Good to have you back, hhhhaaaaaaahhh well any person could be the way Draxton is after the Nigthmare that is to survive in Yharnan (if he is going to be paired, i suport the idea of a herd, if is only one then i prefer Fluttershy. But seems is Bloodborne se are talking about is more probably that it will not happen, no matter.) Thanks for the new chapter.

Love the story, BUT STOP USING 'THROU/THRU', THAT'S JUST LAZY!

8099077 what would you suggest I replace them with, I would like to improve my writing and any feedback helps. I was looking for replacements myself but couldn't find anything that would be relevant to the context of the sentence.

8099696 I would suggest just using the actual word, rather than 'Thru/Throu' just us 'Through'
At least you don't use 'Tho' rather than 'Though' or 'Although'

I'm fairly sure that most readers would find that using speech that would be used while texting is irritating (if you don't automatically replace the word to the correct one, like me)
Though I may be completely wrong about this and just be making myself look like an ass.

8100378 yea, that would probably help, I have a bad habit of using the most simple words that won't set off Grammarly or spellcheck. I really need to fix that when I write Lovecraftian horror to better put readers in the proper mood and emulate the stories that inspired Bloodborne and myself (The Rats in the Walls is probably my favorite story sans Call of Cthulhu with The Haunter of the Dark being up there too).

8102282 The way you use those words just irritated me seeing as most people text and while texting they use shortened words like that, but there are people like me (The one percent...) who never use text slang and rarely text... period.That whole deal leaves me wanting to stab someone near me.

I wholeheartedly agree that if you were to stop using those words, it would have a better atmosphere...

Would be frankly amazing if you could use the older form of modern english... Though I know writing with different grammar and trying to find better fitting words can be a pain in the ass... Soooo... GLHF?

This is a very entertaining story that got me to go out and actually buy a game. Is it dead, or should I still stick around?

I just ran back to comment because I think I just noticed a very clever little bit of lore/foreshadowing in this story. I can't figure out how to black out text now that the site's been updated, so I'll leave it at this:

Draxton was drinking black coffee in the morning; I take it he's both a). not a morning person and b). not the world's biggest fan of sweet things for some reason.

I'm kinda embarrassed with myself for not noticing this sooner. It took me looking at this site while drinking my pot of black coffee to put it together...

I'm really enjoying this. Will there be more?

Good story, enjoy the hunter's character, and how the characters seem to react a professional killer. Though it is odd that every one is afraid of him, when he opens his mouth.

Continue?

Fimfics just love having the princesses be antagonistic or often outright violent merely because the newcomer is strong or dangerous. They totally ignore that none of that strength or danger is directed at their subjects except in self defense. Like a parent who sues someone for touching their child when said someone pulled their kid out of the way of a car. And yes, that happens, yes, the parent wins, and yes, the hero gets officially noted as a child abuser for it.