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"Be good to yourself, because nobody else has the power to make you happy."

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After the events of The Lost Treasure Of Griffinstone, a certain storeowner is confronted by Pinkie Pie.

See what happened.

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Comments ( 10 )

There's no minimum sentence count for a paragraph outside of scholastic and research papers, so try changing paragraphs when the speaker changes. In spite of this I did still enjoy the read. It was easy to see where things were going half-way through, but that just left me reading the rest with a contented smile on my face.

Spoilery comment below.

I like the idea that Pinkie is more selective with her kills than a random number drawing; it would make similar stories more personal, like this one was.

Oh i see. Sounds...Yummy?

Very cute little story, something I may very well read again, so, it gets a fav and a follow.

This is a good example of how different speakers need different paragraphs: I can't follow this...

Due to earlier comments, I've slightly edited the format of the story. Better?

P.S Thanks for all the likes so far... They'll only encourage me to write more!! (I'll let you decide if that's a good or a bad thing).

Ri2

Normally I'd be opposed to this.
Except that bitch left Rainbow to die. Fuck her.

Is it implied that the special ingredient she added to the scones was what she used to knock people out so she could strap them in? o-o Also, I don't think dismembering her is exactly warranted... Rainbow didn't end up dying after all. I'd probably just make shekel jokes at her expense until she went mad :P

Pretty good but I'm not sure how a griffin would actually taste

my thoughts at that last line: "Why do suddenly I have a terrible foreboding about this?"

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Because you have a brain.

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