i enjoy your ship story so far, you covered a lot of bases, you setup the setting fairly well, i say the engine is warmed up and ready to go into the romance soon, but don't feel like you have to rush, sometimes a good tease is just as good as having what you want right away, make us readers earn the reward!
also, one more thing, and this is just a babble, i was listening to Dragonforce while reading, and when the power ballad Trail Of Broken Hearts came on, just as RD was reminiscing about her mother and house, man, that was perfect, the mood and lyrics, though not exact to this specific situation, i think is just an awesome song to associate this chapter, at least the early to mid chapter, with that song
feel free to look it up on Youtube, i am going to quote some of the lyrics though in case you don't care enough to listen to the song itself.
Once again we walk this lonely road There are times that we are wading through the rain and cold We're lost in memories of what we left behind Relive the dreams, the endless screams of pain inside
Fly away down the lonely roads of yesterday Close your eyes to see the light of brighter days And all alone we'll be where time can never heal With the trail of broken hearts flying free
have a good day mate, and if you make edits based on my corrections, let me know via comment or something so i can edit that out of my comment
Nice chapter, and I look forward to more. Keep up the good work!
So when do we get chapter 3?
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Thanks!
Haha, even rainbow dash commented on it. That's cool.
Let's see where this goes now that everything's set up
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Hmm, this next chapter may take a little longer, then again it might not be as large so maybe not. It's a tricky chapter to write.
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Hey thanks for the comment, this story only heats up from here so stay tuned, yo.
Aww~ I love myself a little RariDash. This is cute so far. I hope Dash's situation gets better.
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Thanks for the comment!
Not gonna lie- This was like, reaaally goood. I like the way you write, and RariDash is my OTP so.. You got me waiting chapter 3 ;)
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Oh thank you, that really means a lot. You've made my day. :D
i enjoy your ship story so far, you covered a lot of bases, you setup the setting fairly well, i say the engine is warmed up and ready to go into the romance soon, but don't feel like you have to rush, sometimes a good tease is just as good as having what you want right away, make us readers earn the reward!
also, one more thing, and this is just a babble, i was listening to Dragonforce while reading, and when the power ballad Trail Of Broken Hearts came on, just as RD was reminiscing about her mother and house, man, that was perfect, the mood and lyrics, though not exact to this specific situation, i think is just an awesome song to associate this chapter, at least the early to mid chapter, with that song
feel free to look it up on Youtube, i am going to quote some of the lyrics though in case you don't care enough to listen to the song itself.
have a good day mate, and if you make edits based on my corrections, let me know via comment or something so i can edit that out of my comment