That last line makes it seem like she's happy that Wrath appeared, as in 'his appearance made today a little bit better'.

I'm glad to know he has some restraint, it one thing to obliterate the enemy, but to harm an innocent is unforgivable. Judging by wraths reactions o seeing the ponies outside the hole, alicorns were far more abundant during the time of the king and queen, what could have caused such a decline I wonder? There's much potential to build on. Have fun writing.

No. Can't do it.

You need to switch the formatting. Bold screams at the reader. It's best used for unique, singular emphasis or for extreme shouting (think Luna's Royal Canterlot whatsit). Italics are better suited for thoughts. Thoughts aren't heard by those around the thinker - they are private, quiet things. Italics separate while at the same time lending thoughts an ephemeral feel that suits them. The thoughts-in-bold thing is not only throwing me off due to it not being standard, it's also making me feel as though you are unduly shouting at me. Please stop shouting at me.

Aside from that ... I'm a bit concerned for the main character's characterization. Several thousand years of solitary and he never once questioned his methods or had a flashback but a few seconds topside and now he's realizing he might have anger management issues? Must be one huge, self righteous idiot. Also, ponies have spears but don't use them for their intended purpose? Seems a bit odd to have weaponry and such but no intent to cause harm, even in a protective manner.

It's just not something I would enjoy, to be honest, so I'm leaving no thumbs - but please keep in mind the formatting advice I left above. And thank heavens it's not yet another Displaced story.

6130092 I see your point and I have been considering switching the format. As for the main character, his background will explain his actions a bit, I would give you a more apt reason but I don't want to spoil the plot just yet.
The ponies portrayed had yet to actually be moved to attack, and when they were getting close to being forced to use them, a much larger threat appeared, and all of a sudden Wrath did not seem like what made the threat against canterlot, so they directed their attention elsewhere. Namely the sky, which was falling down.

Thank you for the comment.

6130794 Thank you, it should be fixed.

I am intrigued. Tracked.

Tracked. Demand moar.

Good Read so far, I wish the chapters were a little longer but the whole "Human was locked up and has escaped" premise always intrigued me. Tracking for more updates.

I have to agree with Minalkra down below, he makes some valid points.
But, I am going to stick with this until the fourth chapter, and see what happens then.

Nice job.

This was supposed to be a rout! Not a bloodbath!

... That is a rout. You keep killing the enemy you catch up with in order to keep them fleeing. Wow, some general you are. You should be praising him for destroying the enemy. The only reason a rout usually does not become a massacre is because they have a head start.

"Some of those soldiers were our own..."

Then why were they fighting him? To try to stop him from killing the enemy, probably. Considering it was in the middle of a battle...

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What? Do you expect a warrior to be gentle with his enemy or kill them? He is doing it right. He also has every reason to feel self-righteous considering his first employers were idiots who had no clue of what combat is like and the necessities of the battlefield and only his presence enabled them to not screw themselves over. Which is probably why they died out after betraying him, since he wasn't around to fix things. Considering he was betrayed, he has every right to feel self-righteous.

As for the ponies not using spears and such... well, they didn't in canon, either! When the changelings invaded, they all dropped their weapons and tried to fight bare-hoofed. Predictably, they got their asses kicked.

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You are the only person in these comments that makes any sense Bronzer.

Well, they were right. This guy's guilty of war crimes.

Specifically, he's almost definitely guilty of this one:

Killing a surrendered combatant - I seriously doubt the changelings kept fighting him if their blood made his magic stronger and if he was able to destroy a whole area of bugs.

He's probably guilty of this one:

Directing attacks against civilians - He almost killed that foal. We don't know whether he killed any ponies when he was in his rage.

He's also guilty of friendly fire, if the memory about what his fellow guards said was true.

Lastly, I think the fact that this is considered a grave violation of the geneva convention should stand for itself.

Willful killing, or causing great suffering or serious injury to body or health

War isn't like Call of Duty or some other videogame. You can often shoot over the other guys' heads to scare them off. People who are fleeing will usually continue to flee regardless of whether you continue killing them or not. Shooting over their heads will likely keep fleeing people running just as well as shooting them directly. And killing them while they're fleeing may actually increase the chance that they'll respond with greater force later. It may even cause other groups to ally with them if they have pictures.

I know they don't have guns here, but there are other similar methods. I think screaming while running at them would work here.

Ooh! I found some actual laws here. Here's one crime that this guy's definitely, 100%, guilty of:

making a person the object of attack in the knowledge that he is hors de combat

hors de combat means 'outside the fight'. Anyone clearly incapable or unwilling to fight would qualify as this. This includes those too wounded or unconscious to fight, as well as those that clearly expressed their surrender.

Man, the constant perspective changes with everybody in first-person thought is really confusing.

It's too bad for Cadance she neglected to inform Wrath just what the 'customs' of her people were, namely not butchering enemies to the last foe.

They shook their heads and said in unison,

"He's dead,"

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Hmm.

1. He's immortal.
2. His blood has healing properties.
3. Super-human body.
4. A full blown berserker in battle.

I'm only a few chapters in, but this guy seems like a Viking vampire.

I think this for some reason tse4.mm.bing.net/th?id=OIP.M7e7852f68d9a7bd856169351ba1b50e0o0&pid=15.1

I was listening to a rock/metal version of duel of the fates from star wars while reading this. It was awesome.

A berserker massive human that gains power the more he fights, interesting.

6555291 or he could be deadpool. That just sounds exactly like deadpool

Is this guy some form of Spartan? He lifted twilight three meters off the ground? Just how tall is he? That's approximately nine feet.

7136983 his name is WRATH, what do you expect? A midget?

Nope, can't continue on. You need an editor/proofreader something fierce. I can't get over the many grammar mistakes, the constant shift in tone and the absolutely moronic way your protagonist just goes along with "Protect alicorn that freed me" despite anything that happens. This is a character named Wrath. Shouldn't be hard to imagine this guy is easy to anger. Nor would it be impossible to believe that he would hold a grudge (As it seems to point out he does) against alicorns for what happened to him. Just because one freed him doesn't mean jack when compared to what's supposedly already happened.

this just doesn't feel like i could read this for awhile and it needs an editor/proofreader to me anyway others might not think that