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That guy was a dick. But none of that matters now, seeing Chris having a good time, and trying so hard to get comfortable with Pinkie.
is this going to be the start of a harem or herd?
7096957 RD must be first in herd
OK I have to ask but is his eye ever going to Grow-Back/be Substituted?
Like use Ice to make a fake eye and slowly merge it to him to act as a replacement.
One Piece of this story had me smiling in particular. Care to guess?
Great story.
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yes i feel mad, the story crushed it's own potential under too much choppy plot armor.
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What am I assuming?
More PLZ
7163970 What he meant was that he wanted to be the first to go somewhere. Sure not a lot of people have been to the Moon or Mars but he wanted to be the first to go somewhere where no astronaut has landed. In the story this is such a case as there is clearly no sign of humanity in the show. (Unless Faust pulls a dick move and has humans appear in the show later. In that case FUCK YOU FAUST!!!)
I know I sound like a d bag and This your story be shouldn't he already be a full Dragon back during sambra it said that he would be getting new body thing such as wings and a full body it's been 5 years yet he's not I'm just sayin
7211206 maybe it's because he didn't absorb any ice.
When is the next chapter coming?
7244431 he's in her country. Isn't that reason enough plus he's in her country kinda illegally???
Love it so far I wonder there going to do a herd I hope so pinkie needs some love to so does the princesses
I LOVE IT
PLS NEXT CHAPTER
Pls
pls...
I have a feeling that if this was an anime it would be an ecchi harum anime
UPDATE! UPDATE!
:D
When you can of course!
Hope to see a new chapter soo! So hard to find good stories.
How's it coming?
7752640 it may not be believed or seen as "truth" but then...
Why the fuck make a story! It's supposed to bend the truth or completely break it!
Sure it's hard to understand and yes there should be a reason as to why he can't get in touch. BUT IT WAS WRITTEN THAT WAY! if your reading a book and come across something like this I bet you would make nothing of it! Why. Be. Such. A. Douche?! Creative criticism... Not a paragraph(edit: 4! Paragraphs!) on how to put someone down.
XD -says me-
Sooo... almost 40 weeks since first comment in this chapter. Any progress on next one?
who does the main character fall in love with?
Will this story be continued?
I would really injoy this alot more of the dialogue was less robotic because the chapters I have read sound like Siri and Alexa are having a conversation. This is meant as constructive criticism your wrighting is good but you need to make your dialogue flow better and make it seem like actual people are talking. Use contraction shorten some things people don't say "is is hard" they say "it's hard". In dialogue you should strive to make it simple (because most people slur and shorten words when ever possible) or overly complex (if your wrighting for a character that is an over intellectual) you have to wright dialogue different then you wright the rest of your story (unless your story is being told by a character than wright the hole thing like dialogue). Hope this helps you on your quest to become a better author sincerely RAPM
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In this instance, it's a form of camaraderie.
Update?
AS 2 YEARS HAVE NOW PASSED I DECLARE THIS STORY DEAD, MAY IT FIND ITS END ON ANOTHER LIFETIME.
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Eh, I think it should be called 'Frost Bite'
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just put a 's after dragons
*Pokes with stick to see if story is still dead*
Can you continue this? Pwetty pwease?
I think that's what I would go under
Tough start of the chapter. to booby pillowed arms
She will cuddle & snuggle you until you agree to nuzzel her back
Great chapter overall.