• Member Since 11th Jun, 2015
  • offline last seen Oct 22nd, 2015

RarityandSunsetFan


I love Rarity and Sunset Shimmer they are my favorite MLP characters.

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Two weeks have passed since the defeat of The Dazzlings and after saving Sonata Dusk from some bullies Sunset Shimmer offers the former Siren her friendship.

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 19 )

I'm liking this so far

Good job, my friend I look forward to what happens next.

I will have to be honest. After only a few sentences, it became apparent, your rather rushing in this story, Further, you have many incorrect punctuations used such as question marks where a period should be instead. I would highly recommend getting yourself a beta reader for your stories to assist you

6111566 Well from the looks of it,

it's his first story so I wouldn't be harsh on him. We all start somewhere.

6112232 It was not my intention to be Harsh, so I apologize if i came off sounding as such. However, not being honest about what needed worked on and or improved on or fixed, would be a disservice to any budding writer. At least that is my opinion :twilightsmile:

Keep it up man!

It has its flaws what hidden masterpeice doesn't?

Keep the chapters coming please!

Parradox

What makes this story differ from the other "Sonata Dusk becomes a good guy" fanfics out there? (not that this isn't a bad story)

I look forward to your next story, my friend.

6153703 You're going to love my next idea.

Please don't take this the wrong way, but this story feels very bare-bone. More details would've helped bring the story to life a little more.

That said, yay for Sonata! A happy Taco Siren is best Taco Siren. :twilightsmile:

6153838 I agree with you yay for Sonata!!!

6153710 Awesome, I look forward to it.

I have to agree, it seems you rushing this, take your time. I mean they became friends way to fast. Like You should have drawn out the Rainbow and Applejack not trusting her until she proved herslef

I would like permission from you, the author, to edit this story and send it back to you with a few grammer and punctuation errors fixed. Please?

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