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The mutant sisters Celestia and Luna have opened the doors to their home in the hope that they can create a safe haven for young mutants. For three months over the summer a group of friends will do their best to help their fellow students learn to grow as humans, as mutants, and as family.

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Comments ( 47 )

OMG! Nice idea. Dang. Just......Dang. MORE PLEASE! +1

Nice opening, dude. Love how their powers reflect their skills. Don't take this the wrong way but, Applejack has hooves? Really? Couldn't have gone with plain old super strength and bulletproof skin, or something. But loved the cowgirl joke. That just had to be there. Keep it up!

Wow, great start! I'm even more excited for this now. I wasn't expecting to see Surprise in this (perhaps appropriately). ^^

There's a few rough spots - you switch tenses a few times at the beginning, and some parts feel a little unclear to me. Also this:

From a bush next to the tree that Gilda had been leaning against there came a noise like a cork being popped. Then from out of the bush stood a teenage girl that could simply be described in one word. Pink.

Is that from an early draft? It seems out-of-place in this chapter.

But those are minor quibbles on what looks to be the start of a nifty fic. Looking forward to more!

6013482 Thanks. I had to put that joke in after giving her hooves. I could only think of two abilities for her. Strength, and something plant based. Plenty of other characters tI give plant powers to. Trust me there's a story line for her.

6013513 Thanks. SURPRISE! I'm always looking to improve. Pinkie will be...well not so much explained as... I can't really say right now cause spoilers, but she will have lines next chapter.

6013685

The problem is more that this bit doesn't really seem to fit the flow of the story. Gilda says "she's eccentric", but since we haven't seen the pink girl do anything yet, there's no grounds for Gilda to say that. Especially since she just met Surprise, and Surprise is eccentric.

6013685 okay. I'll take your word for it. Cant wait to see how this unfolds.

6013706 ah, ok, sorry about that but it will be in the next chapter that I show that they didn't see Pinkie at all. They were talking about Surprise. I'll see about fixing that.

Nice chapter. Pretty sure that was Mac and AJ back at the air show. Nicely done. This needs to he continued.

6217685 huh?

6218200 Thank you. Btw I figured out how Fluttershy's powers will be different from in your story.

6218696 I'll send a p.m. on it. Can't risk spoilers.

6218721 true. Also, nice touch making Pinkie a shapeshifter. Also, Hilda has a sad past. :fluttercry: Kinda what I had in mind for Eve in my story, but I decided to go for less sad and more like The Flash.

6218541 as soon as you mentioned Gilda keeping on her jacket, I immediately thought wings.

6219435 Ah, she also keeps her hands in her pockets a lot.

6219733 :eeyup:

I'm not worried about keeping that part to myself because she mentioned claws when talking about attacking her dad.

6219777 True. Hey, did you see my question on your user page?

Nice. Fourth richest? Guessing Celestia is third.:rainbowlaugh: I liked the protest. Mind if I steal the idea?:trollestia: Also, congrats to Nocturnis Comics and FelineFluff! Your characters are amazing. Also,

"She isn't in charge of detention is she?"

:rainbowlaugh: I'd rather fight Tirek!

6423056 thanks. Quick edit: Nocturnis is supposed to have white hair, fixing now.

6423056 use it if you like.
6010991 have you kept up with it?

6423407 Thanks. Also, I'm taking you up on the Scary Story offer.

Things are looking nice and established so far. Looking forward to the real show starting soon.

6425377 Keep in mind that this is slice of life. Super heroic adventures are a side effect of being a powered human, but the focus for now is on them being at the school.

However I will be including the past adventures of Celestia and Luna which are actual superhero adventures.

6425468
Well, this is Gilda we're talking about. Attitude. Delinquency. Add in an early series Dash as a co-conspirator, and I can't exactly see them attending and being good little students the whole time, to say nothing of remaining on campus. Top all that off with superpowers (we've already seen those wings of hers are functional) and things can't stay pedestrian and boring forever.

6425477 All true. Though there is the whole her teacher has the power of Thor thing. Not saying Luna would challenge her to fight or anything but still.

Each character will have their personalities modified according to how I feel they would be in the Marvel universe so some ooc should be expected.

In fact if you go back to chapter2 you will find a hint at how Rarity is different. It's not a happy one.

OMG YUUUS!!!! Mutant Feline is the best:yay: Thank you for using my oc in this awesome fic!!:pinkiehappy:

6425763 :yay:

Do you like her possible ship?

6425784 IDK Who's oc it is XD

6425816 Nocturnis Comics

She will probably stay as a little sister character for him as he will already be getting chased by any girl who isn't a main character.

I'm gonna take a shot in the dark and say that the girl is screw ball

6587914 I was thinking maybe Eris as the daughter of Discord instead of the Rule 63 version of him.

Screwball... Oh, this is go an be fun.:pinkiehappy:

I like this. It doesn't seem super different, but at the same time, it helps move the story along at just the right pace.

6669921 Which is exactly what I needed to get myself going.

6669861 Well that's always a compliment. Thanks.

Expect the next update in December.

6669973 Just don't expect a Christmas chapter because this takes place over the summer.

6670020 you can do a chapter where the girls talk about past Christmas experiences.

The feels.:rainbowkiss: I'm loving this.

Hhhhhmmmm how long until the x-mens usual streak of recruiting angsty assholes screw over gilda and the girls

6670233 Or Storm can show up.

6670718 :yay:

6670746 *shrug*

6670973 sorry but how many women as scott summers screwed over

This fic. I like it. I can't wait for more:pinkiehappy:.

7082050 Woo hoo! I've got the next chapter started. Taking my time on it, though, because I want to be sure I get it right.

Gilda is Angel.
Fluttershy is Angel and Nina.
Rainbow Dash is Quicksilver.
Applejack is a centar/satar.
Pinkie Pie is Mystike.

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