The morning in Ponyville shined with the radiance of a brand new day. Everything was calm and peaceful, the only ruckus being the ponies trotting about, heading off to wherever they needed to be for the day.
Everything in the quaint little town was seemingly off to a good start. Seemingly.
The entire tree shook with an irrepressible vigor. Followed by the dull thumping sound of a body hitting the ground. Shortly thereafter, the library door opened, and a cyan mare tentatively poked her head into the tree.
"Heh, sorry about that Twilight," said Rainbow Dash. "Again," she added as an afterthought.
The newly crowned Princess Twilight Sparkle turned away from her desk, now chaotic with papers flown everywhere, her eye twitching and an angry gaze directed at the pegasus.
"Again?" she asked. "AGAIN?!" She got up and started stomping angrily towards her rainbow friend. "Rainbow! This is the seventh time in four days that you've crashed into my library!"
Dash giggled nervously. "Is it?" she asked, knowing the answer, but feeling it safer to just ask the question.
Twilight nodded vigorously at the pegasus. "Yes! And you know what? I'm tired of it!" cried the Alicorn, waving her hooves about her in an effort to emphasise her point.
The cyan mare just stared at Twilight as the alicorn ranted about something about common courtesy and taking responsibility for her actions. In all of Applejack's honesty, she really wasn't paying much attention. After all, there was a very distracting ranting alicorn in front of her.
Suddenly, it appeared as if Twilight was finishing up her monologue.
The pegasus rubbed the back of her head apologetically. "Sorry, Twi," she said again. "Want me to help you clean this up?" She gestured to the now disorganized pile of papers and books situated at the Alicorn's hooves.
"No Rainbow!" said Twilight, exasperated. "I got it." The conversation seemed to be over. Dash turned, about to head back out when Twilight added one last statement.
"Why don't you go learn to fly straight? That would make good use of your time!"
Those words hurt Rainbow. She slunk backwards her back legs unknowingly traveling up the first few steps of the staircase leading up to Twilight's room. "I- I can fly," she defended weakly.
The lavender alicorn huffed in annoyance, "Obviously not that well! I mean, what Wonderbolt crashes into a giant tree multiple times a day!?" It was at this point that Twilight began to realize that she was taking it a bit too far, the obvious clues being Dash's tears now lightly flowing down her face, and the fact that Twilight was slowly backing her friend up the stairs. But something in her brain wanted to continue, to let all of her stress and anger out on the pegasus.
"Maybe that's why you're not a Wonderbolt!" she continued mercilessly. "If a pegasus can't even fly around a tree, how could she ever be suitable for the Wonderbolts?" At this point the alicorn was practically spitting in the cyan mare's face. "No wonder all those colts made fun of you... Rainbow Crash!"
That was the last straw for Rainbow. Now sobbing uncontrollably, she rocketed up the stairs, making sure not to use her wings, and locked herself in Twilight's bedroom. The alicorn herself stormed off into the kitchen.
Twilight paced around the kitchen, her brain both chastising her for making her friend cry, and fighting back with the furious attempt to solve the problem at hand. One of the main things that bothered the lavender mare was that she had never been that harsh to anypony in her memory. Not even Spike, and she ordered him around quite a bit.
However, ever since her ascension to Alicorn-ism, Twilight was experiencing high tempers and very short patience in most things. She had tacked it all up as just stress at the time, but with this new dilemma she had just created, she couldn't help but feel that it was a bigger problem than she was letting on.
Whatever this was that was going on, it was a big problem. She looked around, ready to call Spike over to send a letter. Then she remembered that Spike was with the Cutie Mark Crusaders for whatever stunt they were trying to pull this time.
She would have to wait until the little dragon got back she guessed.
Another hour passed, Twilight doing nothing but pacing in the kitchen, not getting anything done. If she wanted to be completely honest with herself, she would admit that she was a little scared to go up and confront her friend. The lavender Alicorn could not help but believe that their strong friendship was forever ruined by this event.
She knew that Rainbow was still up there; Twilight could hear a few bumps and creaks. And she also knew that she would eventually have to talk to her. Twilight really wanted to apologize. She had an aching pain that she wanted to relieve in her heart. But she was scared. Scared that Dash wouldn't be her friend. Scared that forever she had destroyed one of her only friend's dreams.
Reluctantly, the Alicorn headed out of her kitchen and slowly trotted to the stairs. The mare began to climb them slowly, trying to stall as much as possible. However, after a while, Twilight finally reached the door to her bedroom.
Sighing deeply, her magic illuminated the handle, and slowly cracked open the door. "Rainbow?" she called, hesitancy flooding her voice.
The first thing Twilight noticed were the feathers. Pale, cyan feathers coated the floor, some of the quills still coated in fresh blood. They were everywhere.
The second thing she noticed was that her dresser was open, and it looked similar to that of a town that had been wrecked by a twister. Items of clothing were strewn about randomly, whole drawers torn out.
The final thing Twilight noticed, and the most alarming was in the center of her room. All of her scarves were tied together to form a length of rope, formulated into a noose. And standing on a chair, reaching up to slide her head in, was Rainbow Dash.
"RAINBOW!" cried the alicorn. She leaped across the room, wrapping her forelegs around Dash, pulling her away from the noose, and tackling her to the floor. "Oh my gosh!" She pulled away from the mare, who was sobbing underneath her.
It was then that she saw the real carnage of her bullying. Rainbow Dash's wings, her beautiful wings, were now bony, sticks of flesh, nearly devoid of feathers. As if to mock the mare, there were only one or two bent and broken ones that remained.
"Rainbow... your wings..." Twilight gasped, tears now beginning to come to her eyes. "I did this... didn't I, Rainbow," she said, drawing her broken friend close to her. "I- I'm so sorry, Rainbow Dash!"
The two lay like that for hours. Then, finally, Rainbow weakly brought up a leg and wrapped around Twilight. "It's- it's okay, Twi... it wasn't just you." The prismatic mare sighed.
"It wasn't just you."
Wow Twilight...what a bitch. Poor Dashie Good start so far
More?
6064188 Nope. That's it. I'm giving up writing forever!
JK... have a lick!
... and a mustache
6064268 You have done the near impossible. You made a sadfic I genuinely cried over. I haven't cried since I saw Titanic.
You person... continue...
Wow, definitely good use of the Dark tag.
I like this, this chapter may show some promise.
I'll just put this in the like and watch shelf for now...
wow, fuck you twilight. i hope you get shunned for this, and that celestia let's you know just how disappointed and upset she is with you by kicking your ass back to fucking magic kindergarten.
I down voted this beause Twilight Sparkle is too mean in the story. It is hardly becoming of the Princess of Friendship.
Please note that these are my opinions only:
For one, Twilight would never ruin her friendships. Never. It's not like Twilight at all. Rainbow Dash herself is the most cocky pony in probably all of Equestria. I doubt she would commit suicide because of some bullying. Then again, I haven't read the full story yet.
So here's what I'm gonna do. I'm gonna keep an eye on this and see how it turns out. I might retract my downvote before it's all said and done.
Have a brohoof for being understanding. /)
6065736 Hmmm....
I do appreciate your feedback... and your openness to retract your original views. As for the "I doubt" thing... you don't know Rainbow's full story yet!
6065317 YOU DOWNVOTED FOR THAT?!?!?!!?
lol
No worries my good friend! Everyone deserves to show their own opinion... but having the beacon of friendship herself be a no good plothole.... you're not the slight bit most interested as to how this will turn out?
6065303 Lol...
I'll keep that in mind...
Well now, just by reading some of the comments I can tell that the infighting is gonna be as fun to read as the actual story.
As for my official opinion (becuase opinions are like assholes and everypony has one);
On Twilight: I can understand to a degree what she could be feeling (yes it is a bit out of character for her but for the sake of this story I'll bypass this issue) in the fact that she just "lost her mind" for a few seconds I can sympathize with her... this is what 7 times that has crashed into her library, I honestly would like to see someone/pony be as happy as she is forever and not have a bit of an internal anger built-up. It is unrealistic for any creature fictional or not unless they had a lobotomy or mind control or whatever to have no anger... but I digress Twilight Sparkle should not have go that far as to bring in her dreams and crush them verbally, it was uncalled for and overly excessive and makes the Boston Riotors look conservative...
On Rainbow Dash: Right when I thought it was not possible for someone/pony to make Rainbow sucidal you go and prove me wrong... I am not used to it being Rainbow but let's go with it. To have one's dreams verbally torn apart by your best friend is devastating in which 'friends' are supposed to help you achieve them and NOT make you feel like crap... well Tartaus to them too...
I honestly couldn't put too much for Rainbow Dash so that one is a bit short... I would need to see more character development on here to make a more detailed opinion...
Keep in mind that this is MY OPINION and should be taken for what it is.
More! This is really a good idea for a story, letting a view from fans into a more personal space of Rainbow Dash's life, I like it!
8/10, could use some small improvements to detail here to make it a little less rushed but it's great other than that!
6064426 Fancy seeing you here.
6065928 Wha? Somebody goes out of their way to intimately describe the character development of this story... for moi?
*Wet's pants*
SQUEEEEEEEEE!!!!
6066021 Glad you approve.
Have a mustache
6066021 Nuuu, I have been discovered!!! ABORT ABORT!
You have intruiged me, good writer. XD
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6067643 Figure of speech...
she can say that... she's been to the human world.
6070563 Fair enough. XD
I'm not gonna dislike, i'm gonna track instead. I despise the thought of Rainbow losing her wings(so please make it better), but this story is interesting. I like it, but I'm not sure about the wing part.
6094668 Rainbow lost her wings?!?!?!!?
...I just thought she clipped 'em...
Oh well! What do I know I'm just the writer
6099583 No, i'm just saying it how I see it. I hate stories where Rainbow becomes flightless, but in this story she just loses a bunch of feathers. Feathers can regrow(Right? Naturally, or with Twi's magic or something?). I love this story, I just don't wanna see Rainbow's dreams crushed. Not my story though, and I think this story in particular is fantastic so far.
GAH WE NEED MORE IT'S BEEN WEEKS
6163761 Mod sees comment on story.
MOD APPROVES.
Heeeey, Discord is based off of John D'lancy. D'lancy played Q in Star Trek. Hmmmm...
6193716 John de Lancie is awesome...
Good connection my friend
6193952 Thx. I found it while reading the description and looking at the character tags.
Also, here's my rating so far: out of
Keep up the great stories. Liked, Favorited, and Tracking.
6194627 Awesome. New chapter should be out soon! Btw, thanks for the follow
6194731 What can I say, you're an awesome writer.
6196265 Wow! Thank you!
6196545 I just realized why I'm so impatient for the next chapter. I'm slow like that sometimes. It's because what Rainbow tried to do is what I tried to do except I tried to use a knife. We were both saved by friends, her directly, me indirectly.
6218072 Wow. I am shocked to hear that. I'm extremely grateful you were stopped so that we could meet. I hope you're feeling better. Be sure to repeatedly thank that friend, for both of us!
6225655 it was really thought of how they'd feel if I killed myself. None of them actually saw me attempting it. Besides, even if they were there physically, they couldn't have stopped me. I'm much more agile than any of them, and my reflexes are pretty good considering I took Tai Kwon Do for 6 years before quiting. So, away from more depressing topics, do you have an aproximate time when the next chapter will be out? Hmmmm, I could help with the reasons for Rainbow wanting to die as well. I've got an idea it has to do with her time at Flight Camp.
6225712 Ignoring most of that comment. per yer instructions
6225873 Hope your grounding ends soon. I hate it when I can't be on my phone just to listen to music. While some people are addicted to drugs, I'm addicted to music. And ice. And pizza rolls. And ravioli.
6225894 And fanficiton.
6235188 maaaaaaayyybeeeeeee.
Oh I almost forgot to tell you. I've made 2 lists of top 10s and this is on both. Top 10 TwiDash and Top 10 Stories. Congrats!
6280741 Danke.
Mod, I think we share different views of the word soon. I just reread to recharge my brain on what happened and I read the AN and then took a look at when thus chapter was published. The time between doesn't seem like soon to me. But it's fine. You know why? Because what you lack in quantity you make up for in quality. I would honestly prefer a good story that took time vs. a bad story that was rushed. I kinda just felt like picking a little fun at you. Well, I'm going to sleep. It's 2:27 AM and I was going to pull an all-nighter but I think I'll just get some sleep so I can actually play Destiny without passing out from exaustion.
6280826 By "soon..." I mean before September.
6280960 oh, so before I turn 15 and get my learners permit. Sounds good!
6280965 *cries into hands*
I-I still d-don't have m-my learner's p-peeeeerrrrmmmmiiiitttt!!!
Ah have me driver's licence!
6280974 ah! Darn! I'm almost there! Just one year and almost 2 months since I turn 15 on the last bucking day of September.