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OhboyTime

OhboyTime #1 · Jul 13th, 2015 · · · Every journey has its beginning ·

Wet dreams, dank memes?

Eh, I don't really like it. The writing's not the best, and the concept unoriginal. But, then again. Should I have expected anything different?

Blaze Fury

Blaze Fury #2 · Jul 13th, 2015 · · · Destruction ·

Hey For anyone whos reading this and has or will dislike this fic, please comment on why you dislike it so in the future I can make it better. That really is all I ask of you readers.

Blaze Fury

Blaze Fury #3 · Jul 16th, 2015 · · · Meetings ·

6201075 What do you mean by that?

LongJohn 03

LongJohn 03 #4 · Jul 16th, 2015 · 1 · · Meetings ·

Necrogen Lord

Necrogen Lord #5 · Jul 22nd, 2015 · · · Meetings ·

Okay, right off the bat, I think this would have been better if you had made it with your own crew, like your friends or someone you know that isn't YouTube-famous. Also, if you wanted it to be with the crew's story, I'd say that you should have the perspective as entirely the GTA character, instead of someone playing GTA.

Necrogen Lord

Necrogen Lord #6 · Jul 22nd, 2015 · · · Meetings ·

This definitely has potential if rewritten, and I think that if you put a bit more work into it, it'll definitely be worth Favoriting. For now, an upvote for concept and enthusiasm.

Blaze Fury

Blaze Fury #7 · Jul 22nd, 2015 · · · Meetings ·

6231799 Thanks,

DAMN HAMSTER

DAMN HAMSTER #8 · Aug 23rd, 2015 · · 3 · Meetings ·

The concept is unoriginal and rather off-putting. The self-insert with wish fulfillment HiE premise really doesn't do fanfiction any favors.

Blaze Fury

Blaze Fury #9 · Aug 23rd, 2015 · · · Meetings ·

6348363 well I may cancel this story.

Chad

Chad #10 · Dec 22nd, 2015 · · · Every journey has its beginning ·

Self inserts are always such a bore. Anyways, I feel like you could have done something better with the Gta thing. You all became mercenaries that work for the military, why not be criminals? You could have chosen a million different games to be a mercenary soldier, but why be one in a crime game?

Blaze Fury