“Long, long ago in the magical land of Equestria, the three pony tribes lived in harmony with one another. Escaping the destruction of their homeland the three races of ponies, the pegisi, the unicorns and the earth ponies, lived in tumultuous but lasting harmony. All of this changed with the coming of Discord. It is not known where this monster arose or how he possessed such frightful powers that allowed him to bend the order of the world itself to suit his will. What is known is that he possessed a resentment and hatred for pony kind that eclipsed any other. For a hundred years this creature perpetually tormented the ponies of Equestria with wanton chaos, and the ponies of Equestria despaired.
However all was not lost for there arose two sisters who drew forth power form the very heavens. It is not recorded where these goddesses came from or who they were before, but it is known that they were the ones to finally stand up to Discord’s madness. One drew fourth power from the moon at night and another drew it forth from the sun at dawn. However even their great powers were unable to defeat him alone. And so in order to quell the madness that was Discord, the sisters harnessed the powers of a sacred relic, THE RED STONE OF AJA. With its holy power the sisters were finally able to destroy Discord and reestablish a civilization for the three races of ponies.
However this peace would not last, for evil can find refuge in even the purest of hearts. The younger sister who controlled the night, slowly grew jealous of her sister who controlled the day. Her elder sister was beloved by all and could do no wrong, while she was treated with suspicion and fear. The ponies of the world revered her as a saint for her ability to control the power of the Red Stone of Aja, while they looked down on her younger sister for her inability to tap directly into its infinite powers. “Only Celestia, Goddess of the sun can control the power of the stone, why should we show our respect for her little sister, the Goddess of the night?”
Consumed by her hatred and jealousy for her sister the princess of the night drew upon the darkest magic and transformed herself into a wicked mare of darkness, Nightmare Moon. Threatening to bathe the land in perpetual night and destroy all life, the eldest sister was forced to use the power of the Stone against her own sister, sealing her away in the moon. For the next thousand years the eldest sister Celestia, would rule the land of Equestria with fairness and mercy establishing a lasting peace that spanned for one thousand years.
But behind the one thousand years of peace that has blossomed in Equestria, a dark malevolence flourishes; a hatred has festered in the dark corners of the world now sets its sights on pony kind once again. A dark shadow of a cursed destiny begins to bring the peaceful land of Equestria to ruin and wash away all that pony kind holds dear. Will a hero emerge that can challenge this as of yet corrupted destiny? Will pony kind prevail against this dark hatred that seeks to destroy it? Or will this dark curse destroy everything, wiping away the future?"
"This is the story of those who sought to challenge fate itself and secure a lasting peace not built on the strength of their magic, but on the strength of their hearts.”
Uhhh...
Just so you know, that might annoy some Discord fans, like, a lot. I mean, the supposed killing of him will just make them sad, but they could have some hope of him returning later because he'd Discord. People just don't like it when personalities change, even if the fic is marked Alternate Universe.
I read part of your next chapter before I stopped myself, and Twilight is great. (I haven't read Jojo's Bizarre Adventure and don't want to spoil it now that I've seen this.) I think you just tried too hard to fit the crossover mold here. You could instead say something like: 'it was believed Discord had a hatred for ponies that far surpassed any other. Why else would he subject them to such chaos?' Or maybe you could just use Tirek or something.
6194347 I am a huge Discord fan (He is my favorite villian) and I don't mind him being changed a bit. I enjoy reading things where characters that I love are corrupted or killed. Maybe I'm just that dark.
I get your point though. Some people are extremely protective of their favorite characters. I, for one, would not enjoy someone outright telling my Derpy is offensive, but if their character said something negative about Derpy in their story and they didn't mean it themselves then I would be fine. It all depends on the presentation, and with an AU you can do almost anything you like.
~Fuzzygecko
Okay, here we go;
Second long shouldn't have a capital letter.
After earth ponies there should be a comma.
forth
Meant to be forth
The younger sister
After Celestia there should be a comma
Take away the a
Just a small question but didn't the Elements of Harmony defeat Nightmare Moon?
I really like your writing technique, it's slow and steady. Plus I like the way that you added some of your ideas with the back story that we already know. However there are just a few grammar and spelling errors here and there.You set a reasonable story, the tension is building and I'm on the edge of my seat.
Onwards to the next chapter
YEAH!! JoJo's Bizarre Adventure for life!!!
It's like, my new favorite anime!!
Okay I'm new to this story...... but who's the Dio Brando of this?
Uhhh because of they just said? They should respect her because she's a goddess? Their heads must be wrapped in irony.
Oh also
*forth (or 'from' since you probably don't want to use the word in the same sentence twice)
7448869 It's Equestria, the land populated by sentient horses incapable of asking follow-up questions, looking at things from a pragmatical point of view or recognizing that other people have different personalities without spending a whole day learning about that different personality.
Well... Do i see the right that the Elements of Harmony don't exist, Discord was pretty mutch killed off and Stands didn't have a part in this so far?
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Lo malo de este crossover es que no hay poses.