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The Friendship Summit preparations have gone on without a hitch, thanks to ‘Princess’ Spike’s initiative and resourcefulness. He still has to deal with Twilight’s disapproval, though.

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This was really well made, had conflict, and was solved without blaming Spike for everything.

I really wish this was actually what they did for the episode.

Much better than the actual episode, Spike acting up to get fame and recognition.

I like the story, but this could never be in the actual show. Twilight isn't this thoughtful about issues like this. This issue is too delicate ad nuance, The only problems in the show are large ,glaring, obvious ones. For instance, Spike feeling unimportant? Not a real issue, it won't get addressed. Lets wait till something bigger comes of it before we do something.

6123860 Thanks. I wish they'ed tried something a little different in the show, too.

6124117 Yep. Especially because Fluffy Cloud's dismissive attitude triggered his insecurities when he otherwise would've coped just fine.

6124592 Yeah, probably not. Though, it would've been nice if they'd explored a different facet of his nature or weaknesses. I thought that it would've been a far more effective lesson about integrity if he had to answer for his abuse of power even after doing a good job with everything else.

I really enjoyed this story. As an alternate ending to the past episode this is top notch. The interactions between Twilight and Spike were fun, interesting and emotional. I can't help but feel like Spike seems to be a little older or more mature here than in the show. Not that it's a bad thing, just how I felt reading it.

Overall a really cool idea with great exucutuon :ajsmug:

Well done. I enjoyed this alternate interpretation, and I hope that something like the interaction you displayed here will be available to us to watch on the show someday.

Nicely done.

(Though as I've found myself repeating ad nauseum since Saturday, I don't think he did as bad as the show went out of it's way to try and tell us he did, especially when you consider his youth.)

But this would have been much better - and fairer to Spike.


Actually as I have literally just re-watched Spike at Your Service as I work through season 1 through 4 on DVD, I am starting to idly speculate nd wonder if there's not some sort of actual, literal curse he's under, which is only suppressed around Twilight. Perhaps some inadvertent result of his hatching (perhaps his egg was recovered from some unscrupulous soul who planned to hatch it themselves and made sure to take... precautions against their new servant attempting to leave) or just Discord made sure he left a little something before he was stoned again the first time for Spike's part in undiscording Twilight... It would explain a lot, wouldn't it...?

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Yeah, probably not. Though, it would've been nice if they'd explored a different facet of his nature or weaknesses. I thought that it would've been a far more effective lesson about integrity if he had to answer for his abuse of power even after doing a good job with everything else.

The weirdest thing about the actual episode was that the "abuse of power" aspect didn't even factor in to the resulting disaster. The three decisions that led to the flooding were all arguably within the scope of Cadance's request to him, and for none of them did he intentionally co-opt Twilight's authority. Two of the three were terrible decisions, but that's all they were.

I enjoyed this story as a more coherent alternate take.

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I'm not much for fix-fics, so I didn't go over it with a magnifying glass. Just spottted the one:

She blinked. “What? I didn’t say that. But you can’t deny that what you did was okay.”

Pick one:
She blinked. “What? I didn’t say that. But you can’t deny that what you did was wrong.”
She blinked. “What? I didn’t say that. But you can’t say that what you did was okay.”
She blinked. “What? I didn’t say that. But can you deny that what you did was wrong?”

6127923 Fair enough. Thanks for spotting that! :twilightsheepish:

If they could put even an iota of the characterization that the fandom does for Spike and Twilight into the show it would make it all the better. Given the entirety of this would not have taken more than six or seven minutes live time.
Now this is amazing. Hope to see more soon.

THANK YOU!
Although this rewrite of the episode is a little sad, it allows conflict on a level closer to Spike's current maturity. Excellent work! :moustache:

Well... this would've been a really great improvement on the episode. I'm sure they would've kept his scary dragon rage parts toned down to more cartoonish illustration, perhaps steam shooting from his fins or something like that, but the give-and-take here between Twilight and Spike, the faults that both of them displayed, is just vastly better than the random assortment of catastrophe that just miraculously shot a stream of water directly into the ballroom... the odds of which are so stupendously small I would have bought Discord cackling and snapping his fingers behind the scenes rather than having to accept it just happened that way.

Excellent work here!I like how it could be made into an episode yet still through in some of your own theories. (How he tried to see how far they would go for twilight) great alternative ending!:moustache:

You hit a lot of notes and issues about this episode. I ultimately think in this episode, Spike was unfortunately set up to fail from the beginning. Aside from Cadence not doing anything until the end, there was no sign of Celestia or Luna as well to help out. And this really burns me up: nopony knows about Spike. They should know him for his actions in the Crystal Empire. Hell, Fancy Pants was at the Equestria Games, but doesn't recognize Spike instantly. Instead, Spike is referred to in Canterlot as "some random dragon." You have no idea how much I despise Fluffy Clouds now just from that, and I'm pretty sure he's on everyone's list of despicable background ponies.

I hope the next Spike episode we get is so much better. I will say it's not as bad as Spike at Your Service since it raped the character of Spike in that episode, but it's pretty high in terms of worst Spike episodes.

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If they could put even an iota of the characterization that the fandom does for Spike and Twilight into the show it would make it all the better.

To be fair, I think that they do. Just not when Spike had the spotlight in this ep. and in Dragon at Your Service. I thought he was a real champ in Castle Sweet Castle, where even the abuse he took served to build up his character, showing how much he was willing to put himself through for Twilight's sake instead of just being another throwaway joke about how unlucky he is.

6128522 Wait, no snarky or manic comment about how you could use some of the story's elements to conquer/destroy Equestria? :pinkiegasp: Who are you and what have you done to Alondro?! :rainbowhuh:
Seriously, though, I agree that the events look too much like they were engineered to make Spike's decisions backfire in the most spectacular way possible.

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You have no idea how much I despise Fluffy Clouds now just from that,

Oh, but I think I do. :ajsleepy: Even Diamond Tiara's never managed to get me riled up like that. She at least has the excuse of immaturity, but this guy's just plain pathetic for displaying a toddler's level of reasoning. :facehoof: Come to think of it, he might even have ousted Blueblood in terms of sheer pettiness. :rainbowderp:

That so much better!:moustache::twilightsmile:

6129554 Weeeeeeellll... I could use Spike's dragon rage to trigger a magiclear (It's like nuclear, but MAGIC! Which makes it BETTER!) explosion and all the resulting mutants would be under my command.

NOW it feels like my comment! :trollestia:

But really, I do make serious comments at time, mainly on stories that greatly impress me with certain interpretations or takes on episodes, characters, and world-building in general. Of course, if I see places where humor strikes me, I can't resist.

This is really a good take compared to the actual episode. Congrats on your part.

That's a cool twist. Instead of just taking advantage of his friend's position, he's testing a bunch of dipshits' inflated opinion of royalty.

I wish this was canon. Much prefer this over the actual episode. :raritywink:

Very nice. I also didn't like the way the show handled the episode and i love your take on it. To paraphrase another commenter 'it felt like two episodes stitched together' One in which Spike is trying to be generally helpful, and one in which Spike is thrust into power unwillingly and becomes greedy with it. With the haphazard connector being Cadence putting the idea of greed in his head rather then him getting drunk off of it.

Personally I would have liked if the episode had fallowed the first story idea and Spike's attempts at fixing problems, while they work short term, have long term consequences that cause a house or cards that Twilight has to sort through. It would show Spike as being kind and helpful and good but simply to young to handle such large decisions.

Man, I used to think that Fix Fics couldn't be done right. Thank you for proving me wrong.

Well, a fix fic that fixes things well. Who would've thunk it? ;)

But seriously, this is a thousand times better than that episode. Legit kudos to you, here.

I know this has been said before, but dang, this is so much better than the episode. I honestly thought this was the dire tion they were going to take it, and I was so disappointed that they turned it into another generic "spike gets greedy" episode. Thank you for giving us the story we deserved, and for that, you get a mustache!
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Didn't think it was possible...

A good fixfic. Well done.

7843936 Thanks. :twilightsmile:

I'm still holding out for the day they give Spike the solo episode he deserves. It's long overdue.

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Hell, he should be known to Canterlot. How else could he get Hoity Toity to attend not just one, but a second fashion show after the first was a disaster?

A Good Fix.

This proves another one of my thought's that SPIKE doesn't have to put up these ponies & their problems. He could always go back to the DRAGONS.

A little hastily hammered out, but if we really had to go with another Spike episode dealing with his dragon nature, I thought we could take it in a slightly different direction.

And I guess the direction was of a dragon temper? After being discarded as useless by everypony else, the last one he needed to hear it from was Twilight.

Never anger a dragon, for you are crunchy and taste good with ketchup.:rainbowlaugh:

My biggest issue with the episode was it had a perfect set up for juicy character develop with Spike's self-esteem and looked like it was delving into that territory at first with the random dragon lines but then, nothing. Wasted potential. This was a great fanfic and goes kind of how I always thought the episode should've went.

I never really noticed it until I read the A/N but yeah, the episode was basically "Secret of my Excess" but bad.

8700224 Well, here's to hoping that Season 8 does things better. Despite trying to avoid leaks, I've already accidentally seen a few things that look pretty promising in concept!

Meh I always hated that episode and Spike was a jerk who abused Twilights authority just for extra kicks. I felt like all the problems that went wrong at the end just covered up the need for spike to get a stern taking too about how he acted. That was the only thing I didn't like about this story. Spike had no right to get mad at Twilight for calling him out on his selfish behavior. Also his justification the hold "no one listened to me because I'm not a princess" new flash 99.9 % of ponies are not princesses there only four and a baby. If some guard or baker or some otherrandom pony had tried to say something they would have got the same looked over treatment your not special. This hold things just seemed like a giant temper tantrum over a few hurt feeling from a kid who has an a whole empire that worships the ground he walks on, a family that loves him more then life, great friends and over 90% of ponies who treat him with respect and kindness but you suddenly loss it cause a few ponies gave you a hurtful remark please get out of here with that nonsense. Twilight should have thanked him for the work he did and whupped his butt for being a spoiled brat.

Yeah this episode definitely had its issues. Spike just getting kicked in the butt but the end was annoying as hell. Plus cadence just didn’t do anything as far as we knew. And really only saw of him was getting his painting done and getting a few jams, oh no the horror what ever shall we do such abuse. I things he asked for a kind of mundane

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Indeed. At worst, Spike was only guilty of being selfish. And the episode moral tries to make it as if his excesses resulted in disaster, when it was actually all those random contrivances conspiring to make him look bad.

“Power corrupts, and absolute power corrupts absolutely” is a saying for a reason. There isn’t necessarily any malign intent inherent at first. But, just the lack of limits is enough to drive someone to extremes they’d never have considered otherwise.

Such an awkward episode to write about.

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I disagree, while Spike may have abused Twilights power that was only when cadence mentioned the idea. Until then Spike was only trying to be nice and let Twilight sleep. And honestly you think ponies would respect the wisdom of the princess of friendships secretary, and the hero of the crystal empire. But ponys are racsist hipocritical Aholes and complete niave idiots, but now I am just ranting.
not excusing spikes actions but WHERE WERE THE OTHER PRINCESSES!?! I mean you think that they would have put up a notice that princess twilight was having a needed nap, but no they just said nothing and left no one to take care of the summit. I mean come on people Twilight had not sleep for DAYS! But anyway while Spike was in the wrong I think until Cadance acussed him of abusing Twilights power that his choices were justified.

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