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Ok. Now that the grammar fixes are out of the way, on to the review! So far i'm liking your story's originality as well as the tone settings you've used. The idea of having a A.I. is an excellent idea and the way that ratchet interacts with the world is very well thought out. For example, how she took the time to bury the bodies of her team as well as the family, shows that she is still behaving as she would've before the mega spells with a few exceptions (such as breaking and entering). The background tone of sadness and regret is very clearly expressed by your use of world building descriptions that show how the world she knew is gone. Overall, there are very few errors this time which is something i'm very happy to see and the story is progressing along nicely at a not too slow but not too fast pace. You're pacing the story exceptionally well, giving us (and Ratchet) time to get use to our surroundings instead of barraging us with raider/slaver attacks right of the bat like a lot of FO:E fan-fics. This is an essential factor to me as a FO:E Fan-Fic reader, since it gives me something unique to read and not just the same old , gory, bullets-flying-everywhere kind of style of FO:E fan-fic that are all too common place now. In other words, great job and keep up the good work
6211277 I'm glad you're continuing to enjoy it! And, thanks again for showing me the errors I had. The first and last I never would have found, since I talk like that normally. :P
I love it! please make more of the story^.^
6216599 Working on it! :D