XVI: Fin
Mortar gasped as sweat covered his face. He looked up at the daunting task ahead of him. His chest heaved as he leaned on the body next to him.
“Come on, Mortar. You’re halfway there,” Silver replied as Mortar leaned on her.
“But...” Mortar wheezed.
“But what?” Silver replied.
“It’s a whole ’nother flight of stairs!” Mortar whined. Giving one last gasp, he fell to his haunches, panting.
Silver smiled gently as she sat next to Mortar. Opening her saddlebag, she grabbed a bottle of water and offered it to him.
“Thank you,” Mortar quickly replied as he grabbed the bottle. Opening it with his teeth, he quickly drank the entire thing. “I really needed that,” he said as his breathing slowed.
“Of course,” Silver replied.
Silver looked over at Mortar and smiled. It had been a couple of months, but Mortar was finally cleared to leave after his rehab. His mane had grown back, and his grey coat hid most of his scars. Although he walked with a limp and looked out of shape, he was healthy. More importantly, he could walk on his own, albeit slowly. It took them the entire afternoon to walk from the hospital to his apartment. He had to stop often for breaks, but he was walking, nonetheless.
Silver continued to smile as she gently leaned on Mortar. Mortar’s ears perked as his tail twitched, a blush growing on his face.
“S-Silver, what are you doing?” Mortar blurted out. He knew Silver loved him, but she rarely showed it in public places. It was only when she knew they were alone that she would open up.
“Resting,” she replied as she closed her eyes. “That, and I am happy that you are finally out of that place. There were always too many ponies around for my liking.”
“Well, I am glad to be out of there, too. The food was getting disgusting.” Mortar chuckled. The two continued to sit there, resting and enjoying each other’s company.
After a couple of minutes, Silver finally got up. Putting her saddlebags back on, she nudged Mortar with a hoof.
“Come on, let’s go. It is getting late. Just one more flight of stairs and we can make it to your apartment,” Silver said.
“Can’t I just sleep here?” Mortar asked, pouting.
“Like I would allow such a thing!” Silver retorted, raising her chin.
Mortar gave out a loud sigh, slowly getting up. Gulping as he looked at the task ahead, he raised his right forehoof.
“Journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step, right?”
“Indeed it does, but that does not mean you have to go alone,” Silver added as she smiled at Mortar.
“What would I do without you?” Mortar chuckled.
“Apparently, sleep on a dirty staircase out in the open,” Silver replied, nudging him.
The door slowly opened, and Mortar and Silver walked in.
“Well, sorry ’bout the mess you’re going to see. I obviously have not been here in a while. There is going to be dust everywhere,” Mortar said as he fumbled around for the lightswitch. “Here it is!”
Mortar gasped as the lights flickered on. He expected a dusty and rundown apartment, but instead his apartment looked like it was brand new.
“How did this happen?” Mortar asked as his jaw dropped.
“Oh, that,” Silver replied as she dropped her bags down on a table. “While you were in the hospital, I took care of your place. I did not want to give you work, especially when you came back.”
“But how did you get in? I always lock my apartment when I leave it,” Mortar replied as he looked around. He wiped his hoof on couch and then inspected it.
“It’s simple. I took your keys when nopony was looking and made a copy of them. Once I got a copy, I put the original back,” Silver said as she reached in her backpack and pulled out a key.
“But you stole my keys!” Mortar whined.
“Oh hush,” Silver said nonchalantly as she pushed Mortar towards his bed. “I did not steal them; I just borrowed them, is all. Besides, I cleaned your apartment for you. You should thank me anyways. Now, stop complaining and go to bed—you need your rest.”
“Fine, fine!” Mortar whined as he hobbled to his bed. Carefully getting in, he gave a loud sigh as he leaned back. “Well, I guess I’ll see you tomorrow, right?”
“What?” Silver said as she raised an eyebrow. “What do you mean? I am staying here, of course.”
“What?” Mortar gasped as his eyes widened, sitting up. “Why?”
“Why,” Silver replied put a hoof on Mortar’s chest, gently pushing him back down. “Because you can barely walk up a pair of stairs by yourself. Do you think I am just going to leave you alone? Somepony needs to watch over you and make sure you don’t get hurt again, and that’s me.”
Mortar started to slightly blush. “Oh.”
“Now,” Silver said as she looked around, “I guess I’ll sleep on the couch or something. I will figure it out. Just call me if you need help with something.”
“Or,” Mortar said as his eyes darted around, not looking at Silver.
“Or what?” Silver replied, a confused look on her face.
“You can, you know, share this bed with me,” Mortar said quietly as he looked away, his blush growing.
Silver squinted her eyes, glaring down at him. “Is this your attempt to get me in bed with you?”
Mortar tried to hide by getting smaller, his eyes staring at his hooves. “Maybe?” he said meekly.
She lowered her head, staring directly into Mortar’s eyes. Suddenly, her face softened as she gave a small smile. “Luckily for you, it worked.”
“Really?” Mortar asked, surprised, his eyes widening and his blush continuing to grow.
“Let me just get ready,” she said as she got up, walking towards the bathroom.
Silver turned off the sink as she wiped her face off with a towel. She looked into the mirror. She squinted her eyebrows as she stared at her reflection. She tilted her head, examining all the features on her face.
Guess this is it, Silver thought. This is my life now—to be just an average marefriend, possibly a wife and mother. I cannot turn back; I already burned that bridge. No power, no kingdom, just Mortar and me. But did I make the right choice?
“Silver, are you coming?” Mortar shouted from his room.
Silver shook her head as she blinked her eyes. “Coming!” she shouted back.
Taking one last glimpse in the mirror, she turned around and walked out. As she did, she saw Mortar scoot to the side of the bed. He looked at her, patting the spot next to him. Silver gave a small smile as she lay down next to him, their bodies barely touching. She let out a sigh, closing her eyes and trying to get comfortable.
Mortar looked at Silver. His eyes darted around, his hooves shaking slightly. Gulping, he quickly hugged Silver, her head resting on his chest.
Silver’s eyes quickly shot open, looking up at a blushing Mortar. A blush started to grow on her face.
“I j-just thought it would be more comfortable, you know?” Mortar said nervously.
Silver could feel and hear his heartbeat. She lay there, listening to it for a couple of seconds. A smile grew on her face as she closed on her eyes, her tail intertwining with his.
Who am I kidding? she thought, of course I made the right choice.
And there, she had a blissful sleep.
Dear Celestia and Luna,
Sorry for the informality, but given my past, I do not think I can call either of you Princesses. I mean no disrespect; it is just too awkward for me. In addition, I have a feeling that you enjoy the informality, anyways.
How long has it been now, almost four months since that day when I was brought to Canterlot in chains? I cannot believe how much has transpired since then. It amazes me even now that I am happily living with Mortar Brick as a fellow pony. Mortar is doing great, by the way. He has regained his muscles, and his limp is nowhere near as noticeable as it once was. He’s even started to think about work again, though I warned him that he had better not work in any high places. I will literally nail him to the ground if I have to.
I have no regrets for the choices I made. Every day, it is a joy to wake up knowing that Mortar is right beside me in our bed. I took your suggestion, and starting now I will write letters to you two periodically. Now, even though you suggested it, I bet you are surprised that I actually took you up on your offer. But really, other than Mortar, you two are the closest friends I have.
I am writing this letter to say “thank you.” Believe me, it took a lot of effort just to write this down, but I have to be completely honest with myself. I cannot live in a lie, trying to hide away from the truth. So thank you for going against my wishes and sparing my life. Thank you for giving me not only another chance at life, but also a wonderful life. I cannot imagine a future without Mortar.
At first, I thought I would have to wear a mask for the rest of my time, pretending to like other ponies, pretending that I fit in. But to my surprise, I do not have to do that anymore. I’ve made other friends, ponies that I actually like. While I know there are a few out there who infuriate me, the majority of them are pleasant folk. I am actually enjoying the company of others. Still, though, I will always prefer Mortar’s company to anyone else’s.
We should have some coffee or lunch together sometime. I think you two will be amazed at how Mortar looks now.
Your friend, now and forever,
Silver Skip
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Alas, the curtains come to a close as the story comes to the end. Chrysalis has gone through a lot, some bad and some good, but she is stronger because of it. There will be no music for the last chapter, as it has come to the end.
Thank you all for reading and liking my story. It means a lot to me to know that there are people out there who enjoyed it. It has been a ton of work, but I am glad that I finished it.
A few people have asked me about a possible sequel to this story. I will admit that I am conflicted on this issue. One reason I don't want to do is I don't know how many people are interested in a sequel. I have 850 favs but only 540 likes. So there is a large sum of people who appear to still be on the fence about this story. I know some did not agree on how I portrayed Chrysalis in this setting. Another reason why I don't want to do it is because the story will be fluffy compared to this. I mean Chrysalis has accepted her new life, and does not want to upthrone anyone. So the story will mainly be just Mortar and Chrysalis just living a normal life. Next, I don't know if my editors, who have helped me so much, would want to work on something else. Most importantly though, how would I end a sequel if it just about the lives of Silver and Mortar? I would need to sit down and think of a story line to make sure I have a good ending. Lastly, there are other ideas that I want to try out.
On the other hand, I also want to make a sequel. There are things that I can still do. One of the things I wanted to write is a possible meeting of Silver with Shinning Armor and Princess Cadence/ or Twilight Sparkle. This can be a nice conflict to have, and a good spot to put interesting drama and dialogue. A stand off between the now Silver Skip and Shinning Armor/Twilight Sparkle. How will the act?
I just don't know how many people are interested. I am afraid that if I do write one, not many people will read it. But if there are a lot of people out there who want a sequel, then I feel like I should give it to them
Tell me what you guys think, and Ill see what I can do. For news on what I will do next, I will post them on my blog in my user page.
Again, thank you guys for reading and liking this story.
With much thanks,
Foxy Kimchi
I don't know about others but I would most certainly read a sequel. Conflict with meeting Twilight and friends with or without Shining Armor. As for fluff/happy story, it seems to me that lately there are a lot of sad/gloom and doom stories, and I would like to see some happier type stories. Whatever you decide
keep up the good work.
B.D.
This was an impeccable journey from beginning to the end
We would welcome more side stories, but they will always feel that way; side stories. The confrontation can probably be a one shot, I suppose.
I'm not sure I 'liked' it or not already
, so I'll just state it her, yes I like it! And I would read a sequel. And fluff or not, they say you learn as much from your mistakes
as from your successes. So bad or not, write, write, write
Dude - 850 people thought your story was worth following. That fact alone should be enough to convince you to write a sequel.
In addition, two thirds of those people thought it qualified for an additional statement of approval.
And let's not forget the number of reviews telling you how good this is.
Trust me, a sequel would be well received, at worst.
That said, only start it if you genuinely beleive you have enough material.
Regardless of your decision, I look forward to your next work.
I loved this story, personally. I would certainly read a sequel. Plus, no matter what, you're always going to have more favorites than likes. Do whatever you feel like.
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story is awesome, thank you
great job and look forward to more
I don't know about the others, but I would definitely be down for a sequel. I would like to see how the others react to this, especially since we know that Twilight isn't above second-guessing the princess. There are still plenty more opportunities for drama and conflict. And sappiness, can't forget that.
It has been a fun ride though, and I've enjoyed it from the start.
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A sequel would be awesome!
I loved every chapter of this story.
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Actually, there is one more problem that I completely forgot. How would I end a sequel?
Other than that, thank you for your support and comments.
If interested, look on my blog for updates on what ill do next.
This was a great story. So great, you should not do a sequel. Leave it as it is, just my two bits
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understood, you could do something about the rest of her hive or others or simply a slice of life. Heck do something completely different if you want, you did an excellent job with this one. I actually went back and looked at some of the past chapters; I greatly enjoy your tense moments: giving up her pride to call Celestia for help, the changeling shade explaining her life to Mortar, there are great moments in there. Whatever you decide go for it, go for what feels right. Heck I'll help if I can. This website has so many good stories and make no mistake this was a great story. Until next time
2174588 Well you have my support! I can see a story with a meeting with SA/twi (or any of the mane six for that matter) to make for an interesting story. Heck, it could even be a simple one shot if it is easier. But whatever you end up doing, just remember to have fun with it. Too many times do I see an author try to continue a story who have lost all interest in it, but are only still writing it to make the fans happy. But anyway, great story. Have a thumbs up and a mustache
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That is a task for future Fox Kimchi.
I usually make a general policy of waiting until a story is finished before I click "like", since ofttimes a promising story goes off the rails partway through.
So, I just clicked "like". :) We all knew that Chrysalis would come around, of course, since Friendship is Magic. But it was a nice journey getting there.
Whether you write a sequel or not depends on whether you've got a good idea for one. As you say, just watching Silver and Mortar hang around for chapters on end would probably be a bit dull. But there's lots of stuff going on in this world to hang a plot on. You could not only have Silver meet with Twilight, you could have Twilight's recent alicornification come up as a point of contention between the two perhaps. There's been a bunch of stories about Twilicorn lately but I haven't seen many featuring someone *else* reacting to her new status. Lots of room for fun there.
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You all bring excellent points. I will post updates on my blog about what I will do next. Maybe some sleep while help me decide on what I should do.
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Yeah I am starting to do this more. And that is what I am afraid of for a sequel, it will just be dull if it just everyday stuff. But there are some interesting things that I can do. I will look into this and post updates on my blog about the future.
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Thank you! I was aiming for that.
This is such a bueatifully crafted fic and one of my favorite Chrysalis stories to date. I really like how everthing flowed together nicely and if there is a sequel I hope it is even better then this one.
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Uhhh - a letter to the Princess?
Sorry, I can't really help without seeing at least an outline of the preceding events. And, as a person who wants to _read_ that story, that is, obviously, not an option.
I'm afraid I can't really see them being friends - not after what she did to them. Perhaps phrase it as a quest to earn redemption... okay, okay, fine that's how _she_ would choose to see it. Everyone else would see it as an attempt to appease her conscience. After all, never before has she had friends and family. Now, she sees what such bonds are, and would feel terrible for corrupting them such as she did (for those two, at least). She certainly knows love, and knows the fear of losing it (albeit with [arguably] less horrific consequences). Whether she knows enough of freindship to understand the deep hurt caused by the scorn of friends is questionable. Regardless, it _does_ sound like friendship letter material.
...Hmm. Yeah, I see what you mean. A satisfactory ending i rather difficult to come up with in that scenario.
Amazing fanfic. Beautiful job.
I would totally read a sequel. What? More likes than faves? Oops. I usually only put stories I really like into my faves...situation amended. story liked. Take all the time you need on your next story. Even if you don't want a sequel all about Silver and Mortar or a making friends with Mane 6, you might try making them major characters in whatever other ideas you talked about wanting to try. That way, you have conflict that can be definitively ended, the ending and events leading up to it aren't all predictable (1.Twilight & friends meet Silver, 2.have problem, 3.????, 4.best friends).
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it should not really matter whom might be interested in reading. the plain honest truth is: if you write it, someone will read it.
that said, this was a wonderful read, i am sad to see it end, but as Q once said to Picard .. .. All good things must end.
as for the possibility of a sequel, yes! please! more silver skip/mortar! show us how Shining armor , Cadence and Twilight Sparkle handle meeting the pair of lovebirds!
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Ahh! The Story ended! I'm really sad it's over, but happy it had such a sweet ending. I mean, this is the first MLP FanFic I've actually read and fallen in love with. It was one of the first I ever even read. I really don't know what I'll do without it updating...I guess there'll be the sequel. If you need ideas, I have a few. But you're the author. Do what you want.
Interesting... well I'm sorry to see the changelings go. Just as I'm sorry to see her power fade but I am glad that even now she asks herself if she made the right choice before brushing it aside. Even if it's pretty obvious to them that they're happy with the choice they made it's nice to see that the fact that it was such a heavy choice didn't just vanish when they made their choice... but I is still sad that her power be gone... but I'll be happy for her.
The only reason I haven't hit that little thumbs up icon is because I try to reserve that until the story is completed. Maybe I should change that...?
Anyway, as for a sequel, I won't expect one, but I would definitely enjoy seeing one. As a bit of personal advice, though: if you end up having to force things to get a sequel out you may as well not even bother. Sorry if you already know that, though.
I think I'll follow you. Your stuff seems interesting.
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If there's a sequel, I promise to be delighted.
Bravo, good end.
It was a lovely journey.
I always need some music to accompany the stories I read and what you did here in every chapter was great (ponies have gave me so much new music so far).
As for a sequel I think it would be interesting to see how Cadence and/or Twilight cope with the fact that Chrysalis lives.
Eyup.
for sequel.
Or side-stories, one-shots - whatever for you will have plot or idea.
Good ending BTW. Though only "four months"? Seemed to me that this whole storyline should have took more?
Please make an alternet ending were she kills him or pinkie will get some free ingredients for her cupcakes
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I am a little sad too that it is over, but I am glad that it is finished though.
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I am aware of that, but I also thought it be more dramatic that she lost it all. She gave it all up for something better. I think it is more meaninful that she went through all of that.
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Yeah I know. Hence why I am thinking about it. More likely if I do make one, it will be side stories/one shots rather than an arch. It would be too boring if it was just Mortar and Silver living together.
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Yeah part of me wants to have a meeting with them. There is a lot of potential there.
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Yeah I did a last minute change about the time line. I wanted to keep it short so that it leaves me wiggle room. What I mean is that if I do make a sequel, I will be able to keep this story possible in the actual canon of the show. If I made it longer, it seemed to me it would leave question about the whole Twilight Alicorn thing. That way, I can still have the option of Chrysalis talking to Twilight in either form, normal unicorn or princess one. It gives me options.
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I have thought of alternate endings, but not where she killed Mortar. Rather the entire plot was set up by Celestia as a way to break Chrysalis' will and have her submit to her.
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I have to say this story could not have delivered a better ending, love the picture at the end, I really am curious if you're going to do anything else with this universe.
Until then!
Thanks for the great fic, it was fun, and I really enjoyed the music you provided for it.
And if you really want, instead of a sequel you could just write little one shots once in a while if you think they are interesting.
Well i like that idea foxy
I vouch for me and the other voices in my head....
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2175643 I agreee with you :D
That was just beautiful, start to finish. Thank you for putting out such a unique, yet true to the actual character version of Chrysalis, and thank you for such an awesome fic.
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It wouldn't have been as meaningful if she'd kept some power. Having her lose ALL of it was really what gave it a much bigger impact.
Hey kimchi. I love the story. It feels complete. Also don't do a sequel. It's done. I think they can just have their happily ever after. I will keep an eye on you.
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I won't tell you whether or not you should write a sequel. That is your decision. But let me say that this story stands well on its own, and will continue to stand just fine without a sequel. It ends perfectly in that respect. With finality, but the door is unlocked just in case.
I, and I'm sure those 850 others, would love to see where Chrysalis' life goes from here, and you wouldn't necessarily have to write a full-fledged sequel for it. I've read one story, A Wolf in Sheep's Clothing, that added some one-shot bonus chapters after it completed.
In summary, I don't think this story needs a sequel, but I would definitely read one should you write it.
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I would probably read a sequel. But I'm not certain it would be esy to make one and have it be good. This story worked. I enjoyed it. But...it ended. Forcing things to keep going after they end doesn't always work.
You could possibly write side stories to fill in details that were missed in the telling of this story. But that wouldn't really be a sequel. If you really want to write a sequel, the most obvious way to do it would be for changelings to show up looking for Chrysalis. Possibly missed survivors. Maybe changelings from other hives. That could be taken in many possible directions. Perhaps she is given her powers back without intending to get them back. Perhaps she could be put in the situation of having changelings who have lost their hive be dependent on her for survival. Even if she doesn't want to seek power, it might be difficult for her to turn away changelings if doing so meant that they would die on their own. Or perhaps simply another hive can be brought into the story as an antagonist, and Chrysalis can be brought into the Canterlot political landscape as a consultant because she is obviously the most knowledgeable creature available.
It could be done. A sequel wouldn't have to merely be Silver and Mortar living their lives. But I think it would need to be carefully thought out. And very likely it would need to be a very different type of story than this one. Look at the Platinum Crown. It's a sequel to The Best Night Ever, but it has a completely different feel. It's a different type of story that merely happens to follow previous continuity. You could do that here, but be aware of the possibility of alienating audiences. People who enjoy March to the Scaffold are likely to go into a sequel expecting more of the same. I don't see a way to easily give them more of the same that works.
So, yes...I would read a sequel. But this is probably not an easy story to write a sequel for.
This is a simply amazing story, by the end you can't even tell she was once chrysalis. It flows incredibly well, It rivals any other fanfiction on this sight. Bravo good sir bravo.
2174588 I would read the sequel. I would read instant any chapter comes out, even if it is one in the morning on a school night. Just give a link at the end of this story as a new chapter so it shows up in my notifications and I will be good to go.
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I'd read it.
This story has been absolutely amazing over all. I love how your able to properly discribe your characters, without makeing it sound like a child's first attempt at creative writing. I would defiantly read a sequel, and may even write my own side story if that's alright with you.
The only thing that I didn't like, was how in the last two chapters, every other word had something to do with silvers love for mortar. She lost the Chrysalis part of her that made her amazing. And although I like a good romance. The last two chapters discriptions could have used better word choice. Expecially the letter.
But over all, I love the story. I think it's EqD material. Grade A. Fantastic!
2174588 I'd likely read such a story, if I saw it.
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