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Not sure what the dislikes are about, this is a well-written story.
If you're disliking for ABDL, then...why? This was posted in the Mind Control group, and we have no business mocking other peoples fetishes.
6369306 that's the point, people believe that by down voting a story enough times the author will be forced to remove it
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I get the feeling it's more along the lines of "this is a bad theme" which...if you don't like it, why did you seek it out?
6369630 Amen to that. If you don't like it, why do you even click on it? Just leave it for the people who do like it and find something that's more your cup of tea.
Well, I enjoyed this story a whole lot! Good work, but then, all your stories tend to be enjoyable.
Great story, all doe I would have like it better if the story went further then just the diaper, like the onese and the pacifier and all of the rest of the ABDL paraphernalia.
will there be a sequel to this?
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I don't know if there will be. I just about used all ideas I had for the story and don't have enough material to make another one.
For now I'm not focused on a sequel. I just wanted to get this one finished and done.
I'd still like to know more about the events following this. Not so much a sequel, but some kind of expanded ending because I still have various questions.
Like; did he snap out of it at the end, or is he still under complete control? Did he snap out of it but retain the diaper fetish or something? With this talk of "telling all his friends", is this the beginning of some kind of diaper apocalypse? How did the ponies in the street react to seeing him emerge from the bookstore in a diaper? Is the address at the end supposed to mean something important?
My loins are very interested in those questions, and having no answers makes me sad.
Ilike the mind control aspects very humour read indeed. hehe he just lay there till somone changed him hehe what a sneaky way to trap yoru victims.
Nice little mind control trap story, and I especially liked the subtleness of the whole thing, Thunderlane not even noticing the book is luring him or changing him.
If I have to offer a point of criticism, it's the aftermath. Obviously other ponies are going to notice, not the least of which his colleagues and family. But the plan of the villain isn't an issue, not in short stories like this. What sort of is is how much Thunderlane is awake once it's over. He doesn't speak once he gets the book in hooves, and he doesn't regress, he just follows a script. So it's not all that clear where that leaves him once the script is finished.
Although I guess you could argue that the script is still sort of running. It's an open ending, which is cause for thought, I guess. Good work all in all, the only real problem is the "its" vs "it's" mistake being repeated.