Interesting seeing how things are progressing, and that was smooth of dash. The way you placed means we can see why RD is empathetic so its really cool to read.
Just a thing, Would you mind putting some kind of indication, either of time or something like -Flashback- in those sections? It's a little confusing at times through once i read the rest of it it tends to make sense where it is.
6635394 I did make a reference to how long ago the flashbacks were in the first chapter, but seeing as its been 40,000 words since then I suppose it well overdue for another indication. This is the kind of feedback I really appreciate, Thank you. :)
I love how the magical map is playing matchmaker by kicking the rest of the group out so rarity and rainbow can get it on. "Uhh, yeah, you need to go to the other side of the country and uhh.... Save a building? sure lets go with that. Also Maybe it's just me but i'm totally getting a bad vibe from stormy. Like she is about to stir up a major crapstorm. Not that she's evil or anything, just.... problematic.
"Teusday," huh?
6635346 Ah, ok thanks for the heads up.
Interesting seeing how things are progressing, and that was smooth of dash. The way you placed means we can see why RD is empathetic so its really cool to read.
Just a thing, Would you mind putting some kind of indication, either of time or something like -Flashback- in those sections? It's a little confusing at times through once i read the rest of it it tends to make sense where it is.
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I did make a reference to how long ago the flashbacks were in the first chapter, but seeing as its been 40,000 words since then I suppose it well overdue for another indication.
This is the kind of feedback I really appreciate, Thank you. :)
Since when do ponies have toes?
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You're being silly. :P
Edit: I kinda fixed it. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
I love how the magical map is playing matchmaker by kicking the rest of the group out so rarity and rainbow can get it on. "Uhh, yeah, you need to go to the other side of the country and uhh.... Save a building? sure lets go with that.
Also Maybe it's just me but i'm totally getting a bad vibe from stormy. Like she is about to stir up a major crapstorm. Not that she's evil or anything, just.... problematic.