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Through The Looking Glass And What Twilight Found There, huh?
Well, this story is certainly starting interesting enough. I'm interested to see where this is going.
A most interesting beginning. I'll be keeping an eye on this one to see how it goes, and what happens next.
Have a Fave, a Follow and and upvote on me, my friend.
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Bah, you wouldn't know interesting if it smack you in the face! I mean, you read my stories. Come on!
Ooh! This has promise! Color me intrigued. If you are out of intrigued, color me Orange.
The stallion vaguely reminds me of the conductor from The Polar Express. More so in attitude than description, though the glasses...
Therefore, for the rest of this fic, I will imagine he is voiced by Tom Hanks, and you can't change my mind.
This is definitely going on my tracking list. Also, take a like, for what it's worth.
Oh, this is going to be good.
Hmm...
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I am... curious. Tell you what, I'll go out on a limb and upvote this on first chapter, I think others might find it curious as well.
I think Twilight's reaction to Celestia's dismissal is much too subdued. She should be devastated. Thinking the Princess abandoned her would leave her stricken more strongly by guilt and shame and anguish and sorrow.
Like a slightly toned down version of this:
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Being the Princess's student is a major part of her identity, especially at this point. Now she's away from Shining, away from Cadance, away from Celestia (and as far as she knows, all but dismissed), and isn't even allowed to bring Spike.
Twilight has been completely isolated. But since Twilight likes being alone, that won’t be the thing to make her seek out other ponies. I’m wondering how you’ll do that.
She’s been reduced to two suitcases when the very first pony she met brought an entire wagon with her. Ouch. Rarity looks to quickly be pushing herself into the category of “annoying, chatty pony to be avoided”.
I was worried for a moment that she was being sent to Ponyville for friend-making purposes--without the emergency that gave them bonds of friendship made in fire, Twilight could never make friends in Ponyville. She'd be more likely to snap and set them on fire. She might still do that, if Pinkie Pie goes all… Pinkie Pie on her.
It makes me wonder how a story set in a big Academy will involve the rest of the Mane Six. Any of the four could have reasonable cause to get some degree of higher education (study agriculture, meteorology, zoology, possibly rock science?), but to attend a prestigious school like the Princess’s Academy for the Advancement of Equestrian Society? None of them need that, and most wouldn’t want that. Applejack relies on earth pony tradition for farming (I’ve always assumed it helps put the earth pony magic into the farm for effectively) and doesn’t like fancy mathematics, Rainbow Dash blows education off as egghead stuff, Fluttershy would never have the nerve to suggest she was smart enough to attend school with so many intelligent ponies, and Pinkie Pie would be expelled before her first class. This is AU, but just how AU are we talking here?
Would she even share any classes with them? Twilight is incredibly knowledgeable even when it doesn’t come to magic (she’s all but an omnidisciplinarian, really!), so she’d be in classes higher than other ponies her age… of course, she didn’t test into the school, so she might get normal classes by default. Although… the Mane Six aren’t all the same age, and I’m pretty sure that Twilight is the youngest, so in order for them to share any classes she’ll have to be in higher grades. She’s better in some fields of knowledge than others, so that would stagger her classes to share some with all of them. Additionally, them having disparate classes and little knowledge of one another would let Twilight become the lynchpin to pull them together.
What's up with her disbelief over the Looking Glass stallion? She's already admitted that the Academy was a good establishment (and it has the adjective "Princess's" on the name, which I would think to be a promise of quality), so why is a skilled, powerful unicorn being at the establishment a surprise? He's even old (a plus for mages) and has a fancy uniform. Even if it’s a huge power draw, having at least one master of magic on staff is only to be expected of such a high class school.
Did she get dismissed from the School for Gifted Unicorns to get sent over here?
If there is one thing Twilight would appreciate, it would be being given a cover so she doesn’t have to deal with all the attention of being the secret student. Or it would if it weren’t so easy to interpret as having
Is this edition of Twilight on the autistic spectrum? She has a bit more Asperger’s-esque behavior than the show’s Twilight does.
I’ll admit up front that I’m hoping for deciding to send Twilight here to go badly, at least in part. Mostly because of the (hopefully) sweet scene of her and Twilight’s eventual reunion and making up (there has to be some sort of confrontation over what Twilight sees as disowning her with word of explanation, doesn't there?), instead of just Twilight telling Celestia that she was right in making her leave like that.
I like seeing a Celestia who makes mistakes, and tries to fix them. Fallibility makes her feel more like a character and less like a plot device. Although I do notice that she’s not on the character section, and won’t expect much involvement on her half.
I wonder, does Celestia realize just how negatively Twilight interpreted the letter?
I wonder if anypony will claim to be the Celestia's "secret student" when nopony can figure out who she is.
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Does Trixie attend?
No, the questions aren't related at all in any way conceivable that you might possibly ever imagine. Why do you ask?
An interesting start, I'm liking how this is going so far.
Nicely done my friend, you get a fav.
I thought this story was dead but it was a good chapter and I like how you're able to explain all the magic stuff on a way that everyone can understand
This story is off to a very nice start. I like how you can still take Twilight's actions for her new friends seriously while also making them fun to read. Keep up the good work and have a like!
Loving how this is starting off so far, going great if i do say so myself.
Good job!
Loving how this is starting off so far, going great if i do say so myself.
Good job!
But she never actually says that. The word only shows up in these two paragraphs out of both chapters. Is he interpreting her explanation of how impossible he is to be an accusation of monsterhood, or is there a missing sentence somewhere?
Now I wonder even more about what he did to hold open the portal. We now have a good reason for why he shouldn't be able to do that (a fairly simple matter of power), but how did he? If it is only "risking" bursting into flame from backlash, could it be that he has a method of tapping into the leyline on the other side of the Looking Glass without needing to be there himself?
I would think it to be something he created himself, or that is taught to teachers at the Academy. Twilight appears to have put no small amount of effort into researching Looking Glasses (or perhaps simply their similarities to teleportation?), and unless it's some secret art hidden away somewhere or is randomly written into some spellbook where nopony would have thought to look, it probably isn't something she could have learned at the Library back home... probably.
How pleasant. Now, when she finds out that Pen Umbra is one of Celestia's friends, that Celestia has talked to him about her but had never told Twilight he existed (even (especially?) when she was planning to banish her off to some far-away school with him as the one knowing her secret), Twilight will be even more upset about being banished from the Princess's side, except now she'll think the Princess cared even less about her than Twilight thought she did.
I don't think the good Professor is quite on the money when it comes to Twilight's "friend". Looks like Twilight is still just putting up with her. Still quite a lot of quiet resentment here, and not much cause for it to leave. My guess is that eventually confiding in Fluttershy when bottling up her anger gets too much will help with that, but it's difficult to imagine what would happen from there this early... if it happens at all.
I have to wonder--what was Celestia thinking when she sent Twilight away? Is it an attempt to push the Bearers-to-be together? Is Celestia too overwhelmed with work/preparations to teach? Has Twilight reached the point that Celestia can't keep up with her questions (not that she doesn't know the answers, there's just too much for her to teach and not enough time)? Is this just supposed to get Twilight to get friends? Or socialize at all? Is Twilight like a mother, sister, or just a friend to Spike--and how does she feel about leaving him behind?
If Celestia ever sends a letter to Twilight... that would be interesting. It would either give Twilight her long-awaited explanation, or avoid what Twilight wants to know entirely, prompting a cold or angry letter in return. Dear Princess Celestia...
I again admit that I'd like whatever Celestia intends to do to initially fail so we can watch her try to fix what she messed up (but with added feels. Preferably good feels, at least after the initial conflict).
I might be interpreting the story more emotionally than it actually it is, though.
Also, how old are Twilight & co. in this story? I'm inclined to say preteens, but I can't tell. Are Applejack and Rainbow Dash other students, or are they staff members? If they're students, how many in the staff know Twilight's secret?
I like Rarity commenting on Twilight's regal posture just a paragraph before saying she could spot the student in an entire crowd of unicorns.
Also, props to you for that. For whatever reason, the "lived in a castle" part of her background doesn't get addressed much, even in simple ways (such as posture and body language).
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... dead?
The first chapter was posted less than two weeks ago. That's not nearly enough time to be called 'dead'.
I see what you did there
COOL! Update!
Um... when did that happen? I went back and checked, and I can't find what he's referring to.
So, when will nightmare moon show up so the six of them can get teleported to Zordon as 6 Overbearing and Overemotional Ponies to become the Element of Harmony Rangers.
That is where this is going, right?
All joking aside, this was a nice chapter. My only complaint is that I'm still not quite sure where this story is going, but I'm content to come along for the ride.
PS. Pen Umbra is still voiced by Tom Hanks.
Well there goes the academy or at least a chunk of it
That was an incredibly abrupt way of resolving what had appeared to be a primary source of dramatic tension. Abandonment fears disappear, she suddenly likes the school, she realizes she has to make friends, and she finds a connection to Celestia again. Fixing this only three chapters and barely 6,000 words into the story is jarringly swift--and I say this even when I set aside my personal desire to see it milked for all it's worth.
The dream is concerning, though. Sure, it could just be a nonsensical nightmare, but my bet is that it's more meaningful than that. And there's still the question of why she sent Twilight to the school in the first place.
Nice choice of dorm names, btw.
Hmmmmm... Pinkie has arrived 8D
GIVE HER FIVE CANS OF ENERGY DRINKS!
*coughoverdrivecough*
Nice job!
Typical Twilight no matter what can't be tardy for anything
Ah, Twilight. You beautiful, wonderful shut-in.
Just be sure to go to dinner at the last 45 minutes or so. They won't kick you out until you're done eating, there will be fewer people there, and even if you are trapped in conversation you will have a way out provided to you quickly enough.
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No personal experience there at all, nope. Not me.
Hm... I wouldn't expect her to be so opposed to attending the Carnival, although her mood is pretty bad. If it weren't for that and the large crowds, such a collection of magical... stuff would probably be fascinating.
Although that's really just speculation--I suppose we can infer a bit, but you haven't actually told us what the Carnival is, whether it's student-run or not, why it's happening, etc.
What's the passcode for? I didn't see anything in the message that suggested why it might be needed. Does he code-key his door or something? He did say he was paranoid...
Was Sunset Shimmer Celestia's apprentice here, too? If so, that might be bad for Twilight's self-esteem; unless Sunset left Celestia's teachings of her own accord to continue at the school, knowing that another of Celestia's students got dropped at school and forgotten would have to really hurt.
Of course, if Sunset was her student here, Celestia definitely wouldn't have forgotten her. But considering that Twilight had never even heard about her before, it is reasonable to think that Twilight would think the worst. Added to that... it sounds like Twilight's been Celestia's student for some time (Shining Armor hasn't had nearly enough time to have already reached Captain if it's only been 2 years since her apprenticeship began), so that would mean that Celestia had held a secret second student...well, secret from her. A secret first student, really--she's the second.
That could be... painful.
But you've quite firmly set this into AU, and hopefully she's just a brilliant, possibly noble student (hah! "just" brilliant!). I wonder how good she is as friend-ing? It would be interesting to see a reverse of their canon relationship, with Sunset pulling Twilight into the light of friendship instead.
Will we be learning any of the magical secrets of the dorms? We've seen a little passive stuff, but will Twilight's study of Star allow her to do... I dunno, special magic things? To do special magic things while in the dorms? Like go directly from one room to another without going through a hall, or unlock a locked door, or make a door to any room in the building appear in a hallway, or reshape her room to her liking, or bring food directly to her room, or summon a golem to clean up for her, or magically connect her bookshelf to the library, or make the door to her room disappear so annoying pink ponies can't find her?
Oh Twily, you silly poni you.
Nice chapter! :D
And an awesome update.
What comes next will be interesting; how accurately does Twilight judge her own knowledge and education? Even if she's completely on the dot about herself, will she under- or overestimate the difficulty of the school's class(es)?
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How many classes will she take? Because depending on if they do classes by the day or by the week, she could take a lot. Her hobbies consist of learning new things (which she's sort of already doing), practicing magic (she's learning magic), and reading. She doesn't have many interests apart from that, and no family, Celestia, or Spike to spend down time with. The Mane 6 might no longer be in the "actively dislike being around" category (maybe), but I don't think she's at the point that she'd plan out time for them.
The only times she needs to leave unoccupied by classes in her schedule are for meals, studying, sleeping, pleasure reading, and research for fun (like studying the school). Loads of potential there for her to put too much on herself.
Can't wait to see the reaction of [insert older pony here] when Twily shows up in their class.
Is the lack of a Sunset Shimmer tag intentional, or just something you forgot to add on as the story/your plans for the story progressed? The last couple of chapters looked to give her some importance, but is she really just a side character?
Twilight is very mechanical Dx she needs to loosen up some, jeebus.
Nice job!
I wonder if anybody will notice a first year going to different classes? Yet again nobody really questioned the power of the Hall of Mirrors
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Okay are you following me? lol. You seem to read everything I do XD
6316190 lol, naw XD just coincidence I'm sure.
*hides GPS tracker*
Awesome chapter well done!
heheheh, loved that bit at the end ^w^
Keep it up!
I really enjoyed reading this hope to read more soon
I need to finish reading house of leaves...
Sorry for bugging you but I was woundering if you know when you might be posting the next chapter???
the ch and the ones before it rocks cant wait ot read more ch& storys you make so I look forward to them and wish you the best of luck
Sorry for bugging you yet anagin but I was woundering when the next chapter is coming out because I really like this story and it been so long since the last update.
sorry for bugging you gain but I was wondering if you might know when you might be posting a new chapter
Sorry for bugging you again but do you know when the next chapter will be posted?
Sorry for bugging you but it has been so long since the last chapter was posted and I was hopeing you would know when the next chapter will be posted
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MOAR!!!!!!!! I NEED MOAR