thou is out securing thy holdings which is thy birthright.

We must not forget discord and his plunder seeds.

This was a great start, I eagerly await more

6167336

Very true. She had only watched season 1 to 4. She does know a lot about each character.

6167303

The last couple of questions you have said about Shining Armor and Canterlot will be on chapter two. You actually gave me some good ideas to look at for the future of this story.

6167495 Even if there may be set backs, there is a good chance she could reclaim the empire. A good source for possible light sabre crystals.

shouldve stopped mane six or at least captured one.

6167785

I didn't want to kill them in the first chapter. It wouldn't make sense to just kill them when the story begins. It's better to kill them when the story progresses over time.

6167393

Thank you! Chapter two is coming in full blast. :pinkiehappy:

I love this, oh my lord! :heart: I can't wait for more! :raritystarry::pinkiehappy:

6167138 Well, not really, I mean, If Lucas was still in command, it would be a bad thing, because nobody question his ideas, so, if he have a shitty idea, everyone will start to say it's the greatest thing in the universe.
Let's leave Disney it's chance, maybe they will come up with something great.

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Thank you! I'm almost done with chapter 2. It's a little short, but it'll be good! Stay tune!
:rainbowdetermined2:

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The second chapter will be submitted! In the next couple of seconds! :pinkiehappy: Though it's short, it is still good.

plz change tha name to darth moon/nightmare if you can

Hmmmm, we see that infrastructure for the Changeling race would be required for long lasting success. But they STILL would be feeding on emotions of others, perhaps having slaves as the Empire does would be fitting... But what of Celestia? She whom plays a big role as well in this dance with the balance at stake.

This is getting good! I'll be waiting for more.:pinkiehappy:

Oh I like this Nightmare's tactics...
Can't wait for more! :moustache:

I like this new take on both NightMare Moon AND Displaced fiction! Please keep up the AWESOME work! I eagerly await the next installment of this story!

:moustache:

Yes yes good feel the power of the dark side Ultron, Lex Luthor, Doctor Doom, and more!:rainbowdetermined2::trixieshiftleft::pinkiecrazy:

I love it :pinkiecrazy: NEXT PLZ!!!! :raritydespair:

As sinister and unhappy this story is I do find it quite amusing :trollestia:
GIVE US MORE :flutterrage:
PLEASE:fluttercry:

Are you even still writing this story?
Did you ditch it? (I doubt it)

Now for the final question:twilightsmile:

Do you have an update plan?

Sorry for being straight forward, NO offence :twilightsheepish:

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Sorry for the lack of updates on this story. I've been writing other stories on here. I'm still brainstorming ideas for the next chapter of this story.

6393955 Well thanks for telling us:twilightsmile:
But do you think you will have an update plan for this story?:rainbowhuh:

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I honestly don't know when the next update will be for this story. I'm in college and I'm having a few days off from school. In addition, I'm making a new story called Lost Leader that's about Air Force One being teleported into a wartorn Equestria. And I'm also working on revamping my first story thats called New Loyalty.

6393976 Well thanks for telling us this:twilightsmile:
If you could when you eventually find an update plan for this story could you tell us:twilightsheepish:
THANKS:derpytongue2:

I really liked your story, so I'll review it.
Name of story: Rise of the new Nightmare Order
Grammar score: 10
Pros: Being a big fan of Star Wars myself, (I mean, just looking at my username will tell you that) I loved the concept of this story. You did very well at showing off Darth Nightmare Moon's skill with a lightsaber and the force. Seeing her take over the changeling empire and totally rek the royal guard was very fun to read and I hope more stuff like this is coming soon.
Cons: I'm not that big of a fan of her sith name. I'd suggest changing it to Darth Nightmare, or Darth Moon. Darth Nightmare Moon is a bit of a mouthful. Twilight seemed a bit out of character in this, I don't see Twilight standing there frozen in fear as her friends were attacked. She'd at least attempt to defend herself and her friends. Is Darth Nightmare (I'm just gonna call her that) seriously planning on turning Shining Armor to the dark side? No offense, but there are ponies that would be much better than him. Like Twilight, for example. She can't use magic anymore, and her chance at friendship is gone, so she turns to the force for guidance. Or maybe even Spike, using his loneliness, greed, and neglect against him could send him on a quest for revenge, the dark side of the force complementing his dragon biology.
Notes: Overall, this is a good fic with lots of potential. There were a lot of good things about it, but a few things I would change as well. I already covered most of it, but one more thing I would like to see is Darth Nightmare showing her skill with magic along with the force.

Enjoy your review! Please help me out by checking out The Reject Chronicles or The Joke's on you.

Update soon, and may the force be with you.

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