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SoulDragonWithFlow


Creativity through pain, to relight the flame. Also sex Lotsa sex.

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An unlikely pair of ponies meet sometime after a mysterious plague wipes out most of Pony-Kind. Thalia, a shy and somewhat sheltered Unicorn meets another of her kind, who at first is not keen on the idea of her tagging along with him, but they soon grow a bond and begin to uncover the truth about what caused the sudden collapse of pony society.

So myself and my buddy Tairaisvuroium started a new RP based on a post apocalyptic version of the MLP world. This is our first post. The result of a full solid night of work. :work: A lot of unexplained themes in this I know, but I've always thought that exactly what a first chapter should do, as I stated in my S5 Season Opener Analysis.

Lemmie know what you think.

Midnight Shadow ©: SoulDragonWithFlow
Thalia ©: Tairaisvuroium
Survivors ©: souldragonwithflow & Tairaisvuroium

MLP:FIM ©: Hasbro

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Comments ( 5 )

Well, I like it! :twilightsmile:


Story is good, just work on the format of scene changes so it will be easier to follow.


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This is based on my observations as a reader
I recognise a scene change with little confusion when the author leaves double the normal space or even a written breaker such as
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Now this sentence seems more detached from the one above it, signifying a change in scene or perspective .

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I'll keep that in mind then. Thanks for the feedback

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