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Sheltie Paws

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Soarin decides to show his affection for Rainbow Dash by giving her a pie. But is it worth the troubles and pains? Soarin travels all over Cloudsdale bakeries for the pie, but something always seems to go wrong, and he ends up leaving empty hoofed. Rainbow is leaving Cloudsdale the next day. Will Soarin find the pie in time?

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 39 )

What to do, what to do? he thought

When he said that I was like 'a pie, that's it! There's only just one way, to win rainbows heart at best' :rainbowlaugh:

Found one typo: Should be Cloudsdale

"Alright then Soarin, you better get cracking. Rainbow's leaving Clouddale tommorow." Fire Streak said, assuming Soarin already knew.
"What!? Shes leaving tomorrow!? WHY HAVEN'T YOU TOLD ME THIS BEFORE!?" Soarin screamed. He grabbed Fire Streak by the shoulders forand shook him vigorously.

6043419 , I have another story I'm working on, but I will try to update.:pinkiesmile:

6049681 , mines gramarrs gooder than is youses.

6077150 , OK, thanks for the tips!

Poor Soarin' lost his pie :raritycry: Too bad RD isn't there to catch it this time.

Great job. I love this- and yes, Cloudsdale Pie Club Rules. Maybe if it catches on, AJ can start one in Ponyville? lol :ajsmug:

Can't wait for the next chapter!

I bet everypony will be staring at him like
Sheesh dude, you do realise that she leaves tommorow, right :ajbemused:
Anyways good chapter :pinkiehappy: I would have read it earlier, but for some reason it didn't appear in my feed til now :raritydespair:

This chapter didn't appear in my feed. I was lucky that I saw it during my search in Soarin tag stories. And I was really lucky. This chapter was so AWESOME!:pinkiehappy::heart:

This Story is AMAZING. OMYGOSHOMYGOSHOMYGOSH. I will track this story down and read
It every single day!!!!:raritystarry::pinkiehappy::ajsmug:

6111244 , sorry, but new chapters mosrt likely won't be coming out soon.:fluttershysad:

This is so not your day Soarin XD

This chapter surprised me a bit. I wouldn't expect the bullies to treat Soarin that way! :pinkiegasp: I mean, they DO know he's a Wonderbolt, right?

Anyway, great job. I feel soooo bad for Soarin. The guy really needs to be cut some slack. He's gonna be broke pretty soon if this keeps up. :rainbowlaugh: I can't wait to see what troubles befall him next. XP

Good luck! :raritywink:

6318411 , it was a bit rushed. The bullies seem to have simple minds, so I guess they were in food mode. As for disasters, I do have some ideas......:pinkiecrazy:

6318902 Uh oh, should I be worried for Soarin's safety? :fluttershysad:

6319112 , (read in an ominous voice) of course not my dear......:pinkiecrazy:

6039535 Don't forget cherry that should be considered, then we'll know for sure which flavours the winner something that's awesome and cool just like her :rainbowlaugh:

NOOOOOOOoOoooOOOOOOOOO00000000000000°°°°°°@@@@@@@@@ MOAR :flutterrage:

i was already into the story on the first paragraph. PIE! I LOVE PIE! Pumpkin? Apple? Cherry? Pear? lemon? Key lime? Lemon and key lime? I LOVE THEM ALL! never one have i disliked pie!
P.S. I also like pecan and peanut butter, and...etc


Sorry, *Calms self* usually i am not like this, but your story has lit a fire in my soul.......PIE PIE PIE PIE PIE PIE.........

omyomyomyomyomyomyomyomyomy!!!!!!!!!!! O MY BLUEBERRY PIE! I WILL MURDER THEM! POOR SOARIN! (Although it would be delicious)

my soul urges you to make more chapters!:pinkiesad2: please? *big eyes*

6675261 , *tries super hard to resist big eyes* I'm starting another story right now, but I will update after that.

I think he forgot a minor detail. Rainbow dash doesn't like any types of pies

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