This story is a sequel to Savage
The rumors were many. Some reasonable, others unbelievable. But it was not until some unlucky souls stumbled upon it that they were able to find out their veracity. These are some of the recorded instances when the Everfree creature came in contact with the neighboring populace.
These are the other encounter ideas that I had while developing Savage, not its sequel. Any continuation of it will be in the original story.
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Chapters (3)
Hi
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Intrigue!!
What happened to the pack of wolves he was with?
wow, I can't expect for the next chapter!, please moaar
6291769 In this scenario they do not exist, although there's one that I am working on where they do.
6291906 oh ok. Cause I was starting to think he ate them.
Oh and I hope Zecora's ok.
It's back!
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6291911 Yeah, me too, I miss the wolfies, and I like Zecora, I don't want her to die....
Oh god...It's......
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Awww man, poor Zecora, i do hope she will be ok.
I really want to be pissed at the guy, but put anyone in his position and most would revert to our more primitive ways.
Poor beaver.
wow, i can't expect for the next chapters!! it's one of the bests human in equestria stories ever!
That poor tree. He smudged his blood over its bark.
Steve from minecraft, we've found your missing, powerless cousin in Equestria, please construct a neither gate and come pick him up.
YES. YESSS... UPDATE!
Finally it's begin.
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I don´t know how to feel about this story.It appears that the time in the forest have managed to de-evolve him by a few levels.Savage indeed.
Just for once I would like to see that overconfident skyblue horse getting a knife in the torso as response to a blind charge attack.
6471014 Usually I'm the one who does that. Though I use my hand instead of a knife. Who needs a weapon when one is a weapon?
(Alondro is a Death Scythe...)
Ok, not only is this guy a conveniently a wilderness master (unlike 99% of the population who'd be dead in less than a day), but he's also so fucking stupid he doesn't notice OBVIOUSLY INTELLIGENT BEHAvior by a creature wearing artificial jewelry.
I normally try to reign in swearing, but fuck this guy. My tolerance for the stupid no longer exists.
And he's magic-resistant.
Of course. And managed to survive a decade in a place that's clearly alien... and never once found a pony town despite the fact that the Everfree could be traversed by foot in a few days.
Not that it would help him at all against a manticore, hydra, cragodile, quarry eel, dragon, etc...
Everything I read only makes me want to punch him in the face harder. I have never seen an HiE where the human was simultaneously a master of his domain and a complete retard.
6471014 But the human who managed to be bucked repeatedly by a pony gettin up with hardly any damage is perfectly ok with you.... after he mindlessly tries to kill ponies that anyone not mentally ill or brain damagd to a severe extent could conclude by this time is intelligent.
Need I remind people that adult humans who've actually been living in the wild do not become mindless beasts...
Nor do they gain super strength such that being bucked in the face by horse hooves does no severe, crippling damage.
This is as guilty of human whoring as some stories are of pony whoring. Sheesh, if Twilight actually wanted to take him down, she could just pick up a tree and whack him across the forest with it. Magic resistance ain't gonna do shit against seveal tons moving at high velocity.
Wow, this story actually makes me want him to catch and eat them.
6471157 I have no idea what I did to deserve such a broken comment.
6471205 lol
6471205 You think Rainbow Dash should die because she saved her friend from certain death.
Really, what else could she do but charge in? The psycho Tarzan wanna-be was about to impale her!
A sudden attack was more than warranted! Whether intended as such by the author or not, when friend or family is within moments of death, if you can YOU ATTACK THE ASSAILANT!!
Unless you're a pussy jock or a vapid teenage girl. Then you go curl up and cry and get murdered next by the mysterious killer when you open the door the audience is screaming at you not to open.
6471257 ...That's what you took from my comment? An awful lot of presumptions in that fantasy of yours.
6471157 I know the survive a good hindleg kick is sketchy, but many people would go insane from 10 years in solitude. Also, maybe the "Savage" part of the title may have something to do with it.
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....wait...
1: 99% of which population? new york city? Alaska? Siberia? Africa?
2: t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcS9pF1VfDChJiUR5IAN59VdIy3JbsCatOrgd8VCggVO1eo4dI_IsGRpCfJeUQ by your logic, this dog is clearly sapient and is in no way, shape or form dressed up like that by it's owner.
3: Hi pot! I see you're calling the kettle black again!
Of all the ponies to have freak out over a wild animal being killed by a predator, why Fluttershy?
Canon Fluttershy knows animals eat each other. Sometimes she helps.
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If this Fluttershy is written consistently, she'll spend the rest of the fic screaming, "How dare you?!" at every obligate carnivore she sees, and it'll be hilarious. Most of the Mane SIx have meat eaters for pets. Cat, dog, owl, alligator. Do tortoises count? I'm pretty sure I've seen those things chow down on slow moving pigeons.
6471625 Any major city on Earth. Seriously, 99% of the people in Chicago wouldn't be able to survive without a government check. An about the only thing they know how to farm is weed.
The people you mentioned make up numbers of a few million at most.
The Earth's population is OVER 7 BIILION.
So, 99%....
You've proven how little you know about the human race today. People in the modern age are uniquely unfit to survive in the wild. The majority can't even build a fire in a modestly damp forest even with matches.
Nuff said.
Wild dogs don't dress up. BUT dogs owned BY CIVILIZED PEOPLE DO. So, even if the asshat ignores the very non-animal behaviors exhibited by these creatures, there's the OBVIOUS CONCLUSION that, hey, a civilized species must be living close-by and MADE THESE CLEARLY MANUFACTURED OBJECTS FOR THE ANIMALS.
And this is why you will never be a scientist: complete failure of qualitative and quantitative analysis and completely uni-direction line of thinking.
6471583 Going insane does not help you survive in the wild. The ones who go nuts END UP DEAD EVERY TIME. The ones who keep their heads and think have vastly higher survival rate. This is borne out by countless case studies. Even kids with mental illness who simply didn't know enough to be scared or upset survived, simply by virtue of not freaking out at any point.
A certain man lived basically "Alone in the Wilderness" for nearly 30 years... in central Alaska. Where it frequently drops to 40 below 0 and colder in winter. He had very minimal contact with other people, mainly for infrequent deliveries. Beyond those brief periods, he was by himself with the natural world for company. He was calm, collected, introspective, highly skilled, and respectful of even the animals he killed for food... and avoided killing any predators who weren't a threat.
He never went crazy, and only left when, after age 80, it was simply too hard for him.
THAT is the profile of a long-term survivor. Not a guy who reverts to a savage beast. THAT happens to be the profile of a psychotic killer.
6471014 Knifing a fast-moving, flying assailant is easier said than done. And Rainbow Dash easily moves as fast as an arrow, and accelerating while she does so as well. 'in-range' lasts only a small fraction of a second before impact.
6471711 Quite so.
6471583 Living in isolation would cause one to become extremely anti-social, along with probably some coping delusions. Considering we've seen his thoughts from his point of view, he does not seem to be suffering from severe delusions. The only possible reasoning that would justify him not realizing they're intelligent would be that he's literally starving. Possible, since he's had a bad run in hunting, but he's obviously thought about past encounters, and it should have been questionable in hindsight.
6471157 Yes, even though the ponies are smaller, getting hit by hooves should still hurt like hell. It'd be like being kicked by a goat at the least, even when hit by a punch from a standstill. Getting hit by a charging Rainbow Dash should be crippling, if not fatal. Could you imagine what would happen if you were hit by a labrador retriever wearing a helmet at 200 MPH?
(Even though the author does a terrible job of giving us some kind of scale to work with. Because if they're 3 foot at the withers, then they'd still be as large as a human and they should be wrecking him. I'm gonna guess they're 2 foot at the withers, just above knee-high, rather than waist-high.)
6472079 Well, you have a point, but we could be over-analyzing it, and that these plot holes are just for the convenience of plot. I mean, go ahead and complain all you want, I'm not judging, but personally, I find a story is best when you don't scrutinize over the plot holes (Like ant-man, for example).
6471711 Yes, this was something my editor also told me that could be questioned. My reasoning behind her reaction is that I believe that she would be more attached to the Beavertons(Rather close animal friends) then a random animal that she doesn't know. I think she would know the risk of dying that her animal friends have but don't you think seeing one of them getting killed right in from of her face wouldn't affect her. Think of it this way, when you have a pet you know it can and will eventually die. When the time comes, you'll be obviously sad but you knew it was coming. But if you see someone chase it down and kill it infront of your face, wouldn't you be pissed?
6472285 I guess I did forget to mention what kind of injuries the guy got from fighting her. I'll definitely need to go back and specify how bad she left him.
6472079 Hmm I never knew of that guy's case, guess I didn't my research well when I started the story. Still, I'm not going for ultra-realistic with this one, these chapters are more what if he went a bit crazy attacked the ponies he meets. Also, do you know were I can read about that man you said, that sounds really interesting.
This chapter charm me
finally a human layers to battle and not give up the ponies
and I was getting tired of stories where he is with them only to be beaten and taken to the library of Twilight
It is that many expected ponies win
as the stroke of a real horse
starts hurting
but occasionally one could take those freedoms
He was also the only surviving
I look forward to the next chapter
I hope to learn from this lesson and do not get to see the ponies
it will be a little more cautious hunter
greetings and good luck
6472469 Internet searches are magic!
"Alone in the Wilderness"
It's been on PBS like a gazillion times and is one of the highest-rated and requested shows. i own a copy.
Oh, and in later chapters, you've got to explain two highly implausible circumstances.
1. Why his brain is so addled he couldn't make common sense decisions. You could combine this cleverly with his magical resistance as coming from the fruit of Poison Joke, which is toxic to ponies but not to simians (which is very true of some plants we eat that other animals cannot), however in those species it doesn't just grant resistance to magic but also causes slow insanity (also plausible, as some alkaloids do work that way!). Zecora might recognize the signs, as might Twilight if she'd studied up on Poison Joke after "Bridle Gossip".
2. How he'd gone 10 years without ever leaving the Everfree. It is always the case that someone skilled in survival tactics of any kind will seek clues of civilization. There are a number of clearly-used paths in the Everfree, as well as the Castle of the Two Sisters and the ruins of the associated city smack in the middle. That's going to be MUCH harder to explain away. The only thing I can com up with at all is som notion of a curse that kept him wandering in circles without knowing it, and that would have to be a deliberate thing cast upon him. This cold be combined with the side effects of the Poison Joke berries as being the reason why the curse has suddenly broken and allowed him to encounter ponies at last.
PLOT STRUCTURE!!! OH MY NIPPLES!! THEY HURT WHEN I TWIST THEM!! *Mel Gibson smile*
Thanks, I we don't have much american chanels over here so I never saw that.
1.-Can you tell which so I can explain them.
2.-He didn't live the 10 years in the Everfree. He got there recently. Back when I was first developing the story I thought that the White Tail was a massive forest that was either very close or was conected to the Everfree. When I finally saw a map of Equestria I had already written and published the first chapter.
Also, I would've loved to use Poison Joke as an excuse but I never thought of it as the reason for his bad mental state or magic resistance.
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If you're looking at the EO official map, White Tail Woods IS an enormous forest, or at least part of one. He could've then follow the river east towards the Everfree. Remember that it's a tourist map, so cities and sites of interest will be blown way out of proportion to their surroundings, and distances will be all messed up. So if you consider Equestria's continent to essentially be a North America expy (and city names line up pretty well for that, though we have the macintosh hills and badlands instead of the gulf of mexico), then that forest would extend from Washington State, down into North California, then across northern Nevada, then up into Idaho, southern Montanna, Wyoming, South Dakota and maybe even Minnesota. Thus putting Ponyville/Canterlot in the Iowa/Wisconsin/Illinois/Missouri area. Nothing small about them woods.
Even though we know that White Tail Woods is actually within walking distance of Ponyville, since I don't think they'd go a quarter of the way across the country for that as the map would suggest. Which means you can stretch the landmarks out to whatever size you want. Maybe White Tail Woods actually goes all the way from where Northeastern California is for us all the way to the Midwest. And that's not even counting all the unlabeled forest area to the north/northeast/northwest.
I really liked the first story, and this also seems to be rather good. Keep going! =D
Well... shit. The girls got out alright, and Dash learned a valuable lesson about not doing more than the strictly necessary fighting actual threats. On the other hand, Caveman is getting wiser to their tactics and the beaver will allow him to survive and re-strengthen for a while longer.
They need to get the Guard and the Princesses in on this, if only as a backup to an ingenious capture plan. Preferably with Pinkie's help.
How's that "much to his luck"? The bloody attack failed!
6548955 I thought that 'Much to his luck' was a way to say 'Unfortunately'.
Like saying "Much to his luck, the store was closed." Or have I interpreted that phrase the wrong way?
6551474 You got that backwards due to the sarcasm of the first example you ever saw, I'd say
"Much to his/her/its/their luck" means the exact same as "fortunately".
6551482 Well this is embarrassing
Thanks for pointing it out.
I feel like ive read this before.... Did you redo it or something?
6626561 I separated it from Savage a few months ago, maybe from there?
when is the next chapter due? curious how things will proceed.
6629281 Around two months more or less. I am a slow writer
I don't know how other authors manage to write so much in so little time. I have a general idea of what will happen next chapter, but haven't started writing it yet. Right now I'm giving priority to another chapter for Savage so I won't start until I'm done with that one first.
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Oh damn. And here I thought I was psychic or something.