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Okay ahem... Iv'e been a fan of mlp since the summer of 2014. My favorite character Sunset Shimmer why? Because she's so cool

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After the battle of the bands there is a new competition arising at CHS. The friendship games takes place every year sadly though The Wonderbolts never won the games can Sunset Shimmer and her friends overcome CHS curse?

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Looks interesting! I can't wait for the Friendship Games! :pinkiehappy: Here's some errors to correct so the story flows better! :twilightsmile:

"Hmm this is defiantly strange Spike." Twilight Sparkle said adjusting her glasses.

"Hmm, this is defiantly strange, Spike," Twilight Sparkle said, adjusting her glasses.

"Well there is a event coming up soon at these schools. If I just enrolled in one of them then surly i'll be able to solve this mystery. Besides I need to stop being cooped up in this basement I know i'm home schooled but I'm tired of being alone Spike. I always see people hanging out , and having fun.
That's something I never had in my life, and I most certainly do not want to end up all alone forever." Twilight said looking up at Spike and smiled a little. Spike barked agreeing with her.

"Well, there's an event coming up soon at these schools. If I just enrolled in one of them, the surely I'll be able to solve this mystery! Besides, I need to stop being cooped up in the basement! I know I'm home schooled, but I'm tired of being alone, Spike. I see kids hanging out and having fun. That's something I haven't had in my life, and I most certainly do not want to end up alone forever." Twilight finished her rant and looked at Spike, smiling slightly. Spike barked, agreeing with her.

"Um why Canterlot High you do know i'm the Principal at Crystal prep right are you trying to help Canterlot high win this year!?" Shining said in a angry voice.

"Um, why Canterlot High? You do know I'm the Principal at Crystal Prep, right? Are you trying to help Canterlot High win this year?!" Shining exclaimed angrily.

:yay: I can't wait for more!

Thank you so much :pinkiehappy: I'm glad you're enjoying the story do you think until I get the hang of where all of the pununcuation marks go do you mind helping me out until I get the hang of it?

and now a magical unicorn

*alicorn

Insert other grammatical and spelling errors. Great plot, but I suggest an editor.

If the human counterpart of Twilight Sparkle was here then that means that Princess Twilight can't come back here even in emergency.

Yay, someone who understands! :yay::pinkiehappy: Can't wait for more!

6025868 Of course! :twilightsmile: (Sorry I didn't respond earlier.) I can Private Message you later!

6026236 Yeah, but if you improve the grammar it will sound nicer! :pinkiehappy:

Didn't you defeated them with our counterparts?"

Didn't you defeat them with our counterparts?"

Nice chapter! :twilightsmile:

Sry about not posting in awhile heres the next chapter tell me what you guys think don't:worry its not going off topic or anything like that :pinkiehappy:

It's Wondercolts. Also, why doesn't this story have a alternate universe tag?

7012084 I didn't notice it didn't have that my apologies I'll add the tag and yeah Ik I thought when I first watched the EQG series I thought they said Wonderbolts so I used that but then I relized it was Wondercolts I was like great. So sorry for those errors I'm planning on a possible rewrite in the future.

"Do you mind waiting on the others while I go and make us some tea? This will take awhile to explain. I'm going to write to Twilight and tell her to bring the others. We might have a new enemy in the near future and it could be Starswirled the bearded himself."

Anyone going to wager that twilight is not going to be happy about this being as she freaking idolizes Starswirl

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