Sonata's Reformation Chapter Two
Sunset Shimmer asked Sonata Dusk "So you told me that you've been feeling lonely since Adagio and Aria left town without you?"
Sonata told Sunset "Yes why do you ask?"
Sunset then asked Sonata "After we go back to your old house and gather your things would you like to live here with me?"
Sonata answered Sunset's question by telling her "Ok but only if you make some tacos I'm kind of hungry."
With help from Sunset Sonata was able to move all her clothes, movies and video games to Sunset's house and then they ate dinner, the two friends and roommates watched t.v. and went to bed.
Then the next day Sunset and Sonata went to school together where someone told Sonata "How dare she shows her face at this school again", another student told her "Why is Sunset hanging out with her maybe she still has some of her powers and Sunset is under her spell", another student told both Sunset and Sonata at the same time "Of course a Siren would be friends with a she demon."
These mean and hurtful words were getting to Sonata and she was crying, Sunset told Sonata "Don't let them get to you I know that you've changed now let's go talk to my friends."
Sunset and Sonata walked up to Applejack, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash and Rarity where Sunset told them "Everybody I would like to reintroduce you to Sonata Dusk, she's sorry and regretful for what she's done and yesterday I saved her from some bullies and now we're both friends and roommates."
Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie and Rarity became instant friends with the former Siren but despite the fact that they were hesitant at first Applejack and Rainbow Dash also became friends with Sonata as well.
Sonata was happy to not only have six new friends but also a new home and a new roommate as well.
Three weeks later Sunset got a new message from Princess Twilight which after she read it Sunset told Sonata "Twilight said that she's come by for a visit later today she says that she wants to meet you in person."
Good job, my friend I look forward to what happens next.
I will have to be honest. After only a few sentences, it became apparent, your rather rushing in this story, Further, you have many incorrect punctuations used such as question marks where a period should be instead. I would highly recommend getting yourself a beta reader for your stories to assist you
6111566 Well from the looks of it,
it's his first story so I wouldn't be harsh on him. We all start somewhere.
6112232 It was not my intention to be Harsh, so I apologize if i came off sounding as such. However, not being honest about what needed worked on and or improved on or fixed, would be a disservice to any budding writer. At least that is my opinion
Keep it up man!
It has its flaws what hidden masterpeice doesn't?
Keep the chapters coming please!
Parradox
6131403 I'm glad that you like it.
What makes this story differ from the other "Sonata Dusk becomes a good guy" fanfics out there? (not that this isn't a bad story)
I have to agree, it seems you rushing this, take your time. I mean they became friends way to fast. Like You should have drawn out the Rainbow and Applejack not trusting her until she proved herslef