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A Hoppa tries to entertain. I'm also from Germany and help translating for those who try to use the language in their fic's. So if you need help, ask right away!

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Displaced Story

I am Laharl and I am stuck in a museum in Canterlot…as a statue. It has been an eternity since I was turned into stone. Fully conscious to endure the mockery of these pony abominations. But I’m not imprisoned anymore. I managed to break out. You DON’T want to know how. I shudder at the memory.

But however…now behold, because the great and powerful Laharl is back! I’m going to build an army and free the one being in this world I trust the most. Afterwards I will crush the ones who imprisoned me.

Though I have to admit, that I was weakened through my imprisonment, which makes defeating the two sisters a real challenge. Or more of, I have to gather my strength first, before I can strike. They may be lucky for now, but I swear that I will get my revenge.

Hmhmhm… Haaahahahaha!!!!!


Yeah, this is a displaced story. The character has just gone crazy and thinks he is Laharl himself! :twilightsheepish:

Cover art by myself. You could call it the usual, since it consists of two pictures chopped together to one. I'm just taking the easy way here.

Crossover: Disgaea

Chapters (12)
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Comments ( 185 )

Is this following the Good ending, or the Bad ending?

Well you have my attention good sir and laharl would more or less done what you put. Random call out that the lost memory of the human and this laharl personality will duke at each other in the far future. I can see laharl threatening the crusaders, then as this logic goes force to leave by sweetie belle's admire ( he is stalked by a filly congratulations). Well at least it's not an anthro-verse laharl or you would fear nearly every mares large breast, yet we are still going to see this idiot act in another displace universe. I wonder who will act etna and flonne in the this story taking a guess the 2 sisters or (fluttershy and rainbow dash) or the original 2 cast.

Oh boy... This is going to be fun

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Now I'm ashamed of myself. Just noticed through your comment that I forgot the Anthro-Tag! My bad. :twilightsheepish: The Cheerilee joke in there can't play out, if it were any different.

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This is a displaced fic, with a human dressed up as Laharl, who ended up in Equestria with his powers. I won't tell at this point, if I have plans to use a familiar ending for this story. It would just ruin the fun. :twilightsmile:

Awesome start.

First Discord now Laharl. Someone should really keep a closer on the CMC.

So Sweetie has a crush on Larharl. I think Rarity is going to want to talk to her sister about her taste in boys.

Big fan of Disgaea and Laharl. Can't wait to see what you have planned.

When in the MLP timeline does this story start?

I'm looking forward to finding out who the one Laharl trust's is.

That bit about the Cockatrice vassal was interesting. Will we see that particular vassal appear later in the story?

Lol this is awesome. Wonder if sweetie will succeed and become his "flonne" or suffer the bad ending.

this story has an amused me please keep going

We art amused. We expect great many an entertainment from this one. Ne'er forget to break the Wall of 4th every once and a while, however. Disgaea cast do that sometimes.

this might be worth keeping an eye on.

*shimmers at the sight of a interesting new displaced! Wiggles it's appendages to track this one, for so early great humor was found.* We are intrigued, we hope it continues so.

So Sweetie mouth-raped Laharl...
You GO GIRLFRIEND!

i like it and I'm glad someone finally did a Disgaea Displaced. TO THE PMS!

I am so glad this is a thing.

It would see the Overlord requires grinding sessions to level up, how might he react to the 'levels' of other displaced we would be interested.

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Sorry for the late answer. Seems like I forgot to click on 'Post Comment' when I wrote my response! :twilightsheepish:

However. This will take place early in the seasons. Season 1 to be precise. And to the cockatrice. Yeah, definitely have plans. :twilightsmile:

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4th wall breaking? Never tried that out. I will keep that in mind and try it, if I see a opportunity to place it.

Oh how the mighty have fallen...
And he just HAD to give Sweetie belle the opportunity to have gamer powers...one she would no doubt be ecstatic to use
You see, this is a problem for us overlords.
Image is everything.
To see one once so great defeated by a squeaky cute marshmallow is too painful to watch...
But I'm an overlord! I LOVE watching my rivals suffer!
Keep up the good work!

6058236 in the words of Mr. Popo, "He's gonna die."

Oh, this will be so much fun.

6058483 true but it could be useful. If he can somehow convince her that life has always been a game and that her sister and the princesses are the bosses....

Also one thing I hope happens?
Pinkie prinny!

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You CLEARLY haven't heard about the manwah 'the Gamer' yet.
I suggest you read it

Oh god, laharl you have suffered worse than any humiliation
Well I will bet he require the item world now and a gate master(who ever can send him)
But first somehow fool a teacher and try not to get kiss-rape by sweetie belle again.
I think I found flonne replacement and scootaloo or applebloom seems to cover edna a bit.

I wonder if he will attempt to fight fluttershy's weakest animals and oh god he will lose to angel if he does not level up.
Let me pause for a second :rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy::rainbowwild::scootangel: :yay: there that's gone from my system.

Poor Laharl this chapter's name describes his situation perfectly. Hope he will be able to get back in fighting form.

Part of me can't help but be curious if you have any plans for romance in Laharls future?

How long till the princesses find out about a missing statue.

I'm looking forward to finding out more about Laharls time in Equestria, and his history with the Princesses.

6058249 No problem i'm just happy you took the time to answer my question.

So it's that early into the show. I'm looking forward to seeing how Laharl will affect or change the events of the series.

I'm also looking forward to seeing what you're plans are for the cockatrice.

6058899 I have. But this is based on Laharls game systems right?

Please don´t take this negative towards your story (because the story seems good so far), but I hate it when the protagonist of a story (mostly male) can´t stand up for himself and then gets ordered around by others (mostly females) because he can´t do anything against it. Again just my opinion don´t take it too much to heart.

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Your critic is appreciated. It is always good when someone is actually saying something, that is bugging him about the story and I will keep it in mind.

Here I have to say technically he can stand up for himself, but let's just say it's rather problematic at the moment, with being as weak as a filly. Of course things will change with the time, the stronger he gets. But for now he is stuck with Sweetie.

I just noticed something in the character tags.
Prince Blueblood....This will be FABULOUS.

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About the romance. It is possible, but I won't make any promises. Let's just see how things play out and if I then see a good spot, I will consider it.

Not sure if someone in his position would really say things like that, but i thought he would defend himself with the words " wait till i am strong again, then you geet your punishment", or something like that. I just thought he would say something, that would make them know that he could be able to get much stronger again.

I am not sure if i like the crazy Sweetibelle, i have nothing against her playing games, but i don´t think i need her to get crazy everytime from now on.

The other thing is, i hope there aren´t to many Crossovers, i mean not every second chapter already, or something like that in the future.

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i as well doesn´t mean it in a bad way but i agree with you there, it is not because i want the hero to be the strongest, but it is sometimes weird how often the main Char can´t do anything, sometimes even if he is as strong as his opponent.

I maybe described another situation, but i honetly agree with you there, that is probably the reason, why i hate it if the Unicorns force someone with their Magic. I mean there was once a situation, Twilight gave a shit about what the Human wanted, and transformed him into a puppy.

After that he got angry, he had all the right to be angry, but his friend was angry at him, because the main Char was angry at Twilight....:moustache:
So the main Char leaved the group, and after Twilight had cried a bit, she searched for him, forced him with her magic to stay still, and i think she hold him that way, till he accepted her apology. After the whole thing was over, everyone agreed that the main Char was the asshole, not Twilight or anyone else, who did really something bad. ( I hate if something like that happens without a reason, i think even in Equestria, the Unicorns aren´t allowed to force their Magic onto the other ponys.)

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I am glad to hear that, i agreed with him, even if this was just the first situation like this in the story, as long as he can get stronger it is okay.


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It would not have to be the focus of the story, but a little romance would be nice i think, and since displaced storys are supposed to be rather long, i think it would be nice.
In most of the storys i think it just makes them feel more normal, or more serious if they are able to find themselfe a special somepony if they should want to have one, i don´t know how to explain this, they don´t need to have one everytime, but i like if it is possible.

However i think i could enjoy one in this story, maybe once he get´s stronger than Sweetiebelle, he can start to like her at least a little bit more than befor. I honestly hope that Sweetiebelle get´s him, just to prevent Sweetiebelle X Button Mash.
I like both Ponys, but i somehow don´t like that pairing, i think i like the unusual pairings a bit more.

Honestly in every Crossover/romance story, i hope that there is a Crossover romance, and not a norma relationship, since they have the opportunity to do something like that.

Okay i said much more than i wanted to say, only half the stuff is really meant for you.

Now my own comment :
I have to say after i liked the show so much, i am happy to have a fanfiction about him, and that he isn´t more or less dead.
I wasn´t able to play the game that much yet, but i guess it is the same as the anime.

Okay i am to tired to say much intelligent stuff right now, be sure i like that story, it is honestly one of the better storys i had the last two weeks,......yeah i read a lot. Make every chapter at least that long, and i should be happy.

edit: i like that moment where Sweetie kissed him, and he broke free out of shock, but still i hope they realize soon, that he doesn´t stays that week, not that they make fun of him all the time.
.... i want it to be a comedy, but i meant......well i guess that they take him serious sometimes, and....i try to say more tomorrow, my brain works better if i am not that tired.

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Not sure if someone in his position would really say things like that, but i thought he would defend himself with the words " wait till i am strong again, then you geet your punishment", or something like that. I just thought he would say something, that would make them know that he could be able to get much stronger again.

I won't lie to you. I was unsure about that part myself, but then I remembered, that he is a displaced. He is technically not Laharl, even if he behaves like him at many occassions. But I will still try to keep him in line with the character he is dressed up, most of the time.

Just had an idea! What do you think of these lines?

“What do you want!? I'm a mighty Overlord and could grant you any wish! I could grant you power and money or whatever else your heart longs for!”

Better? :pinkiesmile:

I am not sure if i like the crazy Sweetibelle, i have nothing against her playing games, but i don´t think i need her to get crazy everytime from now on.

Not everytime, but it will happen from time to time, due to the whole lovesick schtick.

The other thing is, i hope there aren´t to many Crossovers, i mean not every second chapter already, or something like that in the future.

Not too many crossovers? I understand that point. I don't want to overload that story with them either, so I will keep it at an adequate level.

So the main Char leaved the group, and after Twilight had cried a bit, she searched for him, forced him with her magic to stay still, and i think she hold him that way, till he accepted her apology. After the whole thing was over, everyone agreed that the main Char was the asshole, not Twilight or anyone else, who did really something bad. ( I hate if something like that happens without a reason, i think even in Equestria, the Unicorns aren´t allowed to force their Magic onto the other ponys.)

Rest assured. I agree with you here.

It would not have to be the focus of the story, but a little romance would be nice i think, and since displaced storys are supposed to be rather long, i think it would be nice.

Like I mentioned before, I have no experience with it, but I think I will give it a try. Technically, this story will give me some occassions to use it.

Also thanks for your opinion and critique. This is the longest comment I have gotten so far! :pinkiesmile:

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“What do you want!? I'm a mighty Overlord and could grant you any wish! I could grant you power and money or whatever else your heart longs for!”

Better? :pinkiesmile:

If he want´s to get out of a certain situation maybe, it seems like something he would try to lie to Applejack.

Not too many crossovers? I understand that point. I don't want to overload that story with them either, so I will keep it at an adequate level.

Thank you, and for the correction too.

So you understood what i meant with the crazy Twilight, and stuff like that, so i think with everything you said, this could be one of the fanfictions i look foward to read it the most. (I hope i got that sentence right)

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I wasn´t able to play the game that much yet, but i guess it is the same as the anime.

I completely forgot to mention this point! PLAY THE GAME! Really, it is worth it and was better than the anime by the way. You will probably love the romance in this too. It is really great story-telling and you shouldn't miss it.

So you understood what i meant with the crazy Twilight, and stuff like that, so i think with everything you said, this could be one of the fanfictions i look foward to read it the most. (I hope i got that sentence right)

Without the it. But you shouldn't worry too much about it. The more time you spend on reading or writing stories here, the better you get. I'm sure my English improved a great deal, while being here. I practically aced my English exams! :pinkiesmile:

"Not my fault! Not my fault!", Pinkie Pie could hear a voice as she neared Caroussel Boutique, on her way to the breaker of a pinkie-promise.

As she finally reached her, she tackled the breaker down, ignoring the bald pony standing in the doorway.

"You broke a pinkie-promise! The one not to look into SB's room for now!"

"But he...", Rarity began, only to get interrupted...

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Meanwhile:

"No...", Laharl said quietly as to not draw attention, "I have to wait until they get out of the clothes washer? Not fair!"

I really ask myself if Rarity maybe thinks her sister has done more with her new boyfriend than Rarity would like to happen.

Great chapter. Feel sorry for Wrecking Ball. Because something tell's me replacing Laharls statue with a fake will come back to haunt him. Though to be fair it's more Celestia's fault than his. You think she would have imprisoned enemies watched or guarded better.

Ha! It continues!

She wanted to avoid the parent’s complaints, then their children would not arrive with the arranged train. Parents were rather protective of their foals and so even a small delay would rile them up.

Now, as you might guess, it is not easy to work in a museum, then your cutie mark is telling you to wreck this place.

Alone the moment, then the information about the gameplay system flooded my mind and then I had the full control over the situation, going over different tactics to win this.

You did the same mistake in all of this sentences. It shouldn't be "then", but "when". Also I'm not sure about this, but I think you slipped into a different time sometimes.

By the way. I liked the chapter showing his desperation.

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My bad. Seems like the thens slipped through, as I proofread it. :twilightsheepish:

If you mean, that Laharl has the first POV and the rest only a third POV, then it is wanted. But could still be, that I messed it up. Sometimes things just slip through.

Thanks for pointing it out. I already corrected the then-problem. :twilightsmile:

Let me give this a minute :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::trollestia::moustache:
This is the type of situation Laharl would get into. A nice job on this chapter.
Unicorn kiss is marriage guarantee apparently.

Marshmallow let out a sad sigh. “He is right.” I sighed in relief. She then had a sly look on her face. “Not yet.”

It is weird, and fun at the same time to have such a Sweetiebelle.

And then the marshmallow replied in a cheery tone instead of me. “His name is Prince Charming!”

there is it, Prince Charming, or his other name Shining armor, i really hate a personality like that, well i don´t hate it, but i don´t like his personality.

It would be funny if his weird Magic would be able to make Sweetiebelle, and himself as strong as the Princesses, i mean the experience points, and the level, could affect her Magic/Body maybe, i don´t know, but still i hope not that she is going to be the strongest all the time, i somehow would like them to be equal after a short amount of time.


I have nothing against the wedding joke, or tradition they made here, but as funny as the story is supposed to be, i hope there is at least one chapter, when he is stronger, or after some time, in which he can make them belive that he doesn´t wanted everything of that, maybe it would be his first attemp to to something bad again, he can still accept her later again, or in the same chapter, i just wanted to be sure, that he isn´t going to do just everything they say to him, and at least make them know, Sweetiebelle made up everything.

Like i said, i have nothing against this, i just wanted to be sure, and already ask for something like that.
I hope you understand how i mean it, one serious chapter, to make them see how the things really are, if he is a bit stronger, and then he could start to want her love too.

You don't. It is tradition for writer to laugh about what they do to their characters, and make everything worse for them. Just to make themselves happy. And YOU CAN'T GET OUT OF THIS TRADITION!

So a unicorn has to marry the first person they kiss. Is it just me or are their so many ways that little rule can go very wrong.

Laharl has to marry Sweetie Bell. I'm looking forward to seeing Rarity's reaction when she finds out who her sister's fiance really is.

Will we see Laharl start raising his level, and getting back to fighting shape soon?

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It would be funny if his weird Magic would be able to make Sweetiebelle, and himself as strong as the Princesses, i mean the experience points, and the level, could affect her Magic/Body maybe, i don´t know, but still i hope not that she is going to be the strongest all the time, i somehow would like them to be equal after a short amount of time.

I have nothing against the wedding joke, or tradition they made here, but as funny as the story is supposed to be, i hope there is at least one chapter, when he is stronger, or after some time, in which he can make them belive that he doesn´t wanted everything of that, maybe it would be his first attemp to to something bad again, he can still accept her later again, or in the same chapter, i just wanted to be sure, that he isn´t going to do just everything they say to him, and at least make them know, Sweetiebelle made up everything.

Laharl tries to get out of this situation and therefore will seek a way to get stronger. Of course all this involves to find his trustworthy companion and get revenge on the princesses. So, he will not always be tame and you can expect something along the lines of your comment to happen. :twilightsmile:

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