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This story is a sequel to Daughter of the Moon


The fourth installment following The Midnight Dance, Sweet Pea, and Daughter of the Moon. Based on the fairy-tale: Rapunzel. Sunset Shimmer has never been seen the outside world but she gets her chance one day and meets an unlikely ally. Twilight must prepare for the biggest moment of her life but she is unsure if she can. When the two cross paths, secrets and destinies will unravel.

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I'm getting the feeling that Sunset is going to be a 'Lost Sister' / a twin to Twilight Sparkle - names = time between day and night + something shiny, both (in series) use to be students of Celestia, etc...

Love the fact that you'll place Starlight as Gothel :rainbowlaugh:

(And just a guess here, since I don't know how the original Rapunzel works, but I get the feeling you know the 'Barbie' one - right?)

Ooh... liking what I'm reading so far.

Yay! Some Hunchback of Norte Dame! I'm liking what I'm reading to far!

Lol, my username, though I expect that is only a coincidence...

:pinkiegasp:

That song at the end confurms it to me - You're using Barbie as Rapunzel for the reference aren't ya?

that was one of my most favorite movies when I was a kid :raritystarry:

There were three words on it that said, 'SIS'.

I would think that would be 'SIS / TERS' and the box and the song ... proves she's a 'lost princess' HA! :rainbowlaugh:

I love it when I'm right :rainbowkiss:

Great job with this chapter. I enjoyed it. I think I may know what Cheese is so red about. I guess we will find out soon.

'SIS'

'TER'

OHMAGHERDOHMAGHERDOHMYGHERD! I have a feeling that Sunset and Twilight are sisters separated at birth!

"Just count to three and I'll pull it out."

He begrudgingly sighed and started, "One- OWW!" He screamed when he felt it being pulled out, "You said 'three'!"

"I said for you to count to three. I didn't say I'll pull it out at three."

:rainbowkiss: :rainbowlaugh:

Love it...

Oooo.... i can't wait to see how Celestia and Sombra (and technically everyone else) are going to react when they meet Sunset :twilightsmile:

Now that's got me wondering... :applejackunsure: What if, instead of celabrating Twilight's birthday, the lanterns are released to show / lure Sunset back home?

Humm... :trixieshiftright:

This great. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Good luck with the next part. Thanks for the update.

She and Twilight had both thought, The last thing you want, is to… let anybody down…

Ooh, Rainbow Rocks reference! :pinkiehappy:

I have a feeling that Twilight and Sunset are sisters and that Celestia and Sombra abandoned her! I can't wait to see their reaction!

(I put my comment in the spoiler tags because I don't know if I'm right or not)

They have a three-year-old daughter named Skyla."

three-year-old daughter named Skyla."

daughter named Skyla."

Skyla."

YAY! I GOT SOME SKYLA IN MY LIFE! *does happy dance*

Oh, and, nice chapter!

"I really want to stick around, but I have…"

Cotton took over, "A guardian that forbids you from going outside and you must return before she discovers you've gone missing or else, there would be serious consequences?"

Sunset gaped while Pinkie and Cheese looked down at their daughter in confusion.

"How… How did you…?" Sunset was still shocked.

Cotton shrugged, "Just a hunch."

Oh that is so... Pinkie's daughter :twilightsmile:

*mumbles something about the amount of ButtonBelle in recent stories*

Man. If Sombra and Celestia where here, maybe Luna, then my suspicions would be rejected or confirmed. So frustrating. Great chapter. Good luck with the next part.

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:pinkiegasp:OMG! That was my favorite movie too! I liked the part where Penelope stood up to her dad!

So many once upon a time references. Cinnamon cocoa and best chances? Classic!

Oh shnap! Very good, great indeed! Please update. :)

Nice chapter. I hope the girls come to Sunset's rescue. Great job.

Huh. Short for average, but suspence is building!

i started drawing that could serve as a cover. are you interested?

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but i think its also princess and the pauper. no? with that song?

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I think Starlight kidnapped her and that the woods were just a story

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Depends, what do you have in mind for the cover?

That part about Makeup at the end was funny. Great job.

Pinkie was bouncing on ahead while singing, "She'll be comin' around the mountain when she comes! She'll be comin' around when she comes!"
She kept on singing while her sisters were behind her and keeping their distance from her singing.
Rainbow whispered to AJ as she was holding her ears while flapping beside her, "She better hurry around that mountain 'cause I don't know how much more I can take!"

Is that a reference to Home on the Range? :pinkiegasp: If it is I love that movie!! Especially that scene with Grace singing.
Also I love the kids in this chapter, manipulating their fathers to treat them during their mothers' absence. :rainbowlaugh: So funny

Damn son, where'd Ya find this?

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Yay! You got it! :pinkiehappy: and thanks that was my favorite scene to write, LOL! :trollestia:

Dun dun dun, keep it up and we'll see what secrets those memory stones hold, and why Starlight's really determine to keep Sunset imprisoned.

"Forget it, I'm not going anyway. Freedom or not, I can't be near any pony who lies about my past and tries to cover it up so I don't know any better…"

And yet Starlight Glimmer is doing just that...

Well, that's a nice conflict Ya have there, be a shame if something were to happen to it...

Let me guess: It's Zecora, isn't it?

Nice chapter. I did like the memory stones part. I wonder what's can happen with the stones get broken. Starlight better run.

6301357 well duh!! but sunset doesn't know that!!

OMG!!! I really love this chapter! :yay::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile: I can't wait for the final chapter!!!

Aawww I can't believe it's finished :fluttershysad:
I loved it a lot though! Sunset gets her family! :yay:

You're in for it now, Starlight!!!!!!!!:pinkiecrazy:

Ohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh!!!!!!!!!!!:raritystarry:
That was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:yay::pinkiehappy:

6110928 Isn't it Princess and the Pauper reference too?

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I don't know. I know the story, but not the dialogue.

Okay, I noticed that your stories tend to favor soap opera plots like lost relatives and altered memories. The lost relatives thing, I'm fine with. The repeatedly altering memories, not so much. I know parents are supposed to protect their kids, but they also have to teach them how to properly cope with things they can't protect them from. The memory altering gets in the way of that last part. For what it's worth, despite the obvious problems, your stories have been pretty good so far.

Memory stones? :pinkiegasp: That evil mare kidnapped Sunset and made her family forget her, didn't she, DIDN'T SHE?! :twilightangry2:

This is like Rapunzel meets The Parent Trap. It's kind of nice to see a story in this series that isn't shipping-focused. It's also nice to have a story where someone doesn't almost die.

Comment posted by CartoonNerd12 deleted Dec 3rd, 2015
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