When the Crystal Empire returned, one sleeping sentry caused the message to be late by two days, thus Shining and Cadence didn’t beat Sombra to it. The King intended to continue his old ways, enslaving the population and enforcing a new age of darkness for the crystal ponies once again.
That is, until an inter-dimensional traveler ruins his plans
Enter Yorick, a gamer, a geek, a festival go’er, a LARPer, a medieval historian and re-enactor… and pretty darned lost, all things considered. But now confronted with an Empire in need, he’s the man to do the deed, or something like that…
All that one can be certain of is that the Crystal Empire, Equestria, and the world as a whole will never be the same...
inspired by: Nigel M Chalmers, Emperor
and other various Human in Equestria storys
Tags subject to change
Cover art is temporary until I get something better
Very well written, to the point that I was sad when the chapter ended. Keep up the great work, dont usually see stories this good.
6077523 thank you, I actually had planned on this chapter being a lot longer but realized that it would be a bit too long if I went through with it as planned
And thank you for being the first to review my fic
You are very welcome. It is a treat to find a good story. they seem to have started to dry up over the past year.
This story was added 52 minutes ago... Awesome
Rather nice start, makes me want to read more. Though, you are missing quite a few punctuations.
6077905 well, let's just cross our fingers crossed that I don't drift into the 'crappy' quality zone
6077978 thank you, hope you continue reading went I get more chapters out.
6080228 yeah I know
, run-ons and comma splices have always been a problem for me, hence the reason I'm looking for an editor/proofreader.
6080719 glad to know you find it interesting, hope you stick around!
Good start. Will track.
First, you need to proofread a bit more, or find a proofreader. There were enough missing words that I noticed the problem, and it's an easy fix.
Second, tone down the drama a bit, maybe be a bit more sarcastic. Poking fun at cliches is one of the better ways to avoid them.
Third, the lines after the last paragraph break aren't needed to tell the story. We already know or can guess everything you told us in them, and it makes the story feel overly dramatic.
And finally, this is a self-insert OC fic. Do not take this story seriously. Have fun with it.
Yorick? Yorrick!? YARRICK!?
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MAY HE BE AS AWESOME!
Damn it flash
Can I killz him
6081028 Whereas the main inspiration of this fic, Nigel M Chalmers, Emperor, was a humor fest, I can tell this'll be a serious and enjoyable story. I wanted to do a story like this but mine alway come out as too concise and narrow, but the plot of mine always felt right, you know? Anyway, I wanted to do a Your Human and You fic, with permission from MadMaxtheBlack, of a everyday person showing up in the tundra, getting captured by ponies, watches the Crystal Empire reappear, escapes when they mention telling the princesses about it, she takes it over by sheer luck and tries to keep in power in a world where humans are animals and ponies want all ponies to be ruled by ponies, even if the Crystal Empire ponies like their human ruler.
Do you think I should write it?
i like it, continue.
6269937 why?
7669196 I needz a reason?
7671135 yes.
7671979 k.
he iz guard. Guard abandons post
guard dies!!
Hahahaha
7671979 also he waifu stealer.
7673829 . . . . . . So Twilight is your waifu?
7674125 she is adorkable.
she iz my waifu
7674125 I killz flash now
look, *sighs* I may sound like a prick, but all day today going through story groups, I've seen stories I'm interested in, but NO chapters except one or two, MAYBE three, since 2012, 2015, you get the idea, either update the story, or cancel the damned thing dude
Hey, has this story been abandoned or what? Cause it’s been a while since the last update
We need a Necromancer to revive this story please.