Professor Astra Aquaduct is well respected in his field, even if he is the first Pegasus to be a scientist, and the youngest to become one as well. For 4 months, the professor has had his eye on a work partner, and decides to ask the mare out. When he discovers she is already proposed to somepony else, he contemplates under a large tree in the park under the stars...
And meets another mare in the process
(One shot story on an OC of mine)
Cover art provided by: http://stefmenda.deviantart.com/
Chapters (2)
A great improvement from your last story, that's for sure! But, you may want to create a new paragraph when two different characters speak or perform an action. Like here:
It should be:
"Well, do you think you could stay here a little longer?" Astra said, making the mare's ear perk up at his request.
"You mean you're not angry?"
He shook his head "I don't see any reason to be angry with you. You didn't TRY startling me and, even if you did, I'm not the type of stallion to hold a grudge"
Other than that, it was a great story overall.
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Thanks for the input Crimson!
Yeah, I definitely tried to make this story better than my last one simply due to the fact that even I HATED IT.