• Member Since 3rd May, 2012
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varilla111


am writing some fics for fun, thats all you need to know

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Gets into history immediately, no added chapters, plenty of dialogue so you don’t get bored, it has a happy ending after some intense scenarios, this story is about some unicorn who could defy Celestia and all Equestria and succeed. Will he succeed and rule Equestria? Up to you find out. Mane 6 came from a failed mission, a evil unicorn named Obsidian tried to steal the elements, mane 6 went after him with the elements to use their power to stop him, Obsidian somehow gets to take the elements from them and captures applejack, Celestia summons two special stallions and are ordered to save applejack and get the elements back before the evil unicorn starts using their power to become immortal just like Celestia and can rule Equestria. By the way this is not related to fallout Equestria.

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Comments ( 4 )

Great story...!

But there are a lot (and I mean a lot) of spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors here. :facehoof:

Always be sure to proof-read your stories for mistakes like this! :scootangel:

620178 seriously? i triple-check it!

Not too bad for a very first one, right?... yes I know all the things I did wrong, am been more careful for the next one

Please, if you need a proofreader, just ask.

Seriously... consider one. Not to be offensive or anything, but... well, this story-chapter needs it.

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