This story seems a bit rushed. There's more telling than showing. The pacing is quite bad.

You're lucky that I took it easy on you.

You and me both want twinkies.

Why use your own name as a username for a website?

I could not think of a good name for me, sorry.

That was cute. I liked it. I hope you write more stories like this.

Thanks, if you look at my blog, I have three more shipping stories. Those will be the last three "love stories" before my big project that will do nothing with shipping. Thanks for the complement,