Investigating A Strange Filly
Small changes are small. I only needed to correct the content of one sentence. Oh, and I found some typos, while I was at it. So not really rereadworthy changes here.
I'm currently working on the next chapter. I try to get it out this month, but no promises! 
Things went downhill pretty fast. I mean, here I was hunched down by the banister and spying on the mad marshmallow!
“Just what secrets do you hold?” I murmured out, as I watched her from my investigation spot.
She was currently chatting away with the chicken and the bowgirl in the foyer, an apologetic expression on her face.
“Yeah. I hope you feel sorry, for deceiving me like that. Acting like you were a pony abomination, even though you are not,” I took a contemplative pose. “Just what are you?”
A few hours ago
“I’m your bride,” said the marshmallow as she smirked at me.
I was simply dumbfounded and moved my cursor over her again, in hope that my eyes were just playing tricks on me, but they didn’t.
Level 32
“This doesn’t make any sense!” I screamed frustrated, holding my head tightly in both my hands. “This is as worse as the time the royal butts cheated with those gems!”
Well, maybe not as worse, but it came pretty close.
“It’s your turn,” she said amused. “Draw.”
I ignored her words and contemplated my situation. I couldn’t win this and I knew it. This could only end with my loss. There was only one thing I could do.
“…I surrender. You win.”
Her face lit up at that, as the eerie words ‘Game Over’ loomed over the stage.
Game Over indeed.
I couldn’t win, so I at least planned on keeping my health points. And I could still sneak out afterwards to level up and kick her ass later, once I have dealt with the royal butts and freed my companion. So not a real loss then. Especially since I can’t lose my ‘Overlord’ title to ponies, only to demons.
Everything returned to normal and a small smile formed on my face, as I planned my revenge. Taking down some low-level animals would be a good start.
I glanced over at the marshmallow as she smiled at me.
Let her smile, I thought, The tables will turn in time.
Suddenly a familiar tune reached my ears.
A text box opened and what stood there drained the blood from my face as I paled.
‘Sweetie’s title has changed to [Overlord]!!’
I stood there dumbfounded, staring at her in horror.
“Oh! That is quite delightful!” she squeaked.
“You are not a pony,” I blabbered out, with confusion and a hint of fear in my eyes.
“What are you talking about?” She giggled, acting like she didn’t know what I meant.
“Ponies can’t wear demon titles!” I shouted frustrated.
“Oh? Then I’m probably the first. Maybe it is because we are bonded to each other by the power of true love!” she fancied.
Just those words made me feel sick to my stomach and I gritted my teeth in disgust and frustration.
She can’t be serious! What is she planning?
I excused myself shortly after, saying that I wanted to take a break upstairs. She wasn’t that inclined to the idea, but after the doorbell rang, she had another situation to attend to. I was keeping a low profile, because of the unknown visitor, but soon the doorbell rang again and announced its departure. Until then things were rather silent. Well, until five minutes ago. That was then her friends stormed in.
I proceeded to think about my situation. I knew, that I needed to investigate this strange filly and find out what game she is playing.
And I sure as hell won’t leave this place without my title.
But to beat her, I had to understand her and her powers.
“Are you a spawn between one of my old demon generals and a pony?” I mumbled out reminiscing one particular demon. A master thief and master of deception. A Succubus at heart. I was always wary of her, since I expected her to backstab me every minute of my life.
“But why did you not earn my title on the first encounter then?”
I then saw her open a menu as she showed off her title to her friends. No pony could do that.
Her friends stared in awe, excitement clearly written on their faces. Especially the chicken.
“How are you doing that!?”
“That’s the question, where I seek the answer myself, chicken.”
Seriously, how does she do that!
“I can do that since our fight. It is like I have all the knowledge of his magic absorbed.”
I cocked an eyebrow at that.
Did my magic influence her? Did I myself create this problem?
I shook my head. Ridiculous. My magic never influenced another pony before without my consent, so why should it change now?
“She is taking me for a fool. Where is no way in hell she is telling the truth,” I narrowed my eyes, “I’m not falling for your tricks marshmallow.”
“What are you doing there, Charming?”
I jumped at this and turned around. Rarity was standing directly in front of me now, an unamused look on her face.
“Nothing!”
“Oh, is that so?” she said a sly smile on her face. She then proceeded to grab my arm and dragged me along. “Why don’t you just join these three then? I’m sure Sweetie would appreciate it.”
She ignored my protest, as she dragged me to the group of three. Probably a petty try to avenge my earlier payback.
Sweetie was the first of the three to speak up.
“Sis, are you feeling better now?”
“I do. I was taking a refreshing bubblebath after I took care of the…filth. I’m feeling quite refreshed now! I think I needed that.”
She then dragged me directly to her side. I tried to hide behind her, not wanting to confront the marshmallow so fast.
“But let’s get to another topic, dear. I think Charming here needs some company. And since he hasn’t gotten his cutie mark yet, he could participate in your activities.”
Sweetie’s eyes sparkled, while I tried to avoid any eye contact.
“This is a wonderful idea!” she squeaked out.
Maybe I should call her rubber duck? Would also be a fitting name. But that shouldn’t be my concern now. I had other problems.
“Ah don’t think that’s such a good idea.”
“Yeah. I wouldn’t want to have anything to do with this thing.”
I shot her a glare. “Me neither with you, chicken.”
“What did you call me?”
Her glare intensified, as she butted her head with me. The pure hatred in both of our eyes.
And then the doorbell rang.
Both of us glared at the one who dared to interrupt us.
A pale yellow pegasus shrunk back under our stares and while the chicken abandoned her glare relatively fast after spotting her, I held onto it. Can’t just let her interrupt me after all.
I then felt fingers closing around my ear and dragging on it and Rarity shot me a disapproving look.
“You have to excuse him, dear. I haven’t gotten any time to teach him some proper manners yet.”
The pegasus immediately stood up from her slightly crouching position, with a small smile on her face.
“Oh, it’s alright. He had a bad day and I understand that he lost control there for a moment.”
“I’m glad you take it with stride. I’m telling you, it is not easy to care for him and it has only been a day! He is so…uncouth.”
“I’m standing right here, you know?”
“You shouldn’t worry too much about it,” answered the pegasus, as I was downright ignored by the two grown mares. What do they take me for!? A child!?
...
Yeah, my height probably doesn’t help matters.
She then took a basket in her hand, which was standing on the ground and walked over to Rarity. She then took off the blanket of it, to reveal grumpy cat in it. After taking this thing out, they continued their conversation.
“Opalescence! I completely forgot about her! How did you get her?”
“Sweetie Belle let me in. She said, that you were, um…occupied.”
“Yes, that is quite alright. I had an accident in the bath and needed to clean up.”
Her gaze locked then on the cat. “Oh, she looks great. I just don’t understand how you are able to do it.” She then leaned down to the cat. “I can’t get near her, without getting a swipe from her claws.” And of course, as if demonstrating the truth of that statement, the cat swiped at her with her claws, only missing her by inches.
Man, that is a mean kitten.
In the meantime, Rarity got a worried expression.
“Did you use the stare on her?”
The pegasus was slightly appalled by this.
“Oh no. I wouldn’t. I couldn’t. I don’t really have control over it when it happens. It just happens. No, I’m just good with animals. It’s my special gift you know.”
It seems like this gave the marshmallow some form of enlightment.
“Hey! Maybe we can get our cutie marks for being animal caretakers!”
Chicken and bowgirl seemed to like the idea, as they all together shouted:
“CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS ANIMAL CARETAKERS!!! YAY!!!!”
I only rubbed my ears at this, in an attempt to mend them after this verbal attack. And here I thought only Rarity possessed such a high volume.
Then the marshmallow nudged me.
“This was your cue too.”
I only raised an eyebrow.
“You need to shout too, since you are a cutie mark crusader now.”
Before I could voice my confusion to this whole cutie mark shebang, the chicken immediately began to protest.
“Hold on a second, since when did any of us agree to this?”
“He is my fiancé and won’t leave my side, so that it is obvious, that he has to join!”
“That is just ridiculous. Can he even get a cutie mark?”
I just rolled my eyes at their discussion, not wanting to be any part of it. There are situations a man comes into, where he knows from the beginning that he doesn’t want to be a part of it, even if he doesn’t understand them, just so you understand my reaction. Instead I took my time to see what the other two mares were up to.
They seemed to have recovered from the shouting and were now having a conversation of her own.
And suddenly Rarity’s face formed into a frown, before she paced through the room. She blabbered something about an order, while levitating some of the material through the room.
“-not even giving him a chance!”
Meanwhile the argument between those fillies seemed to get more intense.
“Him! A chance! You can’t be serious! He is ahmmmm-“
And suddenly Sweetie’s hand found her way in Scootalo’s mouth, cutting her off, before she could end that sentence.
Sweetie whispered sharply. “Do you want to ruin this for me!? What do you think Rarity would do, if she knew he wasn’t a pony!?”
Chicken sighed. “Yeah, you are right. But I still am against him joining us.”
“Give him at least a chance. He is still adjusting after being…passive for so long. How about we let him participate in our sleepover! So you two can get to know each other better.”
I let out a snort at that, which was thankfully unheard by the fillies.
Right, like she herself already knew me. She doesn’t even know my name!
Rarity suddenly took steps toward us. Her ears perked up at the mention of the sleepover.
“Oh, I already forgot your sleepover!” She sighed. “I’m going to be honest girls, I have an important order, which I couldn’t work on due to the care, young Charming needed here. And now I’m going to work all night, which means, I’m afraid that I have to cancel your sleepover.”
“WHAT!?” squeaked the marshmallow aghast.
“I just don’t have any time to watch you, if I want to get those robes done in time.”
“But-“
“No buts this time. I’m sorry Sweetie Belle. It’s just the way it has to be.”
The three of them groaned in disappointment, while I cheered on the inside. Personally I preferred not to spend more time than necessary with the annoying chicken.
“I, uh, I suppose I could take them for the night.”
My inner cheers were silenced by this and I started to glare daggers at the pegasus again.
She shrunk back and I smirked, but felt a magic aura soon appear on my ears and drag me to the side. Rarity shot me one of her disapproving looks again and I just turned away from her in silent protest.
“Please go on, darling.”
“I said, that I could take care of them for the night.”
The fillies eyes started to show a ray of hope, as they started to smile. The whole conversation on, they were turning their heads from right to left, always in the direction of the current speaker in a comical way.
“I couldn’t ask you to do that.”
“Oh, it’s no problem at all.” An aura full of confidence surrounded her and I wondered, how this wimp could even pull it off. She did seem like the type of pony who would only hide underneath her bed and clearly not the one to show confidence.
“Have you met my sister and her friends? A problem is all it would be.”
“Did I have a problem with Opal? You have seen how well I handle small creatures!”
“I suppose that’s true and I do have a lot of work to do.”
“Come on, it will be fine.”
“I assure you they are quite a handful.”
“These sweet little angels?”
They started to look as innocent as possible, as if to convince them of their harmlessness, but I knew better. They were devils and you had to be a real nitwit, not to see it.
“Alright.”
And apparently these both were such nitwits.
“CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS SLEEPOVER AT FLUTTERSHY’S COTTAGE!!! YAY!!!!”
I only rubbed my ears at this.
“Seriously?” I asked, but this question was unheard, as they quickly packed for the upcoming sleepover.
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Author, there is something I have to tell you:
It is harder to write something longer than you would usually than to write it shorter.
I like how you are taking your time, and it is not like you write twenty chapters without progress.
There is small progress being made each chapter, it does not feel rushed.
sigh... took the guy is weak plot and cranked it to 52
I really like this story but I have a question.
I don´t know if someone already asked it or if the answer is just plain obvious, but why isn´t he telling Rarity that Sweety kissed him and not the other way around? The bond would be erased if he was not the one giving the kiss or? Wouldnt that free him from her?
Think the humanoid body shape alone would point that out. Also what the heck got sweetie to level 52 so fast. that's like causing a massacre of wildlife. If it was beating Laharl, you had his levels drained and that's a two way street as far as the game is concerned. Even Etna was level 1 at one point. Did the CmC cause a genocide at one point?
Whats next? Rarity level 200+ due to element of harmony takedowns of major bads? This guy hasn't had anything but foul luck since introduction, its starting to get old...
Which is a shame as I enjoy Laharls antics in shows and games...
I like the fic, just not OP Creepy-belle who from what we've been told so far has skipped by doing naught but repeatedly getting laharl almost killed.
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I honestly wouldn't be surprised if Rarity WAS in the 200s. What with NMM, Chrysalis, Changlings, NIghtmares and so on. That's a hefty list.
Hell I'm pretty sure that Spike is probably lv80ish, due to beating Sombra/part of a team with Candance beating Sombra. Party kills FTW.
Question is, what level are the rest of the mane 6? Fluttershy wouldn't be surprising to be one of the higher leveled ones, due to subduing a large amount of fierce animals. Twilight, because obvious, Rainbow/AppleJack are pretty athletic. I think Pinkie with would the one with the lowest level, but the most amount of techniques mastered.
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Thanks. That's good to know.
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I don't understand your comment. Could you elaborate?
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We will get to that point later in the story.
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The higher level is a mystery that gets solved much later in the story. It has its purpose and is a one-of-a-time type of thing.
I'm working on the 'not too much bad luck' thing. And no harm came to him in this last chapter, so that's a progress.
I'm trying to wrap my head around the fact that someone got 49 level ups in just a few days. Damn Sweetie is an intense gamer! Still a good story though, least in my opinion.
6224370 sorry was half awake when wrote it hope it is better now
6224376 that is something i ask myself.
i wait since you promised something good soon.
I still hope, that if he is going to accept her love, that it happens in a long moment, where Sweetiebell understand that he doesn´t really loves her, and after some heartache, he can love her if he wants, i hope he doesn´t let himself force to accept the feelings.
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I can only agree with her/him , the level was to much, since it doesn´t seems as if she would have had the time to get the levels, and i don´t think that a good reason would make this much better, it was just to high for the start of this story.
I really hope for him being able to prove himself, i don´t really like him being a pushover, or how you can call him at the moment.
Honestly i don´t like it if the main char get´s to much bad happening to him, and only one good thing that happens to him, would not change much, if you are going to add ten bad things afterwards.
I think him being pathetic is a bit overdone till now, it is like the sow pacing is only to understand how weak, and pathetic he is.
I really hopes Rarity doesn´t sleeps with everyone that is a bit nice, or arrives in the right moment.
It could be that is is just us, but i think you maybe should think it over again, and think about how you could change it a bit. I really don´t want to force you to change anything, but it was funny at the start, but it starts to get really annoying lately.
Maybe it is because not two, but more or less everyone seems to be naughty/creepy or whatever, or because of all the odds, like a sudden level up from 49 Levels?!, or that it isn´t important for her that he doesn´t likes her.
Normally it would not matter, but right now i don´t understand, how she isn´t able to understand that one point.
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I think I will rewrite chapter 7. It seems like everything started to go down from there. But since I'm in the middle of some tests, this will take some time. Probably have something new in late August.
A level increase of Sweetie Belle will remain for story reasons, but I will think about 'reducing' it, so that it doesn't seem too over the top.
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reducing would be probably good enough for that one problem, but i guess even if it sees still to much, you should probably doesn´t go higher then 30-32?
I just don´t see when she had the time, and as long as you have a good reason for her levei increase, it should be okay.
Sorry again, but i tried to say it exactly like you wanted me to say it, i guess it only helps the story, or at least it helps you to please those who are reading it at the moment.
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And I appreciate it. It is the best to criticise without brightening the situation. I now have a clear picture and have already two scenes of chapter seven in mind, which I will erase.
It is good, because I can improve my writing and the chapters and with that the story, to make it more entertaining for everyone.
Stupid Fucking Brat IT WAS FORCED LOVE!
>>>Hoppa 12 I mean that she was blind in seeing that he did not love her and the imagination was that daydreaming on the second or first chapter (I'm to lazy to look it up )
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Ok. I hope that you will still enjoy the story in the future.
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It is an item. I think I mentioned it in the second chapter. Best is, if I take a look at it again, just to be sure. (Yes, it is mentioned in an earlier chapter.)
You can feel conflicted about it. I still have to make some changes to this chapter. I try to bring up the revised version this month. But more like end of this month.
You are missing a "t" there.
Also could you please decide if you write the pony races small or big and not change it throughout the chapter. Thanks.
I am now even more conflicted more than ever before. I hate what your doing with him, but I still kinda like the story as a whole. So I guess keep going.
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Things will start to look up for him in the future. So don't worry about that.
What do you mean with small or big? Do you mean my slight change to write Laharl smaller than some fillies?
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No I mean that sometimes you write "Pegasus" big and others you write "pegasus" small. It irritates me and I wanted to bring it to your attention that´s all.
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It irritates me as well! That's Microsoft Office for you. It thinks it should autocorrect pegasus like that! It is really frustrating to always correct that! Of course sometimes it can slip my attention.
Curse you Word!
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Yeah I know what you mean.
Huh..... Never expected Sweetie to boost up the lvls that fast. She must have been farming or something..... Eh, I don't have a copy of Disgea, so I have no clue as to how she did it. It was nice none the less.
I'm pretty sure she made this face when she won.
images.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw1595-43709_-_Sweetie_Belle_death_derp_macro_nightmare_f.jpg
Awwww...... I caught up....... oh well,
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Yeah, I really like that show!
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The new chapter might not be ready this month. I planned it, but then I got a surge of inspiration and started working more on 'The New Sombra', so that a chapter release of it will probably be faster than the one for this.
i welcome sweetie belle as my new overlord que the music
I was going to just run away but now I think I would just kill them all if I were him