Alrighty! Yay for double post.

Okay, some explanation of this. We've decided to circumvent all the linearity fubars we've been struggling with by separating the 'chapters' into single scenes. First because the scenes are getting longer, and second, because it makes it easier to keep track of the threads. So the rest of the Canterlot 'arc' will be done in this format until we cover all the plotline divergences and reunify into a single narrative again.

This will hopefully mean smaller but more frequent new uploads. That's the hope anyway.

I really love how this story is focusing on the characters, using that to drive the plot, rather than having the plot drive the characters. This really reminds me of a twiluna thing I read a long time ago, Apotheosis. Great writing and I'm hoping for more.

6506850 Hey, whatever you guys do is more than fine with me, hun!

And smaller, or not, more frequent chapter uploads makes me one very happy l'il gal!

And this?

Yay for double post.

All my yes!

Well, from the way it is written it seems like you cannot use demonic energy to move the sun and the moon...which means that they really cannot turn Celestia and Luna into demons without having some alternate means of moving the sun and the moon.

I can see why Luna would be more upset than Celestia...I mean she only just got purified from being corrupted by Nightmare Moon...then she gets imprisoned again on the moon...only to be released into the waiting hooves of demons who seems set on corrupting her again...its no wonder she is upset.

On a side note: Where is Shining Armor?

“I s-suppose my orientation is best described as, Omnisexual?”

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I couldn't read that line and not post this.
Now I watch in awe and horror as the comments section irrevocably dissolves into Team Four Star references, such is the power of the Demon God Dumplin.

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“Mmmhmmm, Twilight created an Artifact tome, layered harmonious enchantments so deep that demons can’t even find a niche to start undoing them. Our attempts just slid off any time we tried.”

Trust Twilight to go overboard...
Good work.

can't wait for the next chapter

Good fic, the only thing that would make this better is Demon Sunset Shimmer appearing.

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Eh, We'll save that for the sequel.

so the pony in luna's room twisted celestia's words? or was celestia even there to begin with?

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Celestia is as chained to her bed as Luna is.

Well. I do know whom to root for now—Princess Luna. I hope she stays this tough and unmoving, finally present them with a real challenge they can't just beat down. I hope she stays true to herself, maybe break free at some point. I don't think Celestia will last long.

I'm really rooting for Luna now. And seeing as how Luna had that conversation with Tia after rainbow visited and she had gotten some more sleep, it's entirely possible that it was actually Celestia. 'Course, the asshat watching her room is gonna be a problem, but Luna can do it.

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Facts as established in the story:

Celestia's chain is long enough to reach her favorite chair by the window, not long enough to reach down the passages between her room and Luna's.

Celestia has no established motivations to have said the things Luna heard. Her own chapter experiences include the revelation of several failed attempts at banishing them, and that their rooms are warded to prevent such. 'Celestia's' urging of Luna to escape, to get outside the castle walls does not account for this knowledge.

The only way it works for that to have actually been Celestia is if most of what's hppening from Celestia's perspective is wrong or faulty somehow.

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I'll belatedly one up you there.

It was later stated that he had used ventriloquism in order to trick luna.

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With that said, consider what you actually tried to say here.

I don't say that it will wash away all the neigh-votes, but it may give your story a better presentation.

On the other hoof, what do you mean with Fel Equestria?
Assuming it isn't a typo, is it referring to WoW(World of Warcraft)?

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Nope. Fel and fell as concepts and words predate WoW and allude to corruption and decay, which is the concepts being presented in the title.

Thanks for your interest.

6586184 I guess I need to read up on this concepts and behind them.
I just remembered this from the demonic characters it referred to, mainly the Fel-Horse.

Guess it was too much to ask of them, inventing this all by themselves?

I have a story or two including this, but I have stories on most every kind of Pony there is imaginable.

The title kind of pulled me in, then I had to go over and ask. Hope it helped you with the story.

6588551 I'm not sure of the artist actually, Ashinda had it commissioned for me.

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*wanders through...*

I'll just leave this here...

*wanders back out*

Any chance of an update on progress for this?

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Four Canterlot chapters plus an interlude story in progress.

Aggregate totals are close to 7k words split between all of them. None of them are complete yet but two of them are within perhaps 1-2k words to final rough and then polishing.

Haven't had a ton of time for writing these passed two weeks, and Cody has a lot on his plate as well. We'll get them out as they are finished and pass final approval. The number of plot threads we're following means that some chapters have to hit completion at the same time, sort of how Luna and Tia's scenes intertwine. That is going to keep happening, and it's taking some work to make sure we aren't introducing continuity gaffes.

I'm not going to make promises. But if this week doesn't totally suck, I could see two chapters dropping soon.

6616216 Thanks for the update! Time is always a precious commodity and I'm happy to hear you've got at least a little to spend on a weird story like this .

6616216 Good to hear.

I'm not going to make promises. But if this week doesn't totally suck, I could see two chapters dropping soon.

On this note, I hope things go well for you guys, bud.

Yeah, sorry sorry, haven't done any writing whatsoever. Between financial problems, injuring my knee and handling my usual stuff, my brain has been too tired for very many words. That said, I've been doing some art as you may have noticed. And also, this.

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Just a quick single page concepting of what Fel Equestria might look like as a comic.

Comments, critiques, gleeful chants of support totally welcome.

6637980 Sorry to hear that, hun, but that's life for you.
(Un-fortunately.)

Anyway, I hope that your knee injury gets better soon, your financial problems do the same, and life stops being so darned mean to you.
*gives Ashinda a gentle kiss on the forehead to ease his aching brain, then gives him a hug*

As for the comic, I have but this to say:

All my yes!!!

I hope that this comes to pass, and I'll support you any way that I can, hun.

And that's a promise!!!

I was going to begin reading this immediately, but then I saw that it's clop. Now I'm going to have to wait and consider.

I don't like the development with Luna and that asshole (What? too strong a word?) so imma stop here and go read something else...while it is interesting..I can see myself skipping over chapters later down the line.