Derpy has always loved that one mare with the rainbow mane... At least, she has ever since she stood up for Derpy and was there for her on that terrible day.
This is the story of how an unloved pony found... well, love. She tells us of her terrible past and how she came to fall in love with Rainbow Dash, undoubtedly one of the most amazing mares in all of Equestria.
Enjoy this tale of triumph and depression - of love and it's trials - of complications and understanding - and finally, of happiness.
((Cover art by ~Fluffomaru of DeviantART.))
Chapters (6)
Not bad
keep up the good work I guess
I actually found this to be a really good fanfic you have written here. I don't see many of these written in first-person, so that was a nice change of pace.
Only real nit-pick I have is the following
"I know I should be used to hearing that, but every time somepony complements on my eyes, it hurts. A lot. Just because I'm a little different doesn't mean I'm not like other ponies. But I tried to ignore that. I knew that Flitter was only naturally curious."
Mainly, the use of the word "Complements". If I'm not mistaken, maybe the word you were looking for was...Comments? Iunno, you wrote it - maybe it was intentional?
Going back to the positives, though, I really like how "Derpy" had come across here. She seemed much more aware than other iterations of Derpy/Ditzy I've seen. I also like how it went into how she saw things - it was something that I don't really feel satisfied with, where a lot of fanfics are concerned. And it even felt like a smooth, natural thing to bring within the context of the story. Good job there!
Anyways, I just felt like offering my thoughts and opinions. Will definitely be watching for more!
639346 Thanks for catching that, I'll fix it right away.
I'm glad you liked the story. And about the first-person thing, I thought it sounded nice. Not many people write like this, so I decided to give it a try. I'm glad to know I did a good job on it.
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yaaaaay its here!
Not bad
I'll see where this goes
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Well done, very well done.
Truthfully, I didn't expect you to do first person, but it was written amazingly. 
I think first person is more detailed then third, since first is from a deeper perspective of one charecter. Third is from all perspectives, but if pulled off correctly, third could be really detailed. I've seen a few really detailed third persons, but not many. That's why i went first in my story.
Keep it up, now since school just ended for me i have to stare at my computer all day for the next update
GOGOGOGOGOGOGO MOAR
Ummm... Derpy was raped?
It's mostly just opinion, but that's the only thing in this chapter I didn't like, tracked.
640046 Nice to know you liked, Josh. Next update will be soon.
641215 Yea... The happiest people have the most depressing pasts. Remember that. Glad to know you like the story, though!
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I shall fav this and read later
i like
Here I think you dropped this yellow star and green thumb.
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Why does that last entry fill me with foreboding?
An interesting start, a unique pairing, and a good sense of narrative voice. Perhaps a bit rushed, but c'est la vie really. Thumbs up and I look forward to seeing how this goes. Even if there has never been anything good to come from sleeping pills.
671723 I honestly didn't think about that. It wasn't really meant to be depressing.
671906 It seems rushed? D'oh!
I tried my hardest to make it smooth. Oh well. Why do sleeping pills always have to be a bad thing?!
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671998 Because they denote something is keeping them awake. And things that affect sleep like that are associated as bad, and potentially drug/alcohol-inducing.
Not that that's what always happens, that's just the common connotation.
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The need for sleeping medication in and of itself isn't bad, however given the number of deaths and incidents caused yearly by accidental overdoses, ingestion with alcohol (Accidental or intentional), and the wacky hallucinations and reactions that the pills tend to give people then yes they tend to get looked at with caution.
As for the rushed comment, don't worry too much about it, a 1st person journal story can get away with a fast pace a lot easier then other formats. That said, any time a character makes the leap from 'just friends' to 'I love you' out of the blue, it will seem a bit jarring. Perhaps this could have been resolved with a slower build up or a more in depth background setup.
672139 Hmm... I'll have to work on that, then.
672016>>672139 And as for the whole pill thing, what has been written cannot be undone. Well... Not really... But still. I didn't mean for the pills to be anything other than a way for her to fall asleep. You must remember that I am quite young. I don't know that much about pills and drugs and shit.
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I'm not that young anymore and I've worked in a pharmacy, it's kind of in my nature to be concerned about these things. Seriously though, don't worry about it.
672849 Okayyy.
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a few flags went up here but I'll reserve judgment till it's clear and I'm not jumping to conclusions. very interesting fic here.
" When I looked up, Rainbow must have seen the hurt in my eyes, because she immediately hugged me and kissed me on the cheek in a friendly manor."
Methinks you were looking for the word 'manner', at the end there?
Also, it felt a bit short to me, but I still enjoyed it rather well. Could use a bit more information in a few parts, but it was still a good read.
Note: I wrote this comment at around 5 AM, which means it's probably not as detailed as it should be.
674314 Meehh... Thanks for catching that error. Fixed!
And yea, I did notice that these chapters are very short. I'm just not really sure what else to add to them... I'll just have to work on that.
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641215 It surprised me but it didn't throw me off reading more. And of what we can tell she almost got raped not completely if that makes any sense. I can understand why some may not like it, I mean I wouldn't like it if someone wrote about my favourite character having a terrible incident. Good Story.
712585 Eh, this all turns into foresight in the end. Glad to know you liked the story, though. Next chapter should be up soon.
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I agree with them that an immediate transition from 'friends' to 'I love you' is quite, um, dam what's the word... nevermind can't think of it, but continuing, think of who it is writing in the journal. It's Derpy, and she seems like the kind of pony that would forget to put that into an entry and then suddenly bring it up next time without any real thought. Other than that, this story was quite well done, I like it. You my fine friend get five out of five yay's.
oops, the yay's didn't work so here they are
or they didn't load for about 20 minutes
771321 I think the word you were looking for is 'subtle'. Or rather, the opposite of subtle.
Thanks for the feedback! the next five chapters shall be here soon, I swear it!
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this is actually becoming pretty sad now
822910 Just as I intended.
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I shall like and watch this story it is good but sad about Derpy but the happy but I must keep reading but so far so fabulous
Again so far so fabulous its really good so far and in my opinion starting to evolve into a interesting story now as I type this I must go on to the nest chapter but remember stay fabulous my ponies
829084>>829121 Thanks for the positive feedback. I know, in the beginning, it is sad, but it's intended that way. All great stories are like that. They start out sad and end happily.
The next few chapters will be here soon, I swear it!
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I agree with kiwiman49 but I have a feeling its going to be really good next chapter not that this chapter wasn't good it was great and as alway stay fabulous my ponies
I meant kiwiman40 its my phone keypads small buttons big hands
Ya I actually just realized i forgot to mention that this fic is really awesome, it makes derpy a way deeper character than the canon ever could, so thumbs up and keep up the good work death!
This is pretty AWESOME! Great job!
775237 Thank you that is the word.
853873 Thought so.
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that was just amazing and first
982851 Thanks.
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fabulous chapter
a little sad but still fabulous i can't wait for the next intallment to be released
This is continuing to be really good, props to you DB, can't wait for the next update.
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Well done as always!
I'm just wondering how many chapters do ya think this will all result in? I mean I'm not impatient ot wait for any. Take ya time! And I do love this story! Just a thought.
1093080 Thanks. X3 And honestly, I'm not sure how many chapters this will be. If I were to guess, I'd say about twenty, at minimum.
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1093604 Woah!
Well as long as their as good as the others than have fun writing! I'll be sure to read them! 
Good. Good... It shall continue, the gods command it.
1107380 Best. Comment. Ever. XD
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Sorry I'm a bit late, this somehow got removed from my favorites (remind me to glare at knighty later). I liked this chapter a lot, it made me wonder once again why this doesn't have more likes/views. You write Derpy really well, and I appreciate how you both write with and embellish on cannon, I think thats really cool. Can't wait fot the next update!